The article was promoted by Gog the Mild via FACBot ( talk) 24 January 2021 [1].
This article is about the Australian children's musical group Hi-5 - they once rivalled the Wiggles in popularity, but as of this year, the band is inactive, ending a 20 year run. The page reached Good Article status in 2016, and I have worked on it for 5 years now. This is the 4th attempt at a Featured Article nomination, however, my most recent attempt was hindered due to minimal comments on the review. Now that I am more familiar with the process, having just secured my first FA with Bluey (2018 TV series), I believe that I will be able to secure more comments on this review. I am fully committed to the process, ready to collaborate with other editors, and have seeked out the involvement of mentors through a very successful and detailed peer review which has just been closed.
Looking forward to feedback. Thanks in advance! SatDis ( talk) 07:02, 12 December 2020 (UTC)
@ SandyGeorgia: Just a reminder to leave some comments if you are able to. Thank you in advance! SatDis ( talk) 21:44, 14 December 2020 (UTC)
Comments move to the talk page. Aoba47 ( talk) 22:52, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
That's it for all of my comments. I thought I might as well finish the review today. I am only focusing on the prose as I am not familiar with the publications being used as I am not from that area. I hope these comments are helpful, and have a great start to your week! Aoba47 ( talk) 19:49, 13 December 2020 (UTC)
As I am increasingly busy irl, there will be a delay in my review. Placing this as a placeholder. On first glance, the article is in good shape for FA. As I voiced my support for this article based on prose ( May 2019 FAC), I'm hoping to support on prose again. As mentioned by another review in the previous FAC, however, there may be spotcheck issues, which I'll leave to the source reviewer, HĐ ( talk) 10:42, 17 December 2020 (UTC)
then-recordshould be avoided unless a mention of who broke the record and when it was broken is there
Overall that's all I have. A well written article! Will be happy to support once my concerns have been addressed, HĐ ( talk) 03:49, 21 December 2020 (UTC)
As per request from my featured article review, I'll leave some comments that will eventually lead to a support. It's a good article, hence the GA promotion, and have little to pick at. This could be nitpicky depending on how you view it. This list isn't really organized, as I kinda just jumped around.
"In July 2006, de Leon Jones said she was intent on returning to Hi-5, however, in July 2007, made the decision to leave the group permanently to focus on being a mother."This should be split, using either a period or a semicolon.
Hi-5 continued to film one television series and record one album each year.?
"Four of their albums reached the top 10 on the ARIA Albums Chart; It's a Party (number four, July 2000), Boom Boom Beat (number three, August 2001), It's a Hi-5 Christmas (number four, December 2001) and Hi-5 Hits (number ten, July 2003)."Why are these not organized in any numeric order? I think the sentence would flow better with it, but probably not.
But seriously, fix these and a support from me. Good job! Le Panini [🥪] 05:31, 21 December 2020 (UTC)
created the television series for the Nine Network→ they actually created it specifically for Nine?
The band's work had multiple layers→ like what?
Harris's inspiration for Hi-5 came partly from living in England, where she realised she could develop a show with universal appeal and accessible themes such as family and animals.→ her quote could be better explained than this (right now I don't know what living in England and the realization she could develop a show with universal appeal have to do with each other)
She strove to incorporate items of current interest→ like what? are we talking current events, news stories, pop culture references, etc.??
Harris recalled watching pop group, the Spice Girls,→ suggesting changing to "Harris recalled watching the Spice Girls"
The creators saw the need for "life-affirming" television for rapidly maturing preschoolers and found most children learned from shows which incorporated movement and song.→ How were pages 131–151 accessed when the given URL only goes to page 8?
was produced in mid 1998→ I think there's supposed to be a dash (mid-1998)
After auditions for the group in June 1998 (narrowing down around 300 people to only five), the television pilot for Hi-5 was produced in mid 1998, with the original cast consisting of Kellie Crawford (née Hoggart), Kathleen de Leon Jones, Nathan Foley, Tim Harding and Charli Robinson, who were aged between 18 and 24 at the time of filming.→ This should definitely be split into two sentences.
with the original cast consisting of Kellie Crawford (née Hoggart), Kathleen de Leon Jones, Nathan Foley, Tim Harding and Charli Robinson,→ not in source
who were aged between 18 and 24 at the time of filming→ I think it's kind of original research to assume they were 18–24 at the time of filming when the source says the "cast are aged between 19 and 25" in September 1999
In September, Sony Music released the corresponding debut album, Jump and Jive with Hi-5→ this article is about the group, so maybe "the group's debut album"
The group toured Sydney in their first year.→ Right now this sentence could mean they toured around different places in Sydney. The source only refers to one show in Newcastle.
