This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review in preparation for taking it to
WP:FAC. I did the GA reviews for it, including a close look through the sourcing, and I believe the article is already pretty close to FA standard (although this is my first run at trying to take something through the FA process, so what do I know!). I'm not the main author of the article,
User:Jackhynes did most of the recent content work, but Jack was gracious and
said he'd be OK with me trying to take it to FA.
1 lb (0.5 kg)—very unusual to give Imperial precedence in any science article, let alone one for a species not native to the US. Also inconsistent with the description section
grammatical structure, which is acquired. —seems to fade away, perhaps a couple of words to indicate how is it acquired?
Y - the point the article is trying to make here is that grammatical structure is a feature that must be acquired, and isn't innate... tried to reword to emphasize this Zad6804:32, 28 May 2013 (UTC)reply
five percent of its previous size. —I assume you mean area
in French—Colombia is Spanish-speaking, no justification I can see for having French, German Russian or any other languages
Y removed... I looked into maybe whether the main conservation union used French officially, the IUCN is a Swiss organization, no compelling reason to keep French. Zad6819:34, 28 May 2013 (UTC)reply
The species was first described by Linnaeus in 1758—not under that name though, Simia oedipus according to p. 28 of
Systema Naturae.
Y I think, I tried to explain how they're modified with some copyediting, suggestions for improvement how to word it welcome. Zad6820:30, 28 May 2013 (UTC)reply
The species is now protected by international law, and although they are numerous in captivity, they are still critically endangered in the wild—changes from singular to plural
Up to you, but as a layman there seems to be so much on communication that the article may be a bit unbalanced
I investigated exactly that in doing the GA reviews, and found perhaps the most noteworthy thing about these fuzzy little dudes is their communication, it'd be easy to demonstrate that using secondary sources if the question came up. Zad6817:56, 21 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"snake" and "hawk" are a bit vague, particularly the latter where even the definition is vague. The list of predators seems minimal—no eagles or large owls?
PMID18473378 identifies "white hawk, jaguar, and tayra"
? Source cited says "intestinal parasites" and that's reflected in the article, external parasites wasn't covered, not sure what further content change you might be looking for here? Zad6814:18, 30 May 2013 (UTC)reply
Check that book refs have a publisher, and give location for all or none. Also isbn
Y all books have a publisher, they are all consistent about location (none), all books that have ISBNs I could find now have that field filled in Zad6804:01, 31 May 2013 (UTC)reply
You will find that at FAC consistency is important. A wide variety of reference styles are acceptable, but you must stick rigidly to whatever practice you adopt
I have absolutely no "religion" when it comes to citation style and will happily redo all the refs to make them consistent. Can you point me to an existing FA that has a ref style I can copy? I'll just use whatever it is, I don't really care. Zad6817:54, 21 May 2013 (UTC)reply
You misunderstand me, you've used the cite family consistently, which is fine, but you need to make sure that
you meet mos requirements such as a publisher for all citewebs and an isbn and publisher for all citebooks unless too old, page numbers for book refs
Need to find specific page numbers for:
Defler 2004 - ? no searchable text online, may need to find another source
Eisenberg 1999 - Y chapter 9, pages 230-
Estrada 2006 - Y page 35
Garber 1993 - Y hopefully, cite is localized to a specific chapter, about 25 pages
Hershkovitz 1977 - Y also localized to the specific 2 book chapters
after the mandatory mos, you are consistent as to which fields you use, so for books give location for all or none, consistent access date style for citewebs, show PDF or not, page range style (101–106 or 101–6) Jimfbleak - talk to me?19:27, 21 May 2013 (UTC)reply
All in-article refs made uniform, but it looks like I will have to go into all the individual DOI templates and muck with all of them now, they are all cite journals Zad6804:03, 31 May 2013 (UTC)reply
Y done now, all DOI template are uniform
Final trawl
Ref 9 has no pages and you shouldn't have caps unless it's actually an acronym
Refs 10 and 16 have only the start of a page name
Refs 47, 48. If you don't know the author, it's normal to leave blank
It's not a requirement to alternate image placements. In particular, one of you left-aligned displaces a heading, which I can't say I like. However, that's up to you
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review in preparation for taking it to
WP:FAC. I did the GA reviews for it, including a close look through the sourcing, and I believe the article is already pretty close to FA standard (although this is my first run at trying to take something through the FA process, so what do I know!). I'm not the main author of the article,
User:Jackhynes did most of the recent content work, but Jack was gracious and
said he'd be OK with me trying to take it to FA.
