The article was promoted by Gog the Mild via FACBot ( talk) 20 December 2021 [1].
In 2018, 20th Century Fox released Drew Goddard's Bad Times at the El Royale, a thriller set in the 1960s. The film features an ensemble cast including Jeff Bridges, Cynthia Erivo, Dakota Johnson, Jon Hamm, and Chris Hemsworth. It was praised by critics but bombed at the box office. I rewrote the article in 2020, adding over 100 references. It is a GA and has appeared on the main page through DYK. I believe it can become an FA. Some Dude From North Carolina ( talk) 14:39, 2 November 2021 (UTC)
2018 American neo-noir thriller film written— WP:SOB?
and slow pacing. It— "slow pacing" is WP:VOICE
and Goddard Textiles, Goddard produced— repetition of Goddard
Furthermore, Erivo would also go on— "furthermore", "also go on", seems kinda redundant
chronological order, due to most of the story taking place in the same location, to improve— kinda awkward
was working on The Greatest Showman in 2017.— if, according to TGS's article, filming began in 2016, wouldn't that be 2016 and 2017
Working with "distinctive characters" he believed— comma after "characters"?
respectively, on October 12, 2018.— remove respectively as redundant
while a digital rerelease on→ while a digital re-release on
included two additional songs, "This Old Heart— I think a colon, instead of a comma, would work better in this case
and " Hold On, I'm Comin'", performed→ and " Hold On, I'm Comin'", performed (edit to see)
Following its rerelease, the soundtrack→ Following its re-release, the soundtrack
know about the characters so far."— per MOS:LQ, move the full stop outside of the quotation mark
high runtime, slow pacing— WP:VOICEy
average reviews."— move the full stop outside the quotation mark
and slow pacing.[3] Additionally— WP:VOICE
gets too clever."— move the full stop outside the quotation mark
That's what I got on a first pass (not a lot). Ping me once these are resolved! Pamzeis ( talk) 02:00, 3 November 2021 (UTC)
This is my only comment for now, but I will read through the article again later in the week. I have made some minor edits, mostly involving linking. Have a great rest of your week! Aoba47 ( talk) 20:37, 3 November 2021 (UTC)
I haven't read the whole thing because I want to watch the film first, but the lead currently seems very bare bones and workmanlike, giving very little idea about what is unique about the film and its making. Much of the second paragraph is basically redundant to the infobox ("it was shot by X, scored by Y and edited by Z"). Just glancing through the Production section it's clear you can write a more substantive paragraph, going beyond dates and a role call. You can also add something from Themes (perhaps summarising it) to the first paragraph.
On the other hand, I feel there is some stuff you can trim. For e.g., "took place until April, in British Columbia, specifically mostly on a large studio set in Vancouver"? Also, what was well-received about the film is repeated twice ("its ensemble cast, soundtrack, and cinematography, ... story, cinematography, writing, and acting"). Is "Best Thriller Film at the 45th Saturn Awards" an accolade even worth mentioning? Lastly, I'm confused as to how "grossing $31.9 million against a $32 million budget" constitutes a bomb.—
indopug (
talk)
15:48, 7 November 2021 (UTC)
Spot-checks not done. The source formatting looks consistent and coherent to me. I have to admit that I don't know most sources - let alone their authors - sufficiently to establish whether they are reliable, but I'll try. Is BackStageOL, Collider, iFilm and Newsweek a reliable source? Jo-Jo Eumerus ( talk) 14:25, 30 November 2021 (UTC)
Apologies for the delay.
"the identity of the person was narrowed down to one of"doesn't sound right. Some Dude From North Carolina ( talk) 21:59, 16 December 2021 (UTC)
Great article, I think these items are relatively trivial. Ping me when you're done. The Rambling Man ( Keep wearing the mask...) 20:13, 16 December 2021 (UTC)
I remember following the PR of this article, so here I am. Gerald WL 10:07, 14 December 2021 (UTC)
Resolved comments from Gerald WL 02:30, 16 December 2021 (UTC) |
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=====Lead and infobox=====
Plot
Themes & analysis
Production
Marketing - Release
Overall, a nice FAC. Wish best of luck with this. Gerald WL 10:07, 14 December 2021 (UTC)
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The article was promoted by Gog the Mild via FACBot ( talk) 20 December 2021 [1].
