Oppose: Agree with above, the lead needs to be expanded to at least one paragraph and one and two sentence paragraphs need to be adapted to ensure quality prose. If these issues are fixed and no other major qualms are presented I will most likely switch to support. Good luck.
michaeltalk04:16, 23 April 2006 (UTC)reply
weak oppose -- was going to suggest taking the dull grey image from the info box and swaping with the entrance image but it is/was a prison. The section on notable prisoners expand to 2-3 sentences on each including time period they where there. ie
Brandon Abott is a convicted of bank robbery 1989(?) sentence to 20yrs. escaped by fabricating a Prison Guards uniform and wlked out through the front gates in 1992. He spent 2 and 1/2 years on the run as Australia most wanted criminal.
The articles is directly about the building not the inmates but that list is just a little distracting
Gnangarra
I would say the article is about the institution rather than the building alone. So I have nothing against mention of notable prisoners. But perhaps it could be prosified instead of being left as a list. -
Mgm|
(talk)18:08, 23 April 2006 (UTC)reply
Comment You should explain the image of the 6th commandment...otherwise it appears it was randomly stuck in there. --
Osbus18:30, 23 April 2006 (UTC)reply
In particular, the caption should make it clear that it is a picture from the prison. It would probably also be better to have it in the text where the chapel is mentioned.
JPD (
talk)
14:25, 24 April 2006 (UTC)reply
Oppose. Gallery is not serving any useful purpose in the article, which already links to
Wikimedia Commons. If integrating the additional images within the text doesn't make sense, the pointer to Commons serves those readers looking for images.
Jkelly23:20, 23 April 2006 (UTC)reply
Oppose: Agree with above, the lead needs to be expanded to at least one paragraph and one and two sentence paragraphs need to be adapted to ensure quality prose. If these issues are fixed and no other major qualms are presented I will most likely switch to support. Good luck.
michaeltalk04:16, 23 April 2006 (UTC)reply
weak oppose -- was going to suggest taking the dull grey image from the info box and swaping with the entrance image but it is/was a prison. The section on notable prisoners expand to 2-3 sentences on each including time period they where there. ie
Brandon Abott is a convicted of bank robbery 1989(?) sentence to 20yrs. escaped by fabricating a Prison Guards uniform and wlked out through the front gates in 1992. He spent 2 and 1/2 years on the run as Australia most wanted criminal.
The articles is directly about the building not the inmates but that list is just a little distracting
Gnangarra
I would say the article is about the institution rather than the building alone. So I have nothing against mention of notable prisoners. But perhaps it could be prosified instead of being left as a list. -
Mgm|
(talk)18:08, 23 April 2006 (UTC)reply
Comment You should explain the image of the 6th commandment...otherwise it appears it was randomly stuck in there. --
Osbus18:30, 23 April 2006 (UTC)reply
In particular, the caption should make it clear that it is a picture from the prison. It would probably also be better to have it in the text where the chapel is mentioned.
JPD (
talk)
14:25, 24 April 2006 (UTC)reply
Oppose. Gallery is not serving any useful purpose in the article, which already links to
Wikimedia Commons. If integrating the additional images within the text doesn't make sense, the pointer to Commons serves those readers looking for images.
Jkelly23:20, 23 April 2006 (UTC)reply