I worked on 9/11 conspiracy theories: made some significant changes into the article, rewrited some stuff for improved readability and removal of NPOV, added some data, removed what I found irrelevant. Main focus went to WTC 7 section, From unofficial explanations to conspiracy theory section and slightly reorganizing sections. I'd like this work to be reviewed, to be sure I'm working in the right direction, and actually improved the article quality. All comments, directions for further improvement and contributions to improve the overall quality of this article welcome. Izwalito 06:58, 26 March 2006 (UTC)
Wow - what huge article. If you ever want to get this featured you should adhere to
Wikipedia:Summary style to farm off much of the detail to daughter articles and articles on particular conspiracy theories. Even if FA is not what you are after, doing that will greatly improve the readability of this article. --
mav
22:06, 26 March 2006 (UTC)
Izwalito,
As I'm sure you read my thoughts on the main talk page, I have since returned the WTC 7 section to a more organized and more summarized state. The edits you provided were lengthy and added very little to the understanding of the conspiracy theories in relation to Building Seven. The wording went from a smooth, fluid flow into a jagged, broken mix. The grammar as well as the sentence structure was remedial and difficult for the average reader to follow.
The repairs I made did include some of the newer additions, as well as a slightly different format from before. Keep in mind as you make adjustments to the article, the brevity necessary to keep a reader interested.-- Doctor9 00:06, 28 March 2006 (UTC)
This article is a mess, terribly POV ("What Are They Hiding?" ??) and badly written ("It is indeed undeniable that large airplanes hit the twin towers as the event has been caught on video and widely broadcasted in mass media, the Pentagon attack is different, video of the attack are known to exist as they have been confiscated by FBI agents minutes after the explosion but have not been released to the public." ??). Quoting Machiavelli is irrelevant other than to suggest that you are driven by non-encyclopedic motivations. -- Jibal 18:08, 29 March 2006 (UTC)
Without mention of the videos the FBI Confiscated from the Sheraton Inn I do not see how this article could be considered factual. it is a known fact that the Sheraton Inn security cameras captured the entire attack. With the FBI withholding this valuable evidence it is clear that the murders that took place that day can never be fully understood. I am not saying it was a missle that hit the Pentagon, but I am saying that all physical evidence points to that "best guess." If the USA Government and Wiki wants to prove their innocence in this conspiracy then the Sheraton Inn must be mentioned prominantly in this Wiki and the US Govt must release the Sheraton Inn security camera video from 9/11, PERIOD. There is nothing more to discuss. my username is "isassexe" and I have edited this page on April 17, 2007 at 2:00 am
I worked on 9/11 conspiracy theories: made some significant changes into the article, rewrited some stuff for improved readability and removal of NPOV, added some data, removed what I found irrelevant. Main focus went to WTC 7 section, From unofficial explanations to conspiracy theory section and slightly reorganizing sections. I'd like this work to be reviewed, to be sure I'm working in the right direction, and actually improved the article quality. All comments, directions for further improvement and contributions to improve the overall quality of this article welcome. Izwalito 06:58, 26 March 2006 (UTC)
Wow - what huge article. If you ever want to get this featured you should adhere to
Wikipedia:Summary style to farm off much of the detail to daughter articles and articles on particular conspiracy theories. Even if FA is not what you are after, doing that will greatly improve the readability of this article. --
mav
22:06, 26 March 2006 (UTC)
Izwalito,
As I'm sure you read my thoughts on the main talk page, I have since returned the WTC 7 section to a more organized and more summarized state. The edits you provided were lengthy and added very little to the understanding of the conspiracy theories in relation to Building Seven. The wording went from a smooth, fluid flow into a jagged, broken mix. The grammar as well as the sentence structure was remedial and difficult for the average reader to follow.
The repairs I made did include some of the newer additions, as well as a slightly different format from before. Keep in mind as you make adjustments to the article, the brevity necessary to keep a reader interested.-- Doctor9 00:06, 28 March 2006 (UTC)
This article is a mess, terribly POV ("What Are They Hiding?" ??) and badly written ("It is indeed undeniable that large airplanes hit the twin towers as the event has been caught on video and widely broadcasted in mass media, the Pentagon attack is different, video of the attack are known to exist as they have been confiscated by FBI agents minutes after the explosion but have not been released to the public." ??). Quoting Machiavelli is irrelevant other than to suggest that you are driven by non-encyclopedic motivations. -- Jibal 18:08, 29 March 2006 (UTC)
Without mention of the videos the FBI Confiscated from the Sheraton Inn I do not see how this article could be considered factual. it is a known fact that the Sheraton Inn security cameras captured the entire attack. With the FBI withholding this valuable evidence it is clear that the murders that took place that day can never be fully understood. I am not saying it was a missle that hit the Pentagon, but I am saying that all physical evidence points to that "best guess." If the USA Government and Wiki wants to prove their innocence in this conspiracy then the Sheraton Inn must be mentioned prominantly in this Wiki and the US Govt must release the Sheraton Inn security camera video from 9/11, PERIOD. There is nothing more to discuss. my username is "isassexe" and I have edited this page on April 17, 2007 at 2:00 am