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[2]
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January 30th was a great day, use
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- it has been
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
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strike this comment).
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- Watch for
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- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 28 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- “In
the year [of] 1990”
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WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
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- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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[4]
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WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
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- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- apparently
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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14:51, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
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- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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14:47, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- As per
WP:MOS, please do not
link words in headings.
- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- apparently
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 12 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
14:43, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOS, please do not
link words in headings.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- allege
- is considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
14:39, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
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- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- If this article is about a person, please add
{{persondata}}
along with the required parameters to the article - see
Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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Ruhrfisch
14:35, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
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- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- This article is a bit too short, and therefore may not be as comprehensive as
WP:WIAFA critera 2(b) is looking for. Please see if anything can be expanded upon.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- The article will need references. See
WP:CITE and
WP:V for more information.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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Ruhrfisch
14:31, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 39 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
15:33, 13 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- As per
WP:MOS, please do not
link words in headings.
- This article does not have any
categories. Please categorize it with relevant
[[Category:Categories]]
.
- This article is a bit too short, and therefore may not be as comprehensive as
WP:WIAFA critera 2(b) is looking for. Please see if anything can be expanded upon.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- is considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- The article will need references. See
WP:CITE and
WP:V for more information.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
03:47, 15 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
03:44, 15 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, last week might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
03:42, 15 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
03:41, 15 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- This article is a bit too short, and therefore may not be as comprehensive as
WP:WIAFA critera 2(b) is looking for. Please see if anything can be expanded upon.
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
03:33, 15 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 8 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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- Please alphabetize the
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[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
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- Watch for
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All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
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- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently, soon, and previous [day/week/month/year] might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
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WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- apparently
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strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
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All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
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WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- This article is a bit too short, and therefore may not be as comprehensive as
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- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- The article will need references. See
WP:CITE and
WP:V for more information.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
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Template:Infobox School, or
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- This article is a bit too short, and therefore may not be as comprehensive as
WP:WIAFA critera 2(b) is looking for. Please see if anything can be expanded upon.
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- The article will need references. See
WP:CITE and
WP:V for more information.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently and previous [day/week/month/year] might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
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Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- When writing standard abbreviations, the abbreviations should not have a 's' to demark plurality (change kms to km and lbs to lb).
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- As per
WP:MOS, please do not
link words in headings.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 17 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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15:48, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
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- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, previous [day/week/month/year] might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
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[4]
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15:37, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Per
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[5]
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infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 19 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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01:27, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
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WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
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WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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15:09, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 34 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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15:07, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 8 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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15:04, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, last year might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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14:59, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, soon might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- There may be an applicable
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Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- If this article is about a person, please add
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Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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AZ
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21:16, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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02:34, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, last year might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
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- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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02:22, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
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WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
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- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
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[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- When writing standard abbreviations, the abbreviations should not have a 's' to demark plurality (change kms to km and lbs to lb).
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
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strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
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- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 24 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- “In
the year [of] 1990”
- You may wish to convert your form of references to the cite.php footnote system that
WP:WIAFA 2(c) highly recommends.
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
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WP:MOS-L and
WP:CONTEXT.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 8 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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18:48, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, soon might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- If this article is about a person, please add
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Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.
- Per
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between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:37, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Consider removing links that add little to the article or that have been repeated in close proximity to other links to the same article, as per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:CONTEXT.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- The article will need references. See
WP:CITE and
WP:V for more information.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:24, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- apparently
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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02:18, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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20:51, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- There may be an applicable
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Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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20:50, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- is considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 11 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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16:00, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- is considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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15:35, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
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15:33, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
15:32, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently and last year might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- allege
- is considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 37 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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15:30, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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- If this article is about a person, please add
{{persondata}}
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Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 21 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
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Ruhrfisch
15:29, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- correctly
- apparently
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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Ruhrfisch
01:39, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- is considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
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Ruhrfisch
01:37, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- If this article is about a person, please add
{{persondata}}
along with the required parameters to the article - see
Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- correctly
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
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Ruhrfisch
01:36, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 14 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
01:34, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- If this article is about a person, please add
{{persondata}}
along with the required parameters to the article - see
Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- As per
WP:MOS, please do not
link words in headings.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- allege
- correctly
- apparently
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- The article will need references. See
WP:CITE and
WP:V for more information.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
01:32, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 13 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
01:30, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 10 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
01:27, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently and soon might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- As per
WP:MOS, please do not
link words in headings.
- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- arguably
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 58 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
01:23, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- arguably
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 13 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
01:20, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- apparently
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 22 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- The article will need references. See
WP:CITE and
WP:V for more information.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
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[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
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Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
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- Please alphabetize the
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[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
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strike this comment).
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- Watch for
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All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
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- is considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
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strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
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- As done in
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- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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15:26, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
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- it has been
- apparently
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strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
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- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 24 additive terms, a bit too much.
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All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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15:19, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Watch for
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- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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15:16, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
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- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
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- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Please alphabetize the
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[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- correctly
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
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strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
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[4]
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15:15, 14 October 2006 (UTC)
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- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Consider adding more
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- If this article is about a person, please add
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- Per
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WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- This article is a bit too short, and therefore may not be as comprehensive as
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- There are a few occurrences of
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WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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21:16, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
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fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
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[8]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- This article does not have any
categories. Please categorize it with relevant
[[Category:Categories]]
.
- This article is a bit too short, and therefore may not be as comprehensive as
WP:WIAFA critera 2(b) is looking for. Please see if anything can be expanded upon.
- This article needs
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cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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21:08, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- There may be an applicable
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Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Watch for
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- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 10 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- The article will need references. See
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WP:V for more information.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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21:03, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- If this article is about a person, please add
{{persondata}}
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Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.
- Per
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between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- many people believe
- apparently
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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20:59, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
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WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
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commons:special:upload.
[8]
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- There may be an applicable
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- Per
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- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.
- This article is a bit too short, and therefore may not be as comprehensive as
WP:WIAFA critera 2(b) is looking for. Please see if anything can be expanded upon.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
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20:56, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Per
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Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
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- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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[4]
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20:43, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
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WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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20:40, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- arguably
- correctly
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- “In
the year [of] 1990”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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20:39, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
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- Consider adding more
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WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
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Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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20:37, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 10 additive terms, a bit too much.
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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20:35, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 21 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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Ruhrfisch
16:02, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
15:59, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
15:57, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- When writing standard abbreviations, the abbreviations should not have a 's' to demark plurality (change kms to km and lbs to lb).
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- correctly
- is considered
- are considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 22 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- The article will need references. See
WP:CITE and
WP:V for more information.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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Ruhrfisch
15:54, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
15:52, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
15:47, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, previous [day/week/month/year] might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- are considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 57 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
15:45, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
15:38, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
*Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
*Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently and soon might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
*This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
*There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, when doing conversions, please use standard abbreviations: for example, miles -> mi, kilometers squared -> km2, and pounds -> lb.
*Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
*Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
*There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- apparently
might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
**While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 18 additive terms, a bit too much.
Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”.
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
*As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
AZ
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21:16, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
*This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
*There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- There are a few sections that are too short and that should be either expanded or merged.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
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t
21:16, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
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- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- many people have
- allege
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 15 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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t
21:16, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- working on it...
Montanabw
04:39, 23 October 2006 (UTC)
- Um the problem with automated scripts--the article already has tons of images, maybe too many?
- Infobox is now included
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 36 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Will review, the article itself is pretty long
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
AZ
t
21:16, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Consider removing links that add little to the article or that have been repeated in close proximity to other links to the same article, as per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:CONTEXT.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:36, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- is considered
- are considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 21 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:32, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- is considered
- are considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:30, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:28, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:26, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:24, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
Per
WP:MOSNUM, when doing conversions, please use standard abbreviations: for example, miles -> mi, kilometers squared -> km2, and pounds -> lb.
Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- is considered
might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please strike this comment).
[3]
Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:16, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
- All fixed thanks for the review
Gnangarra
03:52, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- apparently
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:12, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- apparently
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:10, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:08, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, soon might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 21 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- “In
the year [of] 1990”
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
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WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 14 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
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[4]
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18:27, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
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WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- If this article is about a person, please add
{{persondata}}
along with the required parameters to the article - see
Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- is considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
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[4]
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18:25, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
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[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, when doing conversions, please use standard abbreviations: for example, miles -> mi, kilometers squared -> km2, and pounds -> lb.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
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- Watch for
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- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
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18:23, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- correctly
- are considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 14 additive terms, a bit too much.
