I have just done a large rewrite of Cerro Blanco (volcano), to give it pagenumbers and installing the most recent literature. As the new text has almost nothing in common with the old one beyond the lead section, I'd like to get input on whether the new text still qualifies as a Good Article under the criteria. In particular, the paragraphing and the comments I've placed in the source need reviewing. Jo-Jo Eumerus ( talk) 16:13, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
The calderawhile the next section says
Cerro Blanco ... consists of four nested calderas. So which is the caldera mentioned in the first section? If my understanding is correct I think it would be better to just say volcano or use its name.
They are formedBut only one is mentioned so not sure how they fits in.
A site southeast of the Robledo caldera is known as Robledo.This seems vague to me. What is meant by site?
One of the most spectacular aeolian landscapes of Earth is found at Cerro BlancoOf Earth seems a bit unnecessary and makes this appear quite peacocky.
where a field of large ripples covers an area of 8 square kilometresthis lost me
while a role of the bedrock structure or the size of the material is controversialThis is sort of left hanging. Does it need some further
have been recorded in JulyWhat year?
which only crops out close tois that right grammatically?
and is also known as the first cycle ignimbrite.Don't quite follow. Is this what this was called, is it a common name for am event or is it something else. It doesn't seem to tie in with the start of the sentence
there is no agreement whether the Robledo Caldera is the source and the volcano-tectonic depression northeast of Cerro Blanco has been proposed as a sourceThese clauses don't quite fit as worded
A major future eruption would put local communities to the south at risk.The body almost says the opposite, that the area is sparsely populated.
Also, pyroclastic flows could through narrow valleys reach the Bolsón de Fiambalá valley 50 kilometres (31 mi) south of Cerro Blanco, where many people live.Jo-Jo Eumerus ( talk) 09:59, 26 April 2020 (UTC)
I have just done a large rewrite of Cerro Blanco (volcano), to give it pagenumbers and installing the most recent literature. As the new text has almost nothing in common with the old one beyond the lead section, I'd like to get input on whether the new text still qualifies as a Good Article under the criteria. In particular, the paragraphing and the comments I've placed in the source need reviewing. Jo-Jo Eumerus ( talk) 16:13, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
The calderawhile the next section says
Cerro Blanco ... consists of four nested calderas. So which is the caldera mentioned in the first section? If my understanding is correct I think it would be better to just say volcano or use its name.
They are formedBut only one is mentioned so not sure how they fits in.
A site southeast of the Robledo caldera is known as Robledo.This seems vague to me. What is meant by site?
One of the most spectacular aeolian landscapes of Earth is found at Cerro BlancoOf Earth seems a bit unnecessary and makes this appear quite peacocky.
where a field of large ripples covers an area of 8 square kilometresthis lost me
while a role of the bedrock structure or the size of the material is controversialThis is sort of left hanging. Does it need some further
have been recorded in JulyWhat year?
which only crops out close tois that right grammatically?
and is also known as the first cycle ignimbrite.Don't quite follow. Is this what this was called, is it a common name for am event or is it something else. It doesn't seem to tie in with the start of the sentence
there is no agreement whether the Robledo Caldera is the source and the volcano-tectonic depression northeast of Cerro Blanco has been proposed as a sourceThese clauses don't quite fit as worded
A major future eruption would put local communities to the south at risk.The body almost says the opposite, that the area is sparsely populated.
Also, pyroclastic flows could through narrow valleys reach the Bolsón de Fiambalá valley 50 kilometres (31 mi) south of Cerro Blanco, where many people live.Jo-Jo Eumerus ( talk) 09:59, 26 April 2020 (UTC)