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Nice work! Welcome to the wonderful world of Wikipedia! Wadewitz ( talk) 06:45, 21 January 2012 (UTC)
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This is called a userbox and there are a variety of them that you can add to your userpage to express your interests, political values, dietary preferences, etc. You are not required to have one and there is virtually no limit to how many you can have.
I have placed this on your userpage because your instructor has informed me that some of you have had difficulty remembering or finding your coursepage. This link will be right here on your userpage unless you decide to remove it (which you can do at any time.) If you ever forget how to get to your class resources, just click on your username up in the top-right of the screen and you'll be just one more click away.
If you need to reach me (one of your two Campus Ambassadors), my contact information is here: User:Koavf/CA.
Please remember to pace yourself and be aware that 90% of writing a good article is well-formed prose and citing your sources. Anything extraneous or technical is where I can be of assistance. (And if you need help editing your prose or finding sources, I can try to give a hand there as well.)
I hope you all have a good day and a productive semester. I'll see some of you this coming Wednesday and any of you if you wish to schedule a time to meet. — Justin (koavf)❤ T☮ C☺ M☯ 16:55, 8 February 2012 (UTC)
Hello! Thanks for the message and good luck with your project this semester. Bburk ( talk) 14:39, 20 February 2012 (UTC)
Resources?
Hey, you mentioned on the talk page of American Born Chinese that you had some resources regarding the awards. If you would like to share, I would be grateful! Kida5887 ( talk) 17:55, 27 March 2012 (UTC)
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These might have some bits and pieces of info that could help you. I will keep my eyes peeled as I comb through the research. Good Luck!
Song, Min Hyoung. ""How good it is to be a monkey": comics, racial formation, and American Born Chinese." Mosaic (Winnipeg). 43.1 (2010): 73. Web. 4 Mar. 2012.
Davis, Rocio G.. "Gene Luen Yang's American Born Chinese: Challenging the Comic Stereotype."Graphic Subjects: Critical Essays on Autobiography and Graphic Novels. Ed. Michael A. Chaney. Madison: U of Wisconsin P, 2011. 279-82. Print.
Morton, Paul. "The Millions Interview: Gene Luen Yang."Millions. 08 Jul 2010: n. page. Web. 4 Mar. 2012.
(This one isn't peer reviewed or anything, but it's better than nothing!) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kida5887 ( talk • contribs) 23:04, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
- One ref was named Hamline and the other hamline. Case matters. I fixed it for you. later. Ling.Nut3 ( talk) 11:24, 21 April 2012 (UTC)
- Cite error I'm glad this got fixed: you can definitely call me if you have last-minute problems. — Justin (koavf)❤ T☮ C☺ M☯ 19:24, 21 April 2012 (UTC)
- Of course That's why I'm here--I'll read it now. By the way, you can always revert to an earlier version or just save things in your sandbox and copy and paste them later. —
Justin (koavf)❤
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M☯ 01:13, 22 April 2012 (UTC)
- Review First off, I'd like to congratulate you on doing some fine work and on being wise enough to use all of the resources at your disposal to ensure success. Your article is off to a good start and I can tell that you've used some good sources (e.g. Berkeley's web site), some acceptable sources (first-hand ones, like the back cover to the graphic novel), and some questionable sources (e.g. Beyond the Pale Books is a Wordpress blog--look at the bottom of the page. Anyone can have a blog, so how do I know that this is a reliable source? Why should I trust the claims they make?) For information like the list of awards the graphic novel has won, you can easily find this information using Google from the sources themselves or possibly a third party. That would be more trustworthy than the book jacket.
- The section on using graphic novels as a teaching aide is a great addition--do you know if anyone else has adopted this model? What kind of response have students had toward using comics for instruction?
- Some of the language you use is either superfluous or uses too strong of a point-of-view. For instance, "[his comic] won him the prestigious Xeric Grant"--it's not our place to say that an award is prestigious, that's for the reader to decide. Some of your sentences are choppy and short; it would be better to connect them into one long, coherent thought. For instance, rather than, "n a speech at Penn State, where he spoke as a part of a Graphic Novel Speaker Series, Yang recalled that both of his parents always told him stories during his childhood.[4] This set the foundation for Gene's career in comics." you could simply have "n a speech at Penn State, where he spoke as a part of a Graphic Novel Speaker Series, Yang recalled that both of his parents always told him stories during his childhood,[4] which set the foundation for his career in comics." (Note also that I changed "Gene" to the more professional "Yang"--your tone is a little conversational.)
