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I've listed this article for peer review because… I intend to take it to FAC and would appreciate comments
Thanks, Wehwalt ( talk) 02:26, 10 September 2015 (UTC)
I read this with interest (untopical topics are always oddly soothing) but not, alas, with complete understanding. My lack of familiarity with the municipal structures of American states can't have helped, but at times I was struggling to follow what was going on. Here are some specific points:
Decidedly offbeat and curious. Brianboulton ( talk) 20:45, 12 September 2015 (UTC)
Looks pretty good. Reference 25, with the Harvcheck script on, tells me "Cite error: The named reference wolfe was invoked but never defined (see the help page)." It's nicely illustrated, though File:BergenCounty_1918.jpg is made very difficult to interpret given the red and blue lines drawn over it. - As nice as historic maps can be to articles like this, it's just not very helpful to have much more visible divisions overlaying the ones of interest. On the whole, I'd like to see this promoted. Adam Cuerden ( talk) 15:14, 13 September 2015 (UTC)
What a splendid article! Such strange goings-on. I really have no suggestions for changing the prose, which is an excellent read from start to finish. I had to reread the bit about "the first of the thirteen colonies to have no unincorporated lands" (my italics), but it is perfectly well phrased, and it is only my unfamiliarity with US state governance that tripped me up. I don't see how it could be more clearly put. Once or twice I had the feeling that there were hyphens where there didn't oughter be ("had been little-used", "proved ill-suited to") but I know from experience that hyphens are best left undiscussed except by experts, of whom I am not one.
I must say that "fungible" went off in my face like an exploding cigar. I looked it up in the OED and am still none the wiser. A link or footnote, perhaps? I think some readers would be glad of a link for "balkanize" in the lead, too. And that really is my lot. You'll ping me when going to FAC, I trust. – Tim riley talk 20:09, 15 September 2015 (UTC)
Very interesting topic, and a bit forlorn (for want of a better word). Point that sticks out to me is that the entire intro seems to have no reference. Pointing the reader (eg, myself) to a source of broad information on the topic is useful, especially since the article itself is wuite interesting. rueben_lys ( talk · contribs) 11:25, 19 September 2015 (UTC)
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I've listed this article for peer review because… I intend to take it to FAC and would appreciate comments
Thanks, Wehwalt ( talk) 02:26, 10 September 2015 (UTC)
I read this with interest (untopical topics are always oddly soothing) but not, alas, with complete understanding. My lack of familiarity with the municipal structures of American states can't have helped, but at times I was struggling to follow what was going on. Here are some specific points:
Decidedly offbeat and curious. Brianboulton ( talk) 20:45, 12 September 2015 (UTC)
Looks pretty good. Reference 25, with the Harvcheck script on, tells me "Cite error: The named reference wolfe was invoked but never defined (see the help page)." It's nicely illustrated, though File:BergenCounty_1918.jpg is made very difficult to interpret given the red and blue lines drawn over it. - As nice as historic maps can be to articles like this, it's just not very helpful to have much more visible divisions overlaying the ones of interest. On the whole, I'd like to see this promoted. Adam Cuerden ( talk) 15:14, 13 September 2015 (UTC)
What a splendid article! Such strange goings-on. I really have no suggestions for changing the prose, which is an excellent read from start to finish. I had to reread the bit about "the first of the thirteen colonies to have no unincorporated lands" (my italics), but it is perfectly well phrased, and it is only my unfamiliarity with US state governance that tripped me up. I don't see how it could be more clearly put. Once or twice I had the feeling that there were hyphens where there didn't oughter be ("had been little-used", "proved ill-suited to") but I know from experience that hyphens are best left undiscussed except by experts, of whom I am not one.
I must say that "fungible" went off in my face like an exploding cigar. I looked it up in the OED and am still none the wiser. A link or footnote, perhaps? I think some readers would be glad of a link for "balkanize" in the lead, too. And that really is my lot. You'll ping me when going to FAC, I trust. – Tim riley talk 20:09, 15 September 2015 (UTC)
Very interesting topic, and a bit forlorn (for want of a better word). Point that sticks out to me is that the entire intro seems to have no reference. Pointing the reader (eg, myself) to a source of broad information on the topic is useful, especially since the article itself is wuite interesting. rueben_lys ( talk · contribs) 11:25, 19 September 2015 (UTC)