The article was not promoted by Karanacs 17:32, 22 September 2009 [1].
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I am nominating this for featured article because I feel it meets the current featured article Critera. It is currently a Good Article and underwent an FAC preparatory peer review last month. All issues from that PR have been addressed. The article is complete, well sourced to quality, reliable sources, and covers all major aspects of the topic per guidelines. -- Collectonian ( talk · contribs) 22:51, 28 August 2009 (UTC) reply
It would be nice to have a little bit of explanation of the lesser known terms in the lead. Something so people don't have to click on "shōjo manga" and "light novel". We can probably assume that readers (of this article, anyways) know what manga and anime are. Although, if it gets on the main page, they would probably need more or orient them.
"In May 2009, the magazine was discontinued and the July 2009 issue being the last released." Sound funny. - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 02:39, 14 September 2009 (UTC) reply
"a circulation of 20,000 copies" word copies probably not needed (and in next sentence)
"with half of its circulation came from subscriptions rather than store sales." coming?
"some critics found the initial issues boring" is early better than initial? - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 03:03, 14 September 2009 (UTC) reply
"that they were not subscribers themselves" themselves probably not needed.
"magazine" is used 8 times in the lead, including twice in two sentences. You could probably reduce this. - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 03:06, 14 September 2009 (UTC) reply
I adjusted it some. As you mentioned, it's hard to do without messing up the flow. Not sure what to do. We may have to just rely on the wikilinks. - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 05:08, 14 September 2009 (UTC) reply
You might want to start a new paragraph after "featured Nana Komatsu of Nana on its July-dated cover." It seems like the stuff after that is its own idea.
"who would inspire the readers." - Maybe get rid of "the"
"With the first issue, a letter informed subscribers" - Not clear. Sounds like it's the first issue of Shonen Jump.
You may want to think about refactoring the "History" section a bit. The second paragraph talks about a mascot, and then colors. The third talks about colors, then goes back to discussing mascots. Otherwise, the section looks pretty good. FAs are supposed to be comprehensive, so are you sure you've included everything you can? I see you've got info from a couple of issues of Shojo Beat. Do the other issues have out of universe info? - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 07:02, 14 September 2009 (UTC) reply
What is the reasoning on not including refs for the table in the series section? Your using the primary source, I guess, and adding 30 Shojo Beat cites for it is funky I guess. Also, it's hard to verify that Absolute Boyfriend (for instance) ended in the March 2008 issue, since it's kind of dependant on the following issue, and maybe all following issues. Anyways, I'd like to here your thoughts on the issue. - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 02:57, 19 September 2009 (UTC) reply
"Viz stated that it would continue" - Should it be "will"? Might also be good to put a date on this, in case they don't follow through.
"between the ages of 13 and 19, and more than 84% of readers were at least 16 years old." - These stats are odd, because of the overlap. You might want to use the 12 to 17, and 18 to 34 numbers, since they don't overlap, and cover most of the audience, instead of the over 16 part. I'd keep the "core audience" thing. Maybe even use the words "core audience" and attribute it. - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 19:37, 19 September 2009 (UTC) reply
Looking pretty good. I added the other stat. Remove it if you don't like it. Also, I noticed the article has hyphens instead of fancy dashes. May want to make sure they're all fancy dashes when appropriate. - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 22:15, 19 September 2009 (UTC) reply
The article was not promoted by Karanacs 17:32, 22 September 2009 [1].
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I am nominating this for featured article because I feel it meets the current featured article Critera. It is currently a Good Article and underwent an FAC preparatory peer review last month. All issues from that PR have been addressed. The article is complete, well sourced to quality, reliable sources, and covers all major aspects of the topic per guidelines. -- Collectonian ( talk · contribs) 22:51, 28 August 2009 (UTC) reply
It would be nice to have a little bit of explanation of the lesser known terms in the lead. Something so people don't have to click on "shōjo manga" and "light novel". We can probably assume that readers (of this article, anyways) know what manga and anime are. Although, if it gets on the main page, they would probably need more or orient them.
"In May 2009, the magazine was discontinued and the July 2009 issue being the last released." Sound funny. - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 02:39, 14 September 2009 (UTC) reply
"a circulation of 20,000 copies" word copies probably not needed (and in next sentence)
"with half of its circulation came from subscriptions rather than store sales." coming?
"some critics found the initial issues boring" is early better than initial? - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 03:03, 14 September 2009 (UTC) reply
"that they were not subscribers themselves" themselves probably not needed.
"magazine" is used 8 times in the lead, including twice in two sentences. You could probably reduce this. - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 03:06, 14 September 2009 (UTC) reply
I adjusted it some. As you mentioned, it's hard to do without messing up the flow. Not sure what to do. We may have to just rely on the wikilinks. - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 05:08, 14 September 2009 (UTC) reply
You might want to start a new paragraph after "featured Nana Komatsu of Nana on its July-dated cover." It seems like the stuff after that is its own idea.
"who would inspire the readers." - Maybe get rid of "the"
"With the first issue, a letter informed subscribers" - Not clear. Sounds like it's the first issue of Shonen Jump.
You may want to think about refactoring the "History" section a bit. The second paragraph talks about a mascot, and then colors. The third talks about colors, then goes back to discussing mascots. Otherwise, the section looks pretty good. FAs are supposed to be comprehensive, so are you sure you've included everything you can? I see you've got info from a couple of issues of Shojo Beat. Do the other issues have out of universe info? - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 07:02, 14 September 2009 (UTC) reply
What is the reasoning on not including refs for the table in the series section? Your using the primary source, I guess, and adding 30 Shojo Beat cites for it is funky I guess. Also, it's hard to verify that Absolute Boyfriend (for instance) ended in the March 2008 issue, since it's kind of dependant on the following issue, and maybe all following issues. Anyways, I'd like to here your thoughts on the issue. - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 02:57, 19 September 2009 (UTC) reply
"Viz stated that it would continue" - Should it be "will"? Might also be good to put a date on this, in case they don't follow through.
"between the ages of 13 and 19, and more than 84% of readers were at least 16 years old." - These stats are odd, because of the overlap. You might want to use the 12 to 17, and 18 to 34 numbers, since they don't overlap, and cover most of the audience, instead of the over 16 part. I'd keep the "core audience" thing. Maybe even use the words "core audience" and attribute it. - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 19:37, 19 September 2009 (UTC) reply
Looking pretty good. I added the other stat. Remove it if you don't like it. Also, I noticed the article has hyphens instead of fancy dashes. May want to make sure they're all fancy dashes when appropriate. - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 22:15, 19 September 2009 (UTC) reply