This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I want to take it to FL status.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 5:38, 1 June 2015 (UTC)
I find
WP:POV issue here as I find every film mentioned as "critically acclaimed" OR is it that all of his films were praised?
Removed the word from many places, yes most of his films have been praised. --
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 2:24, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
He does not have so many acting (major role) credits in his pocket so why mention so many?
Removed I Am and Encounter, but didn't removed
Shagird. As he had a major full-fleged role in the film.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 5:09, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
"occasional actor" is a little bit weird or I should say... urgh!
Can you mention the upcoming films' stages that they have reached.
Done, but
Tigers is a film which has been completed and was screened at the toronto film fest, but is awaiting for a theatrical release. What I should write? --
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 2:30, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
YouTube source is not acceptable especially if it is by an unknown user (I mean not by an official channel). BTW a YouTube source only acceptable when there is no other reliable source available. --
FrankBoyCHITCHAT21:05, 2 June 2015 (UTC)reply
Black Friday " was finally released in 2007 to positive reviews". Needs a source. You have cited only one review.
Only one review cited for No Smoking being a critical failure.
When was Return to Hanuman released? No year present in parenthesis.
"Kashyap's production company Anurag Kashyap Films, released its first film, the critical hit Udaan (2010).". Cited source does not corroborate the claim that Udaan was his production company's first release.
"one of the short film" => "one of the short films"
" followed by the anthology film Bombay Talkies (2013), which was made for celebrating the centenary year of Indian Cinema". He directed one of the films in it, which needs to be mentioned. Also, the second part of the sentence sounds a bit excessive for a filmography page.
Why is the "c" of Indian cinema in caps?
I don't understand why you have a single sentence like this: "Alongwith the biographical drama Shahid". That's not how sentences are constructed.
"Later that year, his another production company Phantom Films..". Needs a background. We can begin by saying that he set up another production company and then talk about Lootera.
Not clear if he directed or produced Lootera or Queen.
A bit background on Bombay Velvet is a must. The film was his most-expensive film, and was hugely hyped in the media. We must also mention on how it failed to recover its massive investment.
In the notes column of the table, you don't use the correct dash(—) consistently. For reference, they should look this: "Nominated—Filmfare Award for xxx" and not "Nominated - Filmfare Award for xxx".
Why does Paanch, an unreleased film, have a release year in the year column?
Did he produce Kaatiyabaz and The World Before Her, or just present it?
"Directed one story out of four" ==> "Directed one segment"
Release year for Tigers is unsourced.
Post-production on Ghoomketu is unsourced.
Please be consistent with caps in the references. I can see atleast two instances where it's not.
You don't mention the directors for any of his other production ventures, then why suddenly mention the director for the 2013 short film Chai? --
Krimuk|90 (
talk)
03:41, 5 June 2015 (UTC)reply
All of your comments has been resolved, except the one about Bombay Velvet and caps in the references. Can you suggest what should be written about BV? --
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 3:00, 5 June 2015 (UTC)
Come on, you didn't resolve the first two comments at all. Both the claims need a source that says the films received positive reviews. Just sampling two reviews doesn't exactly help, you see. You can see
this source for both the claims. --
Krimuk|90 (
talk)
05:55, 8 June 2015 (UTC)reply
Done
"Kashyap's production company Anurag Kashyap Films, released its first film, Udaan (2010)" is both an incorrect and an incomplete sentence.
The source says it was his first production venture...how can I complete it?
" in the Amitabh Bachchan starrer television mini-series Yudh (2014)" ==> "in the Amitabh Bachchan-starring"
Done
"and subsequently presented two documentary film's," Why is there an apostrophe? You are talking about two films.
Removed
About Bombay Velvet, you can write exactly what I said. The film was made on a massive 120 crore budget, and earned less than 30% of that, or such.
Mentioned
You have a section titled "Film" in which you divide it into "Feature films" and "Short film". Why do you then create a separate section altogether for "Documentary films"?
Done
The 'k' of Kashyap needs to be in caps in ref no. 26.
I have given the article a copy-edit, as some of the comments weren't addressed correctly. Now, you need to ensure that the authors in your references are formatted in this format: "last name, first name". For example, ref. no 14 follows this correct format, but ref. no 15 does not. --
Krimuk|90 (
talk)
Why is the first film in the table named Jayate. In the cited source, the film is named ...Jayate...Jayate. If Jayate is the actual title, then you might want to use
this source.
Its not ...Jayate...Jayate, its only ...Jayate
In the parenthesis in the table, either say "only dialogues" or simply "dialogues". You use "only dialogues" for all except one. Be consistent. I would prefer to simply say "dialogues".
Done
Actually, wouldn't it be so much easier to use footnotes to convey this information. This will prevent the column from unnecessary bloating. --
Krimuk|90 (
talk)
06:32, 10 June 2015 (UTC)reply
Mentioned Masaan's 2nd award and abhijat kokate. Its already mentioned in the lead that he co-edited the film, and also there is no place where It can be mentioned. --
Yashthepunisher (
talk)
11:56, 11 June 2015 (UTC)reply
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I want to take it to FL status.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 5:38, 1 June 2015 (UTC)
I find
WP:POV issue here as I find every film mentioned as "critically acclaimed" OR is it that all of his films were praised?
