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- Lead is odd - first sentence is, in my opinion, too long, then followed by three or four really short sentences. Work could be done to improve the flow of this.
- O.K.-- TonyTheTiger ( t/ c/ bio/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:LOTM) 05:27, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- It's rare to see "USA" these days in these articles, I'd expect to see "Chicago, Illinois in the United States."
- O.K.-- TonyTheTiger ( t/ c/ bio/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:LOTM) 05:27, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Too many images really for such a short article. I'd choose one because right now you're squashing all the text between images and infoboxes, which should be avoided per
WP:MOS#Images.
- These are very important images for this article. The non-infobox images show exactly what kinds of things make this space moderately notable.-- TonyTheTiger ( t/ c/ bio/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:LOTM) 05:27, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Year range needs to use en-dash, not hyphen, per
WP:DASH.
- O.K.-- TonyTheTiger ( t/ c/ bio/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:LOTM) 05:30, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- "were a bit cramped" is that a quote? If so put it in quotes, if not "a bit cramped" is far from encyclopedic.
- Is tightly bunched better than cramped? Here is the quote: "But the narrower and shorter Boeing Galleries restricted the artist to only midsize sculptures and, if the two to the north have ample space around them, the three to the south still look cramped."-- TonyTheTiger ( t/ c/ bio/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:LOTM) 05:46, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Avoid capital letter outbursts in the references.
- O.K.-- TonyTheTiger ( t/ c/ bio/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:LOTM) 05:34, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- There must be a more accurate category to add this to?
- How is Category:Open air museums?
- A script has been used to generate a semi- automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for September 2008.
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I've listed this article for peer review because
Torsodog (
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Millennium Park for
WP:GTC and this article needs to be audited as too short for
WP:GA.--
TonyTheTiger (
t/
c/
bio/
WP:CHICAGO/
WP:LOTM)
00:47, 13 September 2008 (UTC)
- Comments
- Lead is odd - first sentence is, in my opinion, too long, then followed by three or four really short sentences. Work could be done to improve the flow of this.
- O.K.-- TonyTheTiger ( t/ c/ bio/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:LOTM) 05:27, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- It's rare to see "USA" these days in these articles, I'd expect to see "Chicago, Illinois in the United States."
- O.K.-- TonyTheTiger ( t/ c/ bio/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:LOTM) 05:27, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Too many images really for such a short article. I'd choose one because right now you're squashing all the text between images and infoboxes, which should be avoided per
WP:MOS#Images.
- These are very important images for this article. The non-infobox images show exactly what kinds of things make this space moderately notable.-- TonyTheTiger ( t/ c/ bio/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:LOTM) 05:27, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Year range needs to use en-dash, not hyphen, per
WP:DASH.
- O.K.-- TonyTheTiger ( t/ c/ bio/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:LOTM) 05:30, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- "were a bit cramped" is that a quote? If so put it in quotes, if not "a bit cramped" is far from encyclopedic.
- Is tightly bunched better than cramped? Here is the quote: "But the narrower and shorter Boeing Galleries restricted the artist to only midsize sculptures and, if the two to the north have ample space around them, the three to the south still look cramped."-- TonyTheTiger ( t/ c/ bio/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:LOTM) 05:46, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Avoid capital letter outbursts in the references.
- O.K.-- TonyTheTiger ( t/ c/ bio/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:LOTM) 05:34, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- There must be a more accurate category to add this to?
- How is Category:Open air museums?