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I've listed this article for peer review because i want to see if i am on the right track with editing my article and to get suggestion on what i need to fix.
Thanks, Mmc cyclone ( talk) 04:55, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
This will be quite harsh because this is no where near ready for GA nomination or FAC. I suggest you do more editing than swapping two words and adding a single reference line (incorrectly I might add, as instead of one reference appearing in your "References" section, it appears multiple times). It also took me about 3 seconds to notice that your "jgames" website has its information TAKEN from the wikipedia article you are editing. How can it be that you are citing yourself? If this is not a form of plagarism it is certainly unethical and a poor attempt to "cheat" the system. That being said, I suggest you fix the following:
Overall, this article needs a lot of work but it is do-able. Food Puma 23:15, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
This peer review discussion has been closed.
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because i want to see if i am on the right track with editing my article and to get suggestion on what i need to fix.
Thanks, Mmc cyclone ( talk) 04:55, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
This will be quite harsh because this is no where near ready for GA nomination or FAC. I suggest you do more editing than swapping two words and adding a single reference line (incorrectly I might add, as instead of one reference appearing in your "References" section, it appears multiple times). It also took me about 3 seconds to notice that your "jgames" website has its information TAKEN from the wikipedia article you are editing. How can it be that you are citing yourself? If this is not a form of plagarism it is certainly unethical and a poor attempt to "cheat" the system. That being said, I suggest you fix the following:
Overall, this article needs a lot of work but it is do-able. Food Puma 23:15, 21 November 2008 (UTC)