Removed the word from many places, yes most of his films have been praised. --
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 2:24, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
He does not have so many acting (major role) credits in his pocket so why mention so many?
Removed I Am and Encounter, but didn't removed
Shagird. As he had a major full-fleged role in the film.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 5:09, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
"occasional actor" is a little bit weird or I should say... urgh!
Can you mention the upcoming films' stages that they have reached.
Done, but
Tigers is a film which has been completed and was screened at the toronto film fest, but is awaiting for a theatrical release. What I should write? --
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 2:30, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
YouTube source is not acceptable especially if it is by an unknown user (I mean not by an official channel). BTW a YouTube source only acceptable when there is no other reliable source available. --
FrankBoyCHITCHAT21:05, 2 June 2015 (UTC)reply
Black Friday " was finally released in 2007 to positive reviews". Needs a source. You have cited only one review.
Only one review cited for No Smoking being a critical failure.
When was Return to Hanuman released? No year present in parenthesis.
"Kashyap's production company Anurag Kashyap Films, released its first film, the critical hit Udaan (2010).". Cited source does not corroborate the claim that Udaan was his production company's first release.
"one of the short film" => "one of the short films"
" followed by the anthology film Bombay Talkies (2013), which was made for celebrating the centenary year of Indian Cinema". He directed one of the films in it, which needs to be mentioned. Also, the second part of the sentence sounds a bit excessive for a filmography page.
Why is the "c" of Indian cinema in caps?
I don't understand why you have a single sentence like this: "Alongwith the biographical drama Shahid". That's not how sentences are constructed.
"Later that year, his another production company Phantom Films..". Needs a background. We can begin by saying that he set up another production company and then talk about Lootera.
Not clear if he directed or produced Lootera or Queen.
A bit background on Bombay Velvet is a must. The film was his most-expensive film, and was hugely hyped in the media. We must also mention on how it failed to recover its massive investment.
In the notes column of the table, you don't use the correct dash(—) consistently. For reference, they should look this: "Nominated—Filmfare Award for xxx" and not "Nominated - Filmfare Award for xxx".
Why does Paanch, an unreleased film, have a release year in the year column?
Did he produce Kaatiyabaz and The World Before Her, or just present it?
"Directed one story out of four" ==> "Directed one segment"
Release year for Tigers is unsourced.
Post-production on Ghoomketu is unsourced.
Please be consistent with caps in the references. I can see atleast two instances where it's not.
You don't mention the directors for any of his other production ventures, then why suddenly mention the director for the 2013 short film Chai? --
Krimuk|90 (
talk)
03:41, 5 June 2015 (UTC)reply
All of your comments has been resolved, except the one about Bombay Velvet and caps in the references. Can you suggest what should be written about BV? --
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 3:00, 5 June 2015 (UTC)
Come on, you didn't resolve the first two comments at all. Both the claims need a source that says the films received positive reviews. Just sampling two reviews doesn't exactly help, you see. You can see
this source for both the claims. --
Krimuk|90 (
talk)
05:55, 8 June 2015 (UTC)reply
Done
"Kashyap's production company Anurag Kashyap Films, released its first film, Udaan (2010)" is both an incorrect and an incomplete sentence.
The source says it was his first production venture...how can I complete it?
" in the Amitabh Bachchan starrer television mini-series Yudh (2014)" ==> "in the Amitabh Bachchan-starring"
Done
"and subsequently presented two documentary film's," Why is there an apostrophe? You are talking about two films.
Removed
About Bombay Velvet, you can write exactly what I said. The film was made on a massive 120 crore budget, and earned less than 30% of that, or such.
Mentioned
You have a section titled "Film" in which you divide it into "Feature films" and "Short film". Why do you then create a separate section altogether for "Documentary films"?
Done
The 'k' of Kashyap needs to be in caps in ref no. 26.
I have given the article a copy-edit, as some of the comments weren't addressed correctly. Now, you need to ensure that the authors in your references are formatted in this format: "last name, first name". For example, ref. no 14 follows this correct format, but ref. no 15 does not. --
Krimuk|90 (
talk)
Why is the first film in the table named Jayate. In the cited source, the film is named ...Jayate...Jayate. If Jayate is the actual title, then you might want to use
this source.
Its not ...Jayate...Jayate, its only ...Jayate
In the parenthesis in the table, either say "only dialogues" or simply "dialogues". You use "only dialogues" for all except one. Be consistent. I would prefer to simply say "dialogues".
Done
Actually, wouldn't it be so much easier to use footnotes to convey this information. This will prevent the column from unnecessary bloating. --
Krimuk|90 (
talk)
06:32, 10 June 2015 (UTC)reply
Mentioned Masaan's 2nd award and abhijat kokate. Its already mentioned in the lead that he co-edited the film, and also there is no place where It can be mentioned. --
Yashthepunisher (
talk)
11:56, 11 June 2015 (UTC)reply