- I hope you understand that these criticism are fairly minor, except for the issue about sourcing. It's more important to have a generally well-written and sourced article with a slightly unencyclopedic tone than to have professional prose that has no citations. These are also some first impressions as I haven't read the article before tonight. Please let me know if you want me to continue proofreading it! —
Justin (koavf)❤
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C☺
M☯ 01:35, 22 April 2012 (UTC)
- Citations That's a good question about citing a paragraph and there are several approaches. The easiest way is to do something like this:
- "...went to the moon in 1969.<ref name="moon">{{Cite web |url=http://com.example/ title=Moon History |date=November 18, 2009 |accessdate=April 21, 2012 |publisher=[[NASA]] |last=Moonman |first=Jerry}}</ref> He would later attempt to build his own rocket for Martian travel, but died instead.<ref name="moon" />"
- If that seems confusing, go ahead and put an entire paragraph and just use one citation at the end. The important thing is that you're finding good sources in the first place and then writing good prose to accompany it. Precise details about how to cite sources or your tone are still important, but not critical. —
Justin (koavf)❤
T☮
C☺
M☯ 02:12, 22 April 2012 (UTC)
- Thank you The line between amazing and embarrassing is very thin. Congrats to you for working hard on your assignment and making use of the resources at your disposal! Those are two good skills that will serve you well in life. — Justin (koavf)❤ T☮ C☺ M☯ 03:47, 26 April 2012 (UTC)
Excellent I hope you do decide to stick around: there are plenty of interesting things to do and interesting persons to meet here. And you'll be contributing to a free and open repository of the world's knowledge, which I think is a pretty great thing. — Justin (koavf)❤ T☮ C☺ M☯ 03:59, 26 April 2012 (UTC)
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Nice work! Welcome to the wonderful world of Wikipedia! Wadewitz ( talk) 06:45, 21 January 2012 (UTC)
User:Koavf/Userboxes/Litbox You may have noticed this rectangle has been placed on your userpage:
|
| IUPUI coursepage for Adolescent Lit |
This is called a userbox and there are a variety of them that you can add to your userpage to express your interests, political values, dietary preferences, etc. You are not required to have one and there is virtually no limit to how many you can have.
I have placed this on your userpage because your instructor has informed me that some of you have had difficulty remembering or finding your coursepage. This link will be right here on your userpage unless you decide to remove it (which you can do at any time.) If you ever forget how to get to your class resources, just click on your username up in the top-right of the screen and you'll be just one more click away.
If you need to reach me (one of your two Campus Ambassadors), my contact information is here: User:Koavf/CA.
Please remember to pace yourself and be aware that 90% of writing a good article is well-formed prose and citing your sources. Anything extraneous or technical is where I can be of assistance. (And if you need help editing your prose or finding sources, I can try to give a hand there as well.)
I hope you all have a good day and a productive semester. I'll see some of you this coming Wednesday and any of you if you wish to schedule a time to meet. — Justin (koavf)❤ T☮ C☺ M☯ 16:55, 8 February 2012 (UTC)
Hello! Thanks for the message and good luck with your project this semester. Bburk ( talk) 14:39, 20 February 2012 (UTC)
Resources?
Hey, you mentioned on the talk page of American Born Chinese that you had some resources regarding the awards. If you would like to share, I would be grateful! Kida5887 ( talk) 17:55, 27 March 2012 (UTC)
|
|
These might have some bits and pieces of info that could help you. I will keep my eyes peeled as I comb through the research. Good Luck!
Song, Min Hyoung. ""How good it is to be a monkey": comics, racial formation, and American Born Chinese." Mosaic (Winnipeg). 43.1 (2010): 73. Web. 4 Mar. 2012.
Davis, Rocio G.. "Gene Luen Yang's American Born Chinese: Challenging the Comic Stereotype."Graphic Subjects: Critical Essays on Autobiography and Graphic Novels. Ed. Michael A. Chaney. Madison: U of Wisconsin P, 2011. 279-82. Print.
Morton, Paul. "The Millions Interview: Gene Luen Yang."Millions. 08 Jul 2010: n. page. Web. 4 Mar. 2012.
