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An exciting story from Hoosier History! This fairly short article is about a strike and subsequent riot that struck Indianapolis in 1913 - it was the greatest breakdown in public order ever seen by the city. Sources on the topic are few, but from the ones available, I've been able to piece together this article which documents a very pivotal moment in the improvement of labor condition in the state of Indiana. I look forward to your reviews, and will work to quickly resolve any issues that may arise. Thanks! — Charles Edward ( Talk | Contribs) 17:27, 11 May 2011 (UTC) reply
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Comments – Found quite a few grammar glitches and style points, which are detailed below. I wasn't expecting this many issues in a moderate-sized article, but the good news is that they should be simple to fix.
Oppose: This is an interesting article which I think has been brought to FAC prematurely. The very recent GA review made no comments on the article's content, and did not provide any basis for a critical assessment of whether the article meets the FA criteria. In my view a lot more work is necessary before those criteria can be met. There are a few issues relating to images, but my chief concern is prose.
With this number of issues arising in the lead, the likelihood is that prose problems will persist throughout the article. I have doubts as to whether all the problems can be resolved within the timeframe of this FAC, but you never know. By all means ping me when you think that all the issues have been addressed. Brianboulton ( talk) 22:48, 14 May 2011 (UTC) reply
The article was not promoted by SandyGeorgia 02:19, 16 May 2011 [1].
Indianapolis Streetcar Strike of 1913 ( | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)
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An exciting story from Hoosier History! This fairly short article is about a strike and subsequent riot that struck Indianapolis in 1913 - it was the greatest breakdown in public order ever seen by the city. Sources on the topic are few, but from the ones available, I've been able to piece together this article which documents a very pivotal moment in the improvement of labor condition in the state of Indiana. I look forward to your reviews, and will work to quickly resolve any issues that may arise. Thanks! — Charles Edward ( Talk | Contribs) 17:27, 11 May 2011 (UTC) reply
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Comments – Found quite a few grammar glitches and style points, which are detailed below. I wasn't expecting this many issues in a moderate-sized article, but the good news is that they should be simple to fix.
Oppose: This is an interesting article which I think has been brought to FAC prematurely. The very recent GA review made no comments on the article's content, and did not provide any basis for a critical assessment of whether the article meets the FA criteria. In my view a lot more work is necessary before those criteria can be met. There are a few issues relating to images, but my chief concern is prose.
With this number of issues arising in the lead, the likelihood is that prose problems will persist throughout the article. I have doubts as to whether all the problems can be resolved within the timeframe of this FAC, but you never know. By all means ping me when you think that all the issues have been addressed. Brianboulton ( talk) 22:48, 14 May 2011 (UTC) reply