The article was not promoted by SandyGeorgia 07:18, 6 July 2009 [1].
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I am nominating this for featured article because the article has undergone a major improvement within the past month or two. I have been working with ResMar to improve the references, images, and prose. I've done all I can for it, a Peer Review was recently completed and now I think its ready. ErgoSum• talk• trib 06:06, 22 June 2009 (UTC) reply
Oppose - mainly because of problems with the prose.
*Could the nominators justify the excessive use of quotation marks as in "hotspots", "hotspot", "mid-plate", "Big Island", "Hawaiian", "bump", "established", "evidence", "leaky", "plume head", "trail", "crack and magma", "leak", "great fissure", "attached", "shell", "saddles", "lava trees", "runny", "battle", and "blessing"?
*Here, "The Hawaii hotspot is one of the best known and most heavily studied" - the sources do not seem to say this.
*"A bend in the chain at 41 and 43 million years ago sharply divides the Hawaiian and Emperor sections" -which formed?
*"where volcanic activity is to be expected" - how about often occurs?
*"But theorized "hotspots" can occur far from any boundary" - theorized?
*This is cumbersome "At this speed, the Kure and Midway atolls have been traced to where the present island of Hawaii is now about 30 million years ago."
*"is dated to 82 million years" B.C? A.D, old?
*"Alternate" - should be "alternative".
*Here, "The Hawaii hotspot is unique, considering the vast majority of earthquakes and volcanic eruptions occur near plate boundaries, but the Hawaiian Islands are an exception, as the nearest plate boundary is more than 3,200 kilometers (1,988 mi) away." - I challenge the use of "unique" since we have have "vast majority" and not "all others".
*In this confusing sentence, "The direction, distance between, and size of the chain and its volcanoes presumably indicate the direction and speed of movement of the Pacific Plate, and records the history of plate movement." should "records" be " record"?
*"came up with" - is lazy writing.
*"in order to" - spot the redundancy?
*"The theory claimed" - I am not sure a theory can claim anything.
*More redundancy here, " At a point roughly 40–50 million years ago"
*"Pele's seaweed are sheets of brownish volcanic glass which form when pāhoehoe lava pours into the ocean." - which or that? If we want to retain "which" it needs a preceding comma.
*More redundancy here, "its rate of eruption gradually increases over a period of several hundred thousand years".
*"The lava produced is pressurized by the sea, disallowing explosive eruptions" - I am not sure "disallowing" is the right word.
*"For that reason, the typical type of lava is pillow lava, typical of underwater volcanic activity." _ typical....typical
These are just a few examples, I do not think the article is of FA standard yet. Graham Colm Talk 16:16, 27 June 2009 (UTC) reply
Support an important topic and good overview. I fixed one nit, and would suggest putting the Mythology section before the History but I just like things in chronological order. Then perhaps tied together with a mention at the start of the history section about early explorers and missionaries who recorded their experiences. Maybe one of the following:
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help)Also might mention Mahukona, a small submerged volcano off the coast of the Big Island, and perhaps Mokuaweoweo which I am going to split off from Mauna Loa, since the summit has a history of its own vs. the rift zone eruptions, but those might be too detailed. W Nowicki ( talk) 20:20, 4 July 2009 (UTC) reply
The article was not promoted by SandyGeorgia 07:18, 6 July 2009 [1].
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I am nominating this for featured article because the article has undergone a major improvement within the past month or two. I have been working with ResMar to improve the references, images, and prose. I've done all I can for it, a Peer Review was recently completed and now I think its ready. ErgoSum• talk• trib 06:06, 22 June 2009 (UTC) reply
Oppose - mainly because of problems with the prose.
*Could the nominators justify the excessive use of quotation marks as in "hotspots", "hotspot", "mid-plate", "Big Island", "Hawaiian", "bump", "established", "evidence", "leaky", "plume head", "trail", "crack and magma", "leak", "great fissure", "attached", "shell", "saddles", "lava trees", "runny", "battle", and "blessing"?
*Here, "The Hawaii hotspot is one of the best known and most heavily studied" - the sources do not seem to say this.
*"A bend in the chain at 41 and 43 million years ago sharply divides the Hawaiian and Emperor sections" -which formed?
*"where volcanic activity is to be expected" - how about often occurs?
*"But theorized "hotspots" can occur far from any boundary" - theorized?
*This is cumbersome "At this speed, the Kure and Midway atolls have been traced to where the present island of Hawaii is now about 30 million years ago."
*"is dated to 82 million years" B.C? A.D, old?
*"Alternate" - should be "alternative".
*Here, "The Hawaii hotspot is unique, considering the vast majority of earthquakes and volcanic eruptions occur near plate boundaries, but the Hawaiian Islands are an exception, as the nearest plate boundary is more than 3,200 kilometers (1,988 mi) away." - I challenge the use of "unique" since we have have "vast majority" and not "all others".
*In this confusing sentence, "The direction, distance between, and size of the chain and its volcanoes presumably indicate the direction and speed of movement of the Pacific Plate, and records the history of plate movement." should "records" be " record"?
*"came up with" - is lazy writing.
*"in order to" - spot the redundancy?
*"The theory claimed" - I am not sure a theory can claim anything.
*More redundancy here, " At a point roughly 40–50 million years ago"
*"Pele's seaweed are sheets of brownish volcanic glass which form when pāhoehoe lava pours into the ocean." - which or that? If we want to retain "which" it needs a preceding comma.
*More redundancy here, "its rate of eruption gradually increases over a period of several hundred thousand years".
*"The lava produced is pressurized by the sea, disallowing explosive eruptions" - I am not sure "disallowing" is the right word.
*"For that reason, the typical type of lava is pillow lava, typical of underwater volcanic activity." _ typical....typical
These are just a few examples, I do not think the article is of FA standard yet. Graham Colm Talk 16:16, 27 June 2009 (UTC) reply
Support an important topic and good overview. I fixed one nit, and would suggest putting the Mythology section before the History but I just like things in chronological order. Then perhaps tied together with a mention at the start of the history section about early explorers and missionaries who recorded their experiences. Maybe one of the following:
{{
cite book}}
: Check date values in: |accessdate=
(
help){{
cite book}}
: |volume=
has extra text (
help)Also might mention Mahukona, a small submerged volcano off the coast of the Big Island, and perhaps Mokuaweoweo which I am going to split off from Mauna Loa, since the summit has a history of its own vs. the rift zone eruptions, but those might be too detailed. W Nowicki ( talk) 20:20, 4 July 2009 (UTC) reply