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Chaparral 2F


I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to see what it takes to make this a featured article. Specifically, focus on article tone, lede, and summary style.

Thanks, X750. Spin a yarn? Articles I've screwed over? 10:03, 8 June 2024 (UTC) reply

Hi, great article! The lede generally looks good. I think that one thing I'd say is that the last sentence could probably be simplified (With the amounts of mechanical grip the car and tires could provide...).
If my understanding is correct, the last sentence is expanding on the sentence before it by explaining in more detail (1) what type of influence this car has had on F1 car design (specifically, the aero) and (2) specifically who adopted these changes. I think that it would help if the dependent clause With the amounts of mechanical grip... was shortened or cut. It disrupts the flow b/w the last and 2nd to last sentences, and doesn't add much to conveying ideas (1) and (2). spintheer ( talk) 06:12, 19 June 2024 (UTC) reply
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

Chaparral 2F


I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to see what it takes to make this a featured article. Specifically, focus on article tone, lede, and summary style.

Thanks, X750. Spin a yarn? Articles I've screwed over? 10:03, 8 June 2024 (UTC) reply

Hi, great article! The lede generally looks good. I think that one thing I'd say is that the last sentence could probably be simplified (With the amounts of mechanical grip the car and tires could provide...).
If my understanding is correct, the last sentence is expanding on the sentence before it by explaining in more detail (1) what type of influence this car has had on F1 car design (specifically, the aero) and (2) specifically who adopted these changes. I think that it would help if the dependent clause With the amounts of mechanical grip... was shortened or cut. It disrupts the flow b/w the last and 2nd to last sentences, and doesn't add much to conveying ideas (1) and (2). spintheer ( talk) 06:12, 19 June 2024 (UTC) reply

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