When I first found the article it was full of directory information: addresses, telephone numbers, links laying around EVERYWHERE. I'd just like general info about what needs to be done with the article, and help if you're willing to give it. -- Daniel Olsen 04:03, 16 September 2006 (UTC)
There is already a good article inside. It still needs some pruning, though you have made very substantial progress. I would recomend the following reordering: Intro, Geography, People and Culture, Infrastructure (tighten), History (tighten), Government, References.
Serious question: if the article is Chinatown, should it be highlighting Asians and Asian-Americans anywhere in Oakland? If not, the history could be considerably reduced, the subsection Other Asian-American Oaklanders (quite long) could go in its entirety.
40 websites seems a lot. (this is the first time I have responded to a request for peer review. if i am way off base, let me know) Jd2718 02:51, 17 September 2006 (UTC)
There may be some copyright concerns. Compare to this site. Lagringa 07:25, 17 September 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[1]You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, BrianSmithson 12:55, 18 September 2006 (UTC)
The article is very listy, notables aren't referenced, and the sections don't conform to WP:LAYOUT. Sandy 21:49, 1 October 2006 (UTC)
When I first found the article it was full of directory information: addresses, telephone numbers, links laying around EVERYWHERE. I'd just like general info about what needs to be done with the article, and help if you're willing to give it. -- Daniel Olsen 04:03, 16 September 2006 (UTC)
There is already a good article inside. It still needs some pruning, though you have made very substantial progress. I would recomend the following reordering: Intro, Geography, People and Culture, Infrastructure (tighten), History (tighten), Government, References.
Serious question: if the article is Chinatown, should it be highlighting Asians and Asian-Americans anywhere in Oakland? If not, the history could be considerably reduced, the subsection Other Asian-American Oaklanders (quite long) could go in its entirety.
40 websites seems a lot. (this is the first time I have responded to a request for peer review. if i am way off base, let me know) Jd2718 02:51, 17 September 2006 (UTC)
There may be some copyright concerns. Compare to this site. Lagringa 07:25, 17 September 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[1]You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, BrianSmithson 12:55, 18 September 2006 (UTC)
The article is very listy, notables aren't referenced, and the sections don't conform to WP:LAYOUT. Sandy 21:49, 1 October 2006 (UTC)