(This one isn't peer reviewed or anything, but it's better than nothing!) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kida5887 ( talk • contribs) 23:04, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
- One ref was named Hamline and the other hamline. Case matters. I fixed it for you. later. Ling.Nut3 ( talk) 11:24, 21 April 2012 (UTC)
- Cite error I'm glad this got fixed: you can definitely call me if you have last-minute problems. — Justin (koavf)❤ T☮ C☺ M☯ 19:24, 21 April 2012 (UTC)
- Of course That's why I'm here--I'll read it now. By the way, you can always revert to an earlier version or just save things in your sandbox and copy and paste them later. —
Justin (koavf)❤
T☮
C☺
M☯ 01:13, 22 April 2012 (UTC)
- Review First off, I'd like to congratulate you on doing some fine work and on being wise enough to use all of the resources at your disposal to ensure success. Your article is off to a good start and I can tell that you've used some good sources (e.g. Berkeley's web site), some acceptable sources (first-hand ones, like the back cover to the graphic novel), and some questionable sources (e.g. Beyond the Pale Books is a Wordpress blog--look at the bottom of the page. Anyone can have a blog, so how do I know that this is a reliable source? Why should I trust the claims they make?) For information like the list of awards the graphic novel has won, you can easily find this information using Google from the sources themselves or possibly a third party. That would be more trustworthy than the book jacket.
- The section on using graphic novels as a teaching aide is a great addition--do you know if anyone else has adopted this model? What kind of response have students had toward using comics for instruction?
- Some of the language you use is either superfluous or uses too strong of a point-of-view. For instance, "[his comic] won him the prestigious Xeric Grant"--it's not our place to say that an award is prestigious, that's for the reader to decide. Some of your sentences are choppy and short; it would be better to connect them into one long, coherent thought. For instance, rather than, "n a speech at Penn State, where he spoke as a part of a Graphic Novel Speaker Series, Yang recalled that both of his parents always told him stories during his childhood.[4] This set the foundation for Gene's career in comics." you could simply have "n a speech at Penn State, where he spoke as a part of a Graphic Novel Speaker Series, Yang recalled that both of his parents always told him stories during his childhood,[4] which set the foundation for his career in comics." (Note also that I changed "Gene" to the more professional "Yang"--your tone is a little conversational.)
- I hope you understand that these criticism are fairly minor, except for the issue about sourcing. It's more important to have a generally well-written and sourced article with a slightly unencyclopedic tone than to have professional prose that has no citations. These are also some first impressions as I haven't read the article before tonight. Please let me know if you want me to continue proofreading it! —
Justin (koavf)❤
T☮
C☺
M☯ 01:35, 22 April 2012 (UTC)
- Citations That's a good question about citing a paragraph and there are several approaches. The easiest way is to do something like this:
- "...went to the moon in 1969.<ref name="moon">{{Cite web |url=http://com.example/ title=Moon History |date=November 18, 2009 |accessdate=April 21, 2012 |publisher=[[NASA]] |last=Moonman |first=Jerry}}</ref> He would later attempt to build his own rocket for Martian travel, but died instead.<ref name="moon" />"
- If that seems confusing, go ahead and put an entire paragraph and just use one citation at the end. The important thing is that you're finding good sources in the first place and then writing good prose to accompany it. Precise details about how to cite sources or your tone are still important, but not critical. —
Justin (koavf)❤
T☮
C☺
M☯ 02:12, 22 April 2012 (UTC)
- Thank you The line between amazing and embarrassing is very thin. Congrats to you for working hard on your assignment and making use of the resources at your disposal! Those are two good skills that will serve you well in life. — Justin (koavf)❤ T☮ C☺ M☯ 03:47, 26 April 2012 (UTC)
Excellent I hope you do decide to stick around: there are plenty of interesting things to do and interesting persons to meet here. And you'll be contributing to a free and open repository of the world's knowledge, which I think is a pretty great thing. — Justin (koavf)❤ T☮ C☺ M☯ 03:59, 26 April 2012 (UTC)
Hello. In case you didn't know, when you add content to
talk pages and Wikipedia pages that have open discussion, you should
sign your posts by typing four
tildes ( ~~~~ ) at the end of your comment. You could also click on the signature button
or
located above the edit window. This will automatically insert a signature with your username or IP address and the time you posted the comment. This information is useful because other editors will be able to tell who said what, and when they said it. Thank you. --
SineBot (
talk) 11:59, 21 April 2012 (UTC)
Hi! Please take a few minutes to fill out this survey about the Wikipedia Education Program. This is our opportunity to improve the program and resources we provide students, so your feedback and input is integral to our future success. Thank you so much! JMathewson (WMF) ( talk) 23:56, 21 May 2012 (UTC)
You are vegan, so I am happy! Happy! Happy! Awesome!
Docterwhocupcake (
talk) 05:46, 28 August 2017 (UTC)