Given the amount of comments (and sourcing issues) I found myself writing for just three paragraphs, I am probably going to find it hard to support promotion. I might suggest looking into The Wikipedia Library if you haven't already as you may have an easier time finding higher-quality sources using ProQuest, etc., especially for the earlier years. Heartfox ( talk) 06:09, 28 December 2020 (UTC)
The series' creators loosely based it on an underlying educational structure influenced by Howard Gardner's theory of multiple intelligences, however, I don't believe a strong conclusion has been drawn as Gardner's theory has been cited by Hi-5 on several occasions (I have added these sources to better support the claim). SatDis ( talk) 06:01, 9 January 2021 (UTC)
@ SatDis: Just some quick first-read comments.
Hi-5 were an Australian children's musical group,don't think there needs to be a comma here.
highest paid entertainment entities"entertainment entities"? Tell me if there's otherwise a subtle distinction being made here, but wouldn't it "entertainers". Could not find the word "entity" in the Business Weekly articles.
and that the following years spent with the group were her favouritesfavorites -> favorite
Robinson (then referred to as Delaney) exited from the group in February 2008left would be better word than exit
the remaining original cast members had stated their intent to withdraw from the group.withdraw from -> leave
Park also stated she would be departing the groupdepart -> leaving
They did not receive the same critical reception as the original membersthe same (positive?) critical reception
Burgess and Maddren declared their departures in late 2012declared their departures -> left the group
Datuk Jared Lim, Asiason's managing director, conveyed plans to expand Hi-5 throughout Southeast Asiaconveyed -> described
entertainment entitiesI perhaps should've mentioned in the "Reception section.
Otherwise looks in good shape.
Cas Liber (
talk ·
contribs) 01:58, 6 January 2021 (UTC)
Comments moved to Talk. — ImaginesTigers ( talk) 21:16, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
Support. — ImaginesTigers ( talk) 01:36, 17 January 2021 (UTC)
The article was promoted by Gog the Mild via FACBot ( talk) 24 January 2021 [1].
This article is about the Australian children's musical group Hi-5 - they once rivalled the Wiggles in popularity, but as of this year, the band is inactive, ending a 20 year run. The page reached Good Article status in 2016, and I have worked on it for 5 years now. This is the 4th attempt at a Featured Article nomination, however, my most recent attempt was hindered due to minimal comments on the review. Now that I am more familiar with the process, having just secured my first FA with Bluey (2018 TV series), I believe that I will be able to secure more comments on this review. I am fully committed to the process, ready to collaborate with other editors, and have seeked out the involvement of mentors through a very successful and detailed peer review which has just been closed.
Looking forward to feedback. Thanks in advance! SatDis ( talk) 07:02, 12 December 2020 (UTC)
@ SandyGeorgia: Just a reminder to leave some comments if you are able to. Thank you in advance! SatDis ( talk) 21:44, 14 December 2020 (UTC)
Comments move to the talk page. Aoba47 ( talk) 22:52, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
That's it for all of my comments. I thought I might as well finish the review today. I am only focusing on the prose as I am not familiar with the publications being used as I am not from that area. I hope these comments are helpful, and have a great start to your week! Aoba47 ( talk) 19:49, 13 December 2020 (UTC)
As I am increasingly busy irl, there will be a delay in my review. Placing this as a placeholder. On first glance, the article is in good shape for FA. As I voiced my support for this article based on prose ( May 2019 FAC), I'm hoping to support on prose again. As mentioned by another review in the previous FAC, however, there may be spotcheck issues, which I'll leave to the source reviewer, HĐ ( talk) 10:42, 17 December 2020 (UTC)
then-recordshould be avoided unless a mention of who broke the record and when it was broken is there
Overall that's all I have. A well written article! Will be happy to support once my concerns have been addressed, HĐ ( talk) 03:49, 21 December 2020 (UTC)
As per request from my featured article review, I'll leave some comments that will eventually lead to a support. It's a good article, hence the GA promotion, and have little to pick at. This could be nitpicky depending on how you view it. This list isn't really organized, as I kinda just jumped around.