1 lb (0.5 kg)—very unusual to give Imperial precedence in any science article, let alone one for a species not native to the US. Also inconsistent with the description section
grammatical structure, which is acquired. —seems to fade away, perhaps a couple of words to indicate how is it acquired?
Y - the point the article is trying to make here is that grammatical structure is a feature that must be acquired, and isn't innate... tried to reword to emphasize this Zad6804:32, 28 May 2013 (UTC)reply
five percent of its previous size. —I assume you mean area
in French—Colombia is Spanish-speaking, no justification I can see for having French, German Russian or any other languages
Y removed... I looked into maybe whether the main conservation union used French officially, the IUCN is a Swiss organization, no compelling reason to keep French. Zad6819:34, 28 May 2013 (UTC)reply
The species was first described by Linnaeus in 1758—not under that name though, Simia oedipus according to p. 28 of
Systema Naturae.
Y I think, I tried to explain how they're modified with some copyediting, suggestions for improvement how to word it welcome. Zad6820:30, 28 May 2013 (UTC)reply
The species is now protected by international law, and although they are numerous in captivity, they are still critically endangered in the wild—changes from singular to plural
Up to you, but as a layman there seems to be so much on communication that the article may be a bit unbalanced
I investigated exactly that in doing the GA reviews, and found perhaps the most noteworthy thing about these fuzzy little dudes is their communication, it'd be easy to demonstrate that using secondary sources if the question came up. Zad6817:56, 21 May 2013 (UTC)reply
"snake" and "hawk" are a bit vague, particularly the latter where even the definition is vague. The list of predators seems minimal—no eagles or large owls?
PMID18473378 identifies "white hawk, jaguar, and tayra"
? Source cited says "intestinal parasites" and that's reflected in the article, external parasites wasn't covered, not sure what further content change you might be looking for here? Zad6814:18, 30 May 2013 (UTC)reply
Check that book refs have a publisher, and give location for all or none. Also isbn
Y all books have a publisher, they are all consistent about location (none), all books that have ISBNs I could find now have that field filled in Zad6804:01, 31 May 2013 (UTC)reply
You will find that at FAC consistency is important. A wide variety of reference styles are acceptable, but you must stick rigidly to whatever practice you adopt
I have absolutely no "religion" when it comes to citation style and will happily redo all the refs to make them consistent. Can you point me to an existing FA that has a ref style I can copy? I'll just use whatever it is, I don't really care. Zad6817:54, 21 May 2013 (UTC)reply
You misunderstand me, you've used the cite family consistently, which is fine, but you need to make sure that
you meet mos requirements such as a publisher for all citewebs and an isbn and publisher for all citebooks unless too old, page numbers for book refs
Need to find specific page numbers for:
Defler 2004 - ? no searchable text online, may need to find another source
Eisenberg 1999 - Y chapter 9, pages 230-
Estrada 2006 - Y page 35
Garber 1993 - Y hopefully, cite is localized to a specific chapter, about 25 pages
Hershkovitz 1977 - Y also localized to the specific 2 book chapters
after the mandatory mos, you are consistent as to which fields you use, so for books give location for all or none, consistent access date style for citewebs, show PDF or not, page range style (101–106 or 101–6) Jimfbleak - talk to me?19:27, 21 May 2013 (UTC)reply
All in-article refs made uniform, but it looks like I will have to go into all the individual DOI templates and muck with all of them now, they are all cite journals Zad6804:03, 31 May 2013 (UTC)reply
Y done now, all DOI template are uniform
Final trawl
Ref 9 has no pages and you shouldn't have caps unless it's actually an acronym
Refs 10 and 16 have only the start of a page name
Refs 47, 48. If you don't know the author, it's normal to leave blank
It's not a requirement to alternate image placements. In particular, one of you left-aligned displaces a heading, which I can't say I like. However, that's up to you