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Hello :) JeshuaKJohn ( talk) 06:35, 14 February 2018 (UTC)
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) ( talk) 20:32, 23 January 2018 (UTC)
Hello this is Vivi from GPP. I hope that this is the correct place to be commenting. Vivikir ( talk) 07:45, 26 January 2018 (UTC)
hey
Love this Class! — Preceding unsigned comment added by JeshuaKJohn ( talk • contribs) 06:35, 14 February 2018 (UTC)
Peer Review
Nutrition Transition
This article is moderately devloped but all the topics are relevant to the the article. You have done a wonderful job adding to the implications for policy.
Just a suggestion, I think you should consider finding other scholarly research on food deserts/insecurity. I think it would be beneficial for you to really focus on the stakeholders at hand. How is the nutrition transition affecting communities - women? children? You could also add on information about the influence of media (i.e. advertisment cartoons aimed at children). How does globalization play a part in this? You don't have to add this onto the article but these are some questions that come to my mind when reviewing your topic. It is interesting to think about differences between nutrition habits between countries but also the similarities that we find (i.e. through globalization, we can have McDonalds in many countries around the world).
I think that there is more content that can be added to this article, such as the recommendations Professor Talwalker gave you about having country specific problems and policies.
All of the subheadings are pretty relevant to the article topics, with a neutral point of view. Adding more information about specific countries will expand this article and provide different angles in which the nutrition transition has affected communities throughout the world. The citations come from reputable and scholarly sources, however, it would be good to find more recent sources within the past five years, if possible.
Effects of NAFTA on Mexico
I like that you linked the nutrition transition link to this article! So far, you have a solid idea of adding a health outcomes/health implications section. The information you have provided is comprehensive and detailed. It provides a neutral view and remains in a scholarly tone.
I think you could also incorporate the nutrition transition link on the "See also" section, in case people miss the linked word in the article.
Are there more recent publications in which you could create a timeline section. This could just be similar to a history subsection so that it would be easier to readers to understand. I think it would be helpful for you to work on a 2017 section of the most recent event that has been happening around this topic.
Lorraineador (
talk) 05:26, 19 March 2018 (UTC)
I really like your Wikipedia edits, they are good, I do not have a specific feedback except I would encourage you to add more sources to make your contributions more reliable ( from many reliable sources). 192.31.105.128 ( talk) 00:19, 27 April 2018 (UTC)
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Hi!
Lorraineador (
talk) 08:06, 22 January 2018 (UTC)
Hello :) JeshuaKJohn ( talk) 06:35, 14 February 2018 (UTC)
Hello, Nzahid, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
I hope you enjoy editing here. If you haven't already done so, please check out the student training library, which introduces you to editing and Wikipedia's core principles. You may also want to check out the Teahouse, a community of Wikipedia editors dedicated to helping new users. Below are some resources to help you get started editing.
Handouts
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Additional Resources
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) ( talk) 20:32, 23 January 2018 (UTC)
Hello this is Vivi from GPP. I hope that this is the correct place to be commenting. Vivikir ( talk) 07:45, 26 January 2018 (UTC)
hey
Love this Class! — Preceding unsigned comment added by JeshuaKJohn ( talk • contribs) 06:35, 14 February 2018 (UTC)
Peer Review
Nutrition Transition
This article is moderately devloped but all the topics are relevant to the the article. You have done a wonderful job adding to the implications for policy.
Just a suggestion, I think you should consider finding other scholarly research on food deserts/insecurity. I think it would be beneficial for you to really focus on the stakeholders at hand. How is the nutrition transition affecting communities - women? children? You could also add on information about the influence of media (i.e. advertisment cartoons aimed at children). How does globalization play a part in this? You don't have to add this onto the article but these are some questions that come to my mind when reviewing your topic. It is interesting to think about differences between nutrition habits between countries but also the similarities that we find (i.e. through globalization, we can have McDonalds in many countries around the world).
I think that there is more content that can be added to this article, such as the recommendations Professor Talwalker gave you about having country specific problems and policies.
All of the subheadings are pretty relevant to the article topics, with a neutral point of view. Adding more information about specific countries will expand this article and provide different angles in which the nutrition transition has affected communities throughout the world. The citations come from reputable and scholarly sources, however, it would be good to find more recent sources within the past five years, if possible.
Effects of NAFTA on Mexico
I like that you linked the nutrition transition link to this article! So far, you have a solid idea of adding a health outcomes/health implications section. The information you have provided is comprehensive and detailed. It provides a neutral view and remains in a scholarly tone.
I think you could also incorporate the nutrition transition link on the "See also" section, in case people miss the linked word in the article.
Are there more recent publications in which you could create a timeline section. This could just be similar to a history subsection so that it would be easier to readers to understand. I think it would be helpful for you to work on a 2017 section of the most recent event that has been happening around this topic.
Lorraineador (
talk) 05:26, 19 March 2018 (UTC)
I really like your Wikipedia edits, they are good, I do not have a specific feedback except I would encourage you to add more sources to make your contributions more reliable ( from many reliable sources). 192.31.105.128 ( talk) 00:19, 27 April 2018 (UTC)