"In July 2006, de Leon Jones said she was intent on returning to Hi-5, however, in July 2007, made the decision to leave the group permanently to focus on being a mother."This should be split, using either a period or a semicolon.
Hi-5 continued to film one television series and record one album each year.?
"Four of their albums reached the top 10 on the ARIA Albums Chart; It's a Party (number four, July 2000), Boom Boom Beat (number three, August 2001), It's a Hi-5 Christmas (number four, December 2001) and Hi-5 Hits (number ten, July 2003)."Why are these not organized in any numeric order? I think the sentence would flow better with it, but probably not.
But seriously, fix these and a support from me. Good job! Le Panini [🥪] 05:31, 21 December 2020 (UTC)
created the television series for the Nine Network→ they actually created it specifically for Nine?
The band's work had multiple layers→ like what?
Harris's inspiration for Hi-5 came partly from living in England, where she realised she could develop a show with universal appeal and accessible themes such as family and animals.→ her quote could be better explained than this (right now I don't know what living in England and the realization she could develop a show with universal appeal have to do with each other)
She strove to incorporate items of current interest→ like what? are we talking current events, news stories, pop culture references, etc.??
Harris recalled watching pop group, the Spice Girls,→ suggesting changing to "Harris recalled watching the Spice Girls"
The creators saw the need for "life-affirming" television for rapidly maturing preschoolers and found most children learned from shows which incorporated movement and song.→ How were pages 131–151 accessed when the given URL only goes to page 8?
was produced in mid 1998→ I think there's supposed to be a dash (mid-1998)
After auditions for the group in June 1998 (narrowing down around 300 people to only five), the television pilot for Hi-5 was produced in mid 1998, with the original cast consisting of Kellie Crawford (née Hoggart), Kathleen de Leon Jones, Nathan Foley, Tim Harding and Charli Robinson, who were aged between 18 and 24 at the time of filming.→ This should definitely be split into two sentences.
with the original cast consisting of Kellie Crawford (née Hoggart), Kathleen de Leon Jones, Nathan Foley, Tim Harding and Charli Robinson,→ not in source
who were aged between 18 and 24 at the time of filming→ I think it's kind of original research to assume they were 18–24 at the time of filming when the source says the "cast are aged between 19 and 25" in September 1999
In September, Sony Music released the corresponding debut album, Jump and Jive with Hi-5→ this article is about the group, so maybe "the group's debut album"
The group toured Sydney in their first year.→ Right now this sentence could mean they toured around different places in Sydney. The source only refers to one show in Newcastle.
Given the amount of comments (and sourcing issues) I found myself writing for just three paragraphs, I am probably going to find it hard to support promotion. I might suggest looking into The Wikipedia Library if you haven't already as you may have an easier time finding higher-quality sources using ProQuest, etc., especially for the earlier years. Heartfox ( talk) 06:09, 28 December 2020 (UTC)
The series' creators loosely based it on an underlying educational structure influenced by Howard Gardner's theory of multiple intelligences, however, I don't believe a strong conclusion has been drawn as Gardner's theory has been cited by Hi-5 on several occasions (I have added these sources to better support the claim). SatDis ( talk) 06:01, 9 January 2021 (UTC)
@ SatDis: Just some quick first-read comments.
Hi-5 were an Australian children's musical group,don't think there needs to be a comma here.
highest paid entertainment entities"entertainment entities"? Tell me if there's otherwise a subtle distinction being made here, but wouldn't it "entertainers". Could not find the word "entity" in the Business Weekly articles.
and that the following years spent with the group were her favouritesfavorites -> favorite
Robinson (then referred to as Delaney) exited from the group in February 2008left would be better word than exit
the remaining original cast members had stated their intent to withdraw from the group.withdraw from -> leave
Park also stated she would be departing the groupdepart -> leaving
They did not receive the same critical reception as the original membersthe same (positive?) critical reception
Burgess and Maddren declared their departures in late 2012declared their departures -> left the group
Datuk Jared Lim, Asiason's managing director, conveyed plans to expand Hi-5 throughout Southeast Asiaconveyed -> described
entertainment entitiesI perhaps should've mentioned in the "Reception section.
Otherwise looks in good shape.
Cas Liber (
talk ·
contribs) 01:58, 6 January 2021 (UTC)
Comments moved to Talk. — ImaginesTigers ( talk) 21:16, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
Support. — ImaginesTigers ( talk) 01:36, 17 January 2021 (UTC)