This peer review discussion has been closed.
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I'm preparing it as a possible featured-article candidate, and given the nature of the topic, I'd appreciate input from uninvolved editors, as well as editors with specific expertise.
Many thanks, SlimVirgin talk| contribs 07:37, 26 September 2009 (UTC)
Brief comment: This is one of the most significant articles that has come for review recently. I have read it, and the various debates on the talkpage, with great interest. I am reasonably well-informed on Middle East history since the Balfour Declaration, and am familiar with most of your sources. I will add some detailed comments shortly – I'm temporarily distracted by chores. I am sorry this has had to wait so long for attention here, but at the moment PR reviewers are desperately scarce, even more so than at FAC. Brianboulton ( talk) 16:12, 6 October 2009 (UTC)
More detailed comments (not an exhaustive list):-
I'd be pleased to have your thoughts on these issues. I may well have more comments to make presently. Brianboulton ( talk) 20:57, 7 October 2009 (UTC)
This is great, exactly what's needed, thank you. SlimVirgin talk| contribs 18:03, 7 October 2009 (UTC)
Before we left Jerusalem, I visited Ramallah, where thousands of refugees from Lydda and Ramleh were assembled. I have made the acquaintance of a great many refugee camps; but never have I seen a more ghastly sight than that which met my eyes here at Ramallah. The car was literally stormed by excited massing shouting with Oriental fervour that they wanted food and wanted to return to their homes. There were plenty of frightening faces in that sea of suffering humanity. I remember not least a group of scabby and helpless old men with tangled beards who thrust their emaciated faces into the car and held out scraps of bread that would certainly have been considered quite uneatable by ordinary people, but was their only food. Perhaps there was no immediate danger of this camp becoming a breeding-ground of epidemic diseases that would spread all over Palestine. But what would happen at the beginning of October, when the rainy season began and the cold weather set in? It was a thought one preferred not to follow to its conclusion.
(Don't feel you have to use this quote just because I typed it all out!) Brianboulton ( talk) 21:28, 7 October 2009 (UTC)
I've returned to this article after a break, and would like to try to bring it to FA status. Reviews from uninvolved editors would be very helpful, and Brian if you're willing to have another glance through it, that would be very much appreciated. The last version I can vouch for, btw, is at User:SlimVirgin/Lydda3.
I've dealt with the points you raised before, Brian, except that the ending is the same, and I haven't included the 100,000 return offer, because it felt like going off track a little (though I'll look it up again to refresh my memory). But otherwise I think your points have all been added, removed, or clarified. SlimVirgin talk| contribs 07:48, 27 November 2010 (UTC)
This peer review discussion has been closed.
This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I'm preparing it as a possible featured-article candidate, and given the nature of the topic, I'd appreciate input from uninvolved editors, as well as editors with specific expertise.
Many thanks, SlimVirgin talk| contribs 07:37, 26 September 2009 (UTC)
Brief comment: This is one of the most significant articles that has come for review recently. I have read it, and the various debates on the talkpage, with great interest. I am reasonably well-informed on Middle East history since the Balfour Declaration, and am familiar with most of your sources. I will add some detailed comments shortly – I'm temporarily distracted by chores. I am sorry this has had to wait so long for attention here, but at the moment PR reviewers are desperately scarce, even more so than at FAC. Brianboulton ( talk) 16:12, 6 October 2009 (UTC)
More detailed comments (not an exhaustive list):-
I'd be pleased to have your thoughts on these issues. I may well have more comments to make presently. Brianboulton ( talk) 20:57, 7 October 2009 (UTC)
This is great, exactly what's needed, thank you. SlimVirgin talk| contribs 18:03, 7 October 2009 (UTC)
Before we left Jerusalem, I visited Ramallah, where thousands of refugees from Lydda and Ramleh were assembled. I have made the acquaintance of a great many refugee camps; but never have I seen a more ghastly sight than that which met my eyes here at Ramallah. The car was literally stormed by excited massing shouting with Oriental fervour that they wanted food and wanted to return to their homes. There were plenty of frightening faces in that sea of suffering humanity. I remember not least a group of scabby and helpless old men with tangled beards who thrust their emaciated faces into the car and held out scraps of bread that would certainly have been considered quite uneatable by ordinary people, but was their only food. Perhaps there was no immediate danger of this camp becoming a breeding-ground of epidemic diseases that would spread all over Palestine. But what would happen at the beginning of October, when the rainy season began and the cold weather set in? It was a thought one preferred not to follow to its conclusion.
(Don't feel you have to use this quote just because I typed it all out!) Brianboulton ( talk) 21:28, 7 October 2009 (UTC)
I've returned to this article after a break, and would like to try to bring it to FA status. Reviews from uninvolved editors would be very helpful, and Brian if you're willing to have another glance through it, that would be very much appreciated. The last version I can vouch for, btw, is at User:SlimVirgin/Lydda3.
I've dealt with the points you raised before, Brian, except that the ending is the same, and I haven't included the 100,000 return offer, because it felt like going off track a little (though I'll look it up again to refresh my memory). But otherwise I think your points have all been added, removed, or clarified. SlimVirgin talk| contribs 07:48, 27 November 2010 (UTC)