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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18:23, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:54, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Consider removing links that add little to the article or that have been repeated in close proximity to other links to the same article, as per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:CONTEXT.
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- This article is a bit too short, and therefore may not be as comprehensive as
WP:WIAFA critera 2(b) is looking for. Please see if anything can be expanded upon.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:52, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
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WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
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Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:50, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- correctly
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 22 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:46, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- If this article is about a person, please add
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- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:44, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 13 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:41, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 24 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:38, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:35, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- This article is a bit too short, and therefore may not be as comprehensive as
WP:WIAFA critera 2(b) is looking for. Please see if anything can be expanded upon.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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Ruhrfisch
03:32, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
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- If this article is about a person, please add
{{persondata}}
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Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.
- Done.
68.39.174.238
19:52, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Watch for
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- You may wish to convert your form of references to the cite.php footnote system that
WP:WIAFA 2(c) highly recommends.
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- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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- Per
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[2]
- Per
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WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.
- Watch for
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- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
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03:27, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
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[2]
- Per
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- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
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- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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03:25, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- There are a few occurrences of
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strike this comment).
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- Watch for
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- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 22 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
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03:21, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
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WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
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[2]
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- There are a few occurrences of
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- it has been
- allege
- arguably
- apparently
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strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
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- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 27 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
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03:19, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
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[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
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[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
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- it has been
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
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strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
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redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 25 additive terms, a bit too much.
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All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- “In
the year [of] 1990”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
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- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
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[4]
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03:14, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- is considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 26 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:12, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- When writing standard abbreviations, the abbreviations should not have a 's' to demark plurality (change kms to km and lbs to lb).
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- is considered
- are considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:00, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
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javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, when doing conversions, please use standard abbreviations: for example, miles -> mi, kilometers squared -> km2, and pounds -> lb.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 12 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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02:58, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- many considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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02:56, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- apparently
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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02:55, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 11 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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02:53, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- is considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 19 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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02:51, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
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Ruhrfisch
02:50, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- If this article is about a person, please add
{{persondata}}
along with the required parameters to the article - see
Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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02:49, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
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- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Consider removing links that add little to the article or that have been repeated in close proximity to other links to the same article, as per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:CONTEXT.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- There are a few sections that are too short and that should be either expanded or merged.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- is considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 8 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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02:47, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- If this article is about a person, please add
{{persondata}}
along with the required parameters to the article - see
Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- allege
- correctly
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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Ruhrfisch
02:45, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 11 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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Ruhrfisch
02:44, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:42, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- arguably
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- You may wish to convert your form of references to the cite.php footnote system that
WP:WIAFA 2(c) highly recommends.
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:40, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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Ruhrfisch
02:38, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- is considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 19 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:38, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 23 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:34, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- apparently
- is considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 14 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:32, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- If this article is about a person, please add
{{persondata}}
along with the required parameters to the article - see
Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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02:31, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
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javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 8 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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02:27, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- are considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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02:26, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- This article is a bit too short, and therefore may not be as comprehensive as
WP:WIAFA critera 2(b) is looking for. Please see if anything can be expanded upon.
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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02:24, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 23 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
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Ruhrfisch
02:23, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- apparently
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 26 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:21, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- If this article is about a person, please add
{{persondata}}
along with the required parameters to the article - see
Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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Ruhrfisch
02:20, 19 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- This article is a bit too short, and therefore may not be as comprehensive as
WP:WIAFA critera 2(b) is looking for. Please see if anything can be expanded upon.
- This article needs
footnotes, preferably in the
cite.php format recommended by
WP:WIAFA. Simply, enclose inline citations, with
WP:CITE or
WP:CITE/ES information, with <ref>THE FOOTNOTE</ref>. At the bottom of the article, in a section named “References” or “Footnotes”, add
<div class="references-small"><references/></div>
.
