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I plan to submit this to FAC, but first wanted to see if anybody had some ideas for improvement. The article is already A-class but that does not mean it is ready for FAC copyedit and MOS-wise. Suggestions for improvement are most welcome. Thanks,
mav (
reviews needed)
05:51, 20 December 2010 (UTC)
RJHall comments—Overall it looks pretty good. There are a few sentences of the form "...this and this and this and this...", which could be improved. Also there is some unexplained/unlinked jargon in places.
Thanks.— RJH ( talk) 21:57, 21 December 2010 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: This seems excellent. I don't know enough to comment much on the science, but I know the Manual of Style pretty well. Here are some suggestions:
Physical properties
Compounds
Occurrence
Production
Applications
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth ( talk) 20:44, 25 December 2010 (UTC)
Comments: The German article (which is a FA) is longer and have more sources. Are there any important information there, that are missing from enwiki? 85.11.25.101 ( talk) 13:39, 5 January 2011 (UTC)
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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I plan to submit this to FAC, but first wanted to see if anybody had some ideas for improvement. The article is already A-class but that does not mean it is ready for FAC copyedit and MOS-wise. Suggestions for improvement are most welcome. Thanks,
mav (
reviews needed)
05:51, 20 December 2010 (UTC)
RJHall comments—Overall it looks pretty good. There are a few sentences of the form "...this and this and this and this...", which could be improved. Also there is some unexplained/unlinked jargon in places.
Thanks.— RJH ( talk) 21:57, 21 December 2010 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: This seems excellent. I don't know enough to comment much on the science, but I know the Manual of Style pretty well. Here are some suggestions:
Physical properties
Compounds
Occurrence
Production
Applications
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth ( talk) 20:44, 25 December 2010 (UTC)
Comments: The German article (which is a FA) is longer and have more sources. Are there any important information there, that are missing from enwiki? 85.11.25.101 ( talk) 13:39, 5 January 2011 (UTC)