The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot ( talk) 23 October 2021 [1].
This article is about a Japanese romantic drama manga series by Naoshi Arakawa. The series remains a very popular series, especially its anime adaptation, which has received more praise that the original work. This nomination is coming off of a peer review which lasted from June to October. In this review, many editors gave very helpful comments, which I have used to greatly improve the article to the state it is currently in. I feel the article is now ready for the nomination. Just want to note this is my first FA nomination so if I messed something up, please have patience. Thanks. Link20XX ( talk) 00:10, 22 October 2021 (UTC)
Comments from Tintor2 ( talk) 00:54, 22 October 2021 (UTC): Nice work in improving the article ever since the GA review. I hope it becomes FA so I'll try pointing any issue I find. In response, I requested a peer review for Psycho-Pass: the Movie if you can commment there too if possible. Well, leaving some comments:
*"The story follows a young pianist named Kо̄sei Arima, who loses the ability to hear the piano after his mother's death" For a lead that feels kinda short. Considering this is a premise-like area it feels like it could briefly expanded like you did in the anime episode list. Based on what I read, a mention of Kaori Miyazono's character is very important for the premise.
That's all. Ping me once you think you solved this issues please. Tintor2 ( talk) 00:54, 22 October 2021 (UTC)
I am very happy to see a manga article in the FAC space. I will do my best to help. I am somewhat familiar with manga, but I have never heard of this one. My comments are below:
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These are my comments for the infobox, lead, and the "Plot" section. I will stop here and will continue my review once everything has been addressed. I hope these comments are helpful! Aoba47 ( talk) 02:09, 22 October 2021 (UTC)
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These are my comments through the "Development" section. I hope this is helpful! Aoba47 ( talk) 19:01, 22 October 2021 (UTC)
While the original manga depicts the characters in their junior high year, the film had them be in their second-year of high school instead., as it has been bothering me a bit. Shouldn't it be the character in junior high school instead? Junior high is not a grade or a year so this does not really make sense. Aoba47 ( talk) 02:31, 23 October 2021 (UTC)
Others, such as Rebecca Silverman from Anime News Network, were more critical and thought the plot was not as emotional as Arakawa intended it to be., you mention multiple critics, but only the Rebecca Silverman citation is included so the "others" is not supported.
Many critics praised the plot of the adaptation, with Chris Beveridge from The Fandom Post stating "plainly said, [the series] moved me",
others calling the series a masterpiece in storytelling., and
Others noted that the plot may not be emotional to every viewer). These sentences all claim that multiple critics have this perception, but there are only supported by one citation/critical review.
This is just my opinion though so if you would like to keep the FAC up that is up to you. It may be best to wait and hear back from other editors, as I fully admit that I am not the best reviewer out there. Apologies for the oppose. Aoba47 ( talk) 21:02, 23 October 2021 (UTC)
Coord note -- okay thanks Link20XX, I'll close this and you can bring back to FAC after two weeks, or when you've completed your improvements, whichever is longer. Cheers, Ian Rose ( talk) 23:32, 23 October 2021 (UTC)
The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot ( talk) 23 October 2021 [1].
This article is about a Japanese romantic drama manga series by Naoshi Arakawa. The series remains a very popular series, especially its anime adaptation, which has received more praise that the original work. This nomination is coming off of a peer review which lasted from June to October. In this review, many editors gave very helpful comments, which I have used to greatly improve the article to the state it is currently in. I feel the article is now ready for the nomination. Just want to note this is my first FA nomination so if I messed something up, please have patience. Thanks. Link20XX ( talk) 00:10, 22 October 2021 (UTC)
Comments from Tintor2 ( talk) 00:54, 22 October 2021 (UTC): Nice work in improving the article ever since the GA review. I hope it becomes FA so I'll try pointing any issue I find. In response, I requested a peer review for Psycho-Pass: the Movie if you can commment there too if possible. Well, leaving some comments:
*"The story follows a young pianist named Kо̄sei Arima, who loses the ability to hear the piano after his mother's death" For a lead that feels kinda short. Considering this is a premise-like area it feels like it could briefly expanded like you did in the anime episode list. Based on what I read, a mention of Kaori Miyazono's character is very important for the premise.
That's all. Ping me once you think you solved this issues please. Tintor2 ( talk) 00:54, 22 October 2021 (UTC)
I am very happy to see a manga article in the FAC space. I will do my best to help. I am somewhat familiar with manga, but I have never heard of this one. My comments are below:
Addressed comments
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These are my comments for the infobox, lead, and the "Plot" section. I will stop here and will continue my review once everything has been addressed. I hope these comments are helpful! Aoba47 ( talk) 02:09, 22 October 2021 (UTC)
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These are my comments through the "Development" section. I hope this is helpful! Aoba47 ( talk) 19:01, 22 October 2021 (UTC)
While the original manga depicts the characters in their junior high year, the film had them be in their second-year of high school instead., as it has been bothering me a bit. Shouldn't it be the character in junior high school instead? Junior high is not a grade or a year so this does not really make sense. Aoba47 ( talk) 02:31, 23 October 2021 (UTC)
Others, such as Rebecca Silverman from Anime News Network, were more critical and thought the plot was not as emotional as Arakawa intended it to be., you mention multiple critics, but only the Rebecca Silverman citation is included so the "others" is not supported.
Many critics praised the plot of the adaptation, with Chris Beveridge from The Fandom Post stating "plainly said, [the series] moved me",
others calling the series a masterpiece in storytelling., and
Others noted that the plot may not be emotional to every viewer). These sentences all claim that multiple critics have this perception, but there are only supported by one citation/critical review.
This is just my opinion though so if you would like to keep the FAC up that is up to you. It may be best to wait and hear back from other editors, as I fully admit that I am not the best reviewer out there. Apologies for the oppose. Aoba47 ( talk) 21:02, 23 October 2021 (UTC)
Coord note -- okay thanks Link20XX, I'll close this and you can bring back to FAC after two weeks, or when you've completed your improvements, whichever is longer. Cheers, Ian Rose ( talk) 23:32, 23 October 2021 (UTC)