- The article will need references. See
WP:CITE and
WP:V for more information.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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Ruhrfisch
21:10, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- apparently
- is considered
- are considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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Ruhrfisch
21:01, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, when doing conversions, please use standard abbreviations: for example, miles -> mi, kilometers squared -> km2, and pounds -> lb.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- There are a few sections that are too short and that should be either expanded or merged.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
20:57, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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Ruhrfisch
20:53, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- This article may be a bit list-weighty; in other words, some of the lists should be converted to prose (paragraph form).
[12]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 9 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
20:48, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, when doing conversions, please use standard abbreviations: for example, miles -> mi, kilometers squared -> km2, and pounds -> lb.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- apparently
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
20:46, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- This article does not have any
categories. Please categorize it with relevant
[[Category:Categories]]
.
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- apparently
- are considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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20:45, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 22 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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20:41, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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15:55, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- is considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
15:44, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
15:42, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 16 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
15:40, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
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javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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11:18, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:38, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.
- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 35 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:20, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Generally, trivia sections are looked down upon; please either remove the trivia section or incorporate any important facts into the rest of the article.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:17, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently and soon might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Done
Doctor Bruno
01:24, 29 October 2006 (UTC)
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
02:14, 22 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Consider removing links that add little to the article or that have been repeated in close proximity to other links to the same article, as per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:CONTEXT.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, when doing conversions, please use standard abbreviations: for example, miles -> mi, kilometers squared -> km2, and pounds -> lb.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- is considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
18:55, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, last year might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per
WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- arguably
- is considered
- are considered
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 30 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- “In
the year [of] 1990”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
You may wish to browse through
User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
Ruhrfisch
03:49, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Consider adding more
links to the article; per
WP:MOS-L and
WP:BTW, create links to relevant articles.
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
[1]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at
WP:GTL.
- Watch for
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- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
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- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
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WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- correctly
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
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[4]
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03:43, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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- The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at
WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.
- The lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, and should not introduce new topics not discussed in the rest of the article, as per
WP:LEAD. Please ensure that the lead adequately summarizes the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, last year might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Per
WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) maybe too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per
WP:SS.
[7]
- This article may need to undergo
summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is
United States, than an appropriate subpage would be
History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- arguably
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Temporal terms like “over the years”, “currently”, “now”, and “from time to time” often are too vague to be useful, but occasionally may be helpful. “I am
now using a semi-bot to generate your peer review.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:41, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
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javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
[10]
Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- it has been
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space inbetween. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2]
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:33, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- There may be an applicable
infobox for this article. For example, see
Template:Infobox Biography,
Template:Infobox School, or
Template:Infobox City. (Note that there might not be an applicable infobox; remember that these suggestions are not generated manually)
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- There are a few occurrences of
weasel words in this article- please observe
WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
- allege
- might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper
citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please
strike this comment).
[3]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 20 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please provide citations for all of the
{{fact}}
s.
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:22, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- This article has no
images. Please see if there are any
free use images that fall under
WP:IUP and
WP:IT that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to
Special:Upload; to upload non-
fair use images on the
Wikimedia Commons, go to
commons:special:upload.
[8]
- If this article is about a person, please add
{{persondata}}
along with the required parameters to the article - see
Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link
January 15,
2006, but do not link January 2006.
- As per
WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using
January 30th was a great day, use
January 30 was a great day.
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- “In
the year [of] 1990”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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03:17, 21 October 2006 (UTC)
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic
javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question.
- Per
WP:CONTEXT and
WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide
context for the article.
- Per
WP:MOS, avoid using words/phrases that indicate time periods relative to the current day. For example, recently and yesterday might be terms that should be replaced with specific dates/times.
[5]
- Per
WP:WIAFA,
Images should have concise captions.
[6]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
[2]
- Per
WP:MOSNUM, when doing conversions, please use standard abbreviations: for example, miles -> mi, kilometers squared -> km2, and pounds -> lb.
- When writing standard abbreviations, the abbreviations should not have a 's' to demark plurality (change kms to km and lbs to lb).
- Please alphabetize the
interlanguage links.
[11]
- Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
- While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 34 additive terms, a bit too much.
- Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “
All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
- Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that the it exemplifies some of
Wikipedia's best work. See also
User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 2a.
[4]
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User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks,
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03:02, 19 October 2006 (UTC)