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I've listed this article for peer review because I think it's almost prepared for a GA nomination. However, before of nomination I want someone to check it again since
Baffle gab1978 did a copy-edit but recommended that I came here.
First paragraph, concision. His attending of the school because of Mamori Anezaki is unnecessary detail. Combine Sena's abilites sentence with Yoichi Hiruma's notice sentence. Riku does not need to be mentioned. After trimming, you can combine it with the second paragraph.
Overall concision in the plot section
Source the director change. The links themselves don't give episode numbers or anything.
You can just source it with the episode credits if its there.
Ref 3, 18, 29 are dead. Why isn't 29 in a citeweb template?
Be consistent with date style
"but before its completion, the streaming service was shut down" Source doesn't say that? Source confirms it shut down though.
Citation needed in CD. You can source them primary I guess. From my experience, I usually find a theme song list from the anime's site.
Personal preference on my part but you can add spaces to citeweb/book so its easier to navigate
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I guess I fixed all issues you pointed:
I have concised the plot even discarding some fait divers.
I cannot find a reliable source for the director change since the only sources I have is the Japanese Wikipedia and the Anime News Network (the encyclopedia).
I archived all of them, and I removed the former 29 source.
I guess all dates are in the "M D, Y" format.
I cannot find a reliable source for this, and my only source is
Toonami Jetstream article, so I removed it and put new information from reliable sources.
I's like the plot, the source is the own series; but if really necessary, the TV Tokyo site lists the opening and ending themes, although the site only show the currently (or the last) op and end theme, in other words it wiil be necessary to use the Web Archive, and cite in pairs, that will result in a lot of sources.
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I think it's almost prepared for a GA nomination. However, before of nomination I want someone to check it again since
Baffle gab1978 did a copy-edit but recommended that I came here.
First paragraph, concision. His attending of the school because of Mamori Anezaki is unnecessary detail. Combine Sena's abilites sentence with Yoichi Hiruma's notice sentence. Riku does not need to be mentioned. After trimming, you can combine it with the second paragraph.
Overall concision in the plot section
Source the director change. The links themselves don't give episode numbers or anything.
You can just source it with the episode credits if its there.
Ref 3, 18, 29 are dead. Why isn't 29 in a citeweb template?
Be consistent with date style
"but before its completion, the streaming service was shut down" Source doesn't say that? Source confirms it shut down though.
Citation needed in CD. You can source them primary I guess. From my experience, I usually find a theme song list from the anime's site.
Personal preference on my part but you can add spaces to citeweb/book so its easier to navigate
Comments
I guess I fixed all issues you pointed:
I have concised the plot even discarding some fait divers.
I cannot find a reliable source for the director change since the only sources I have is the Japanese Wikipedia and the Anime News Network (the encyclopedia).
I archived all of them, and I removed the former 29 source.
I guess all dates are in the "M D, Y" format.
I cannot find a reliable source for this, and my only source is
Toonami Jetstream article, so I removed it and put new information from reliable sources.
I's like the plot, the source is the own series; but if really necessary, the TV Tokyo site lists the opening and ending themes, although the site only show the currently (or the last) op and end theme, in other words it wiil be necessary to use the Web Archive, and cite in pairs, that will result in a lot of sources.