While I write a lot of articles, it's been quite a while since I've had one featured, and I thought I might try again. I've had this looked over by a few people, and I've fixed the problems brought to me so far, but I'd really appreciate any feedback or copyediting anyone can give me.
Ambi02:07, 29 December 2005 (UTC)reply
I think you pretty much squeezed everything about this girl, but it just doesn't seem like a FA. Like the article just describes her career's ups and downs. How about something more, going beyond netballing?
Renata320:24, 29 December 2005 (UTC)reply
I'm really not sure what else you'd expect it to say. I've put in there just about everything I could find about her beyond her netball, and I'm really not sure there's anything else which is notable, let alone verifiable.
Ambi00:05, 30 December 2005 (UTC)reply
That's pretty much my point. There is nothing much too add (you have squeezed everything possible; and that alone is pretty tremendous). But at the current state I don't think it will succeed in FAC. Just the person is not mature/old/notable enough (IMHO).
Renata300:14, 30 December 2005 (UTC)reply
That's not an actionable objection, so wouldn't really come into it at FAC. I'm looking for things I can actually fix.
Ambi02:25, 30 December 2005 (UTC)reply
While I write a lot of articles, it's been quite a while since I've had one featured, and I thought I might try again. I've had this looked over by a few people, and I've fixed the problems brought to me so far, but I'd really appreciate any feedback or copyediting anyone can give me.
Ambi02:07, 29 December 2005 (UTC)reply
I think you pretty much squeezed everything about this girl, but it just doesn't seem like a FA. Like the article just describes her career's ups and downs. How about something more, going beyond netballing?
Renata320:24, 29 December 2005 (UTC)reply
I'm really not sure what else you'd expect it to say. I've put in there just about everything I could find about her beyond her netball, and I'm really not sure there's anything else which is notable, let alone verifiable.
Ambi00:05, 30 December 2005 (UTC)reply
That's pretty much my point. There is nothing much too add (you have squeezed everything possible; and that alone is pretty tremendous). But at the current state I don't think it will succeed in FAC. Just the person is not mature/old/notable enough (IMHO).
Renata300:14, 30 December 2005 (UTC)reply
That's not an actionable objection, so wouldn't really come into it at FAC. I'm looking for things I can actually fix.
Ambi02:25, 30 December 2005 (UTC)reply