In 2018, 20th Century Fox released Drew Goddard's Bad Times at the El Royale, a thriller set in the 1960s. The film features an ensemble cast including Jeff Bridges, Cynthia Erivo, Dakota Johnson, Jon Hamm, and Chris Hemsworth. It was praised by critics but bombed at the box office. I rewrote the article in 2020, adding over 100 references. It is a GA and has appeared on the main page through DYK. I believe it can become an FA. Some Dude From North Carolina ( talk) 14:39, 2 November 2021 (UTC)
2018 American neo-noir thriller film written— WP:SOB?
and slow pacing. It— "slow pacing" is WP:VOICE
and Goddard Textiles, Goddard produced— repetition of Goddard
Furthermore, Erivo would also go on— "furthermore", "also go on", seems kinda redundant
chronological order, due to most of the story taking place in the same location, to improve— kinda awkward
was working on The Greatest Showman in 2017.— if, according to TGS's article, filming began in 2016, wouldn't that be 2016 and 2017
Working with "distinctive characters" he believed— comma after "characters"?
respectively, on October 12, 2018.— remove respectively as redundant
while a digital rerelease on→ while a digital re-release on
included two additional songs, "This Old Heart— I think a colon, instead of a comma, would work better in this case
and " Hold On, I'm Comin'", performed→ and " Hold On, I'm Comin'", performed (edit to see)
Following its rerelease, the soundtrack→ Following its re-release, the soundtrack
know about the characters so far."— per MOS:LQ, move the full stop outside of the quotation mark
high runtime, slow pacing— WP:VOICEy
average reviews."— move the full stop outside the quotation mark
and slow pacing.[3] Additionally— WP:VOICE
gets too clever."— move the full stop outside the quotation mark
That's what I got on a first pass (not a lot). Ping me once these are resolved! Pamzeis ( talk) 02:00, 3 November 2021 (UTC)
This is my only comment for now, but I will read through the article again later in the week. I have made some minor edits, mostly involving linking. Have a great rest of your week! Aoba47 ( talk) 20:37, 3 November 2021 (UTC)
I haven't read the whole thing because I want to watch the film first, but the lead currently seems very bare bones and workmanlike, giving very little idea about what is unique about the film and its making. Much of the second paragraph is basically redundant to the infobox ("it was shot by X, scored by Y and edited by Z"). Just glancing through the Production section it's clear you can write a more substantive paragraph, going beyond dates and a role call. You can also add something from Themes (perhaps summarising it) to the first paragraph.
On the other hand, I feel there is some stuff you can trim. For e.g., "took place until April, in British Columbia, specifically mostly on a large studio set in Vancouver"? Also, what was well-received about the film is repeated twice ("its ensemble cast, soundtrack, and cinematography, ... story, cinematography, writing, and acting"). Is "Best Thriller Film at the 45th Saturn Awards" an accolade even worth mentioning? Lastly, I'm confused as to how "grossing $31.9 million against a $32 million budget" constitutes a bomb.—
indopug (
talk)
15:48, 7 November 2021 (UTC)
Spot-checks not done. The source formatting looks consistent and coherent to me. I have to admit that I don't know most sources - let alone their authors - sufficiently to establish whether they are reliable, but I'll try. Is BackStageOL, Collider, iFilm and Newsweek a reliable source? Jo-Jo Eumerus ( talk) 14:25, 30 November 2021 (UTC)
Apologies for the delay.
"the identity of the person was narrowed down to one of"doesn't sound right. Some Dude From North Carolina ( talk) 21:59, 16 December 2021 (UTC)
Great article, I think these items are relatively trivial. Ping me when you're done. The Rambling Man ( Keep wearing the mask...) 20:13, 16 December 2021 (UTC)
I remember following the PR of this article, so here I am. Gerald WL 10:07, 14 December 2021 (UTC)
Resolved comments from Gerald WL 02:30, 16 December 2021 (UTC) |
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=====Lead and infobox=====
Plot
Themes & analysis
Production
Marketing - Release
Overall, a nice FAC. Wish best of luck with this. Gerald WL 10:07, 14 December 2021 (UTC)
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