The article was not promoted by SandyGeorgia 19:12, 10 October 2009 [1].
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I am nominating this for featured article because I feel it meets the criteria after a 2nd peer review, and a month of improvements. Its about a long-running role-playing game with a checkered, and I think interesting, history. Gakon5 was kind enough to copy-edit several sections. Sebquantic ( talk) 03:49, 25 September 2009 (UTC) reply
Date formats are consistent in article text and in refs, and it's definitely got lots of facts about the game, so good job. I made some small changes and think the prose could be better:
I may list more above, but consider finding a second copyeditor to look over the whole article. It can't hurt. -- an odd name 06:53, 26 September 2009 (UTC) reply
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I copyedited the Release, Rendering upgrade, and Free Play program sections. In terms of broad issues, I'm finding that not enough context is always given with regards to when things happen. Some examples:
I guess that's it for that, but there may be other examples elsewhere in the article. A few other issues:
Release
Major expansions
Free Play program
Development
-- gakon5 ( talk) 18:00, 26 September 2009 (UTC) reply
Let's look at the plot section...
Plot synopsis:
Skill System:
Combat:
Dynamic missions:
-- gakon5 ( talk) 23:24, 30 September 2009 (UTC) reply
An independent copy-edit would be good: it's not too big a job. Tony (talk) 09:05, 29 September 2009 (UTC) reply
The article was not promoted by SandyGeorgia 19:12, 10 October 2009 [1].
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I am nominating this for featured article because I feel it meets the criteria after a 2nd peer review, and a month of improvements. Its about a long-running role-playing game with a checkered, and I think interesting, history. Gakon5 was kind enough to copy-edit several sections. Sebquantic ( talk) 03:49, 25 September 2009 (UTC) reply
Date formats are consistent in article text and in refs, and it's definitely got lots of facts about the game, so good job. I made some small changes and think the prose could be better:
I may list more above, but consider finding a second copyeditor to look over the whole article. It can't hurt. -- an odd name 06:53, 26 September 2009 (UTC) reply
Comments by
gakon5 (
talk)
I copyedited the Release, Rendering upgrade, and Free Play program sections. In terms of broad issues, I'm finding that not enough context is always given with regards to when things happen. Some examples:
I guess that's it for that, but there may be other examples elsewhere in the article. A few other issues:
Release
Major expansions
Free Play program
Development
-- gakon5 ( talk) 18:00, 26 September 2009 (UTC) reply
Let's look at the plot section...
Plot synopsis:
Skill System:
Combat:
Dynamic missions:
-- gakon5 ( talk) 23:24, 30 September 2009 (UTC) reply
An independent copy-edit would be good: it's not too big a job. Tony (talk) 09:05, 29 September 2009 (UTC) reply