I have nearly all the books from my resources page, and I just took notes (mostly quotes that I have no idea how I'll paraphrase) from one book. I'm going to try to weave them together based on common themes. After I get through the books I have, I'll probably put together a packet of these studies that I shared with you. In reviewing the article (and comparing them to other FACs as of late), I feel that it may take a couple of FAC processes to really make this one flow. — Erik ( talk • contrib) 18:53, 6 February 2009 (UTC)
I went from a movie's talk page to complete the survey and was logged out between tranferring from the movie's talk page to the survey. This makes absolutely no since. Jason3777 ( talk) 01:55, 15 February 2009 (UTC)
Hey Steve, would you like to copyedit Indiana Jones and the Last Crusade? Having taken my sweet time on it and not rushed like the other three Indy film articles, I reckon this deserves FAC soon. Alientraveller ( talk) 00:23, 16 February 2009 (UTC)
I'll be reborrowing Douglas Brode's book on Spielberg next week, so come back to Themes later when you've copyedited the rest of the article. It's mighty fine reading. Alientraveller ( talk) 21:17, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
Hey User:Steve,
Thank you for your help on the talk page for the
Son-Rise: A Miracle of Love.
I was wondering if you could help me expand on the article.
Son-Rise, an
Early childhood intervention therapy was created by two parents in the '70s that got their son to completely recover from
Autism and the
Autsim spectrum.
Son-Rise: A Miracle of Love is a
docudrama about the recovery and was adapted by the book, Son-Rise (now known as Son-Rise: The Miracle Continues).
Their is not to many references supporting the movie, the most reliable references for the film is not informative enough or 100% accurate (e.g. New York Times Film Synopsis said that (from All Media Guide) Raun Kaufman was high-functioning (a lot of other sources about the movie says that to), but it is wrong, he was severe and
Mentally retarded, even in the movie.
Their is more info from the book, which adapted into the film.
Could I reference a lot from the book, and use it as a reliable source since it has the majority of the information from the movie and is more accurate.
Could you also help me with the book,
Son-Rise: The Miracle Continues that I haven't created yet.
Thanx!
ATC
Talk 21:26, 16 February 2009 (UTC)
The newly added comment "Article does not objectively examine Thomas' life" which recommends the Washington Post article, is a re-start of the familiar debates you have tried to squelch. Accordingly, you should remove it or archive it. Facts@mt.org ( talk) 10:45, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
The February 2009 issue of the Films WikiProject newsletter has been published. You may read the newsletter, change the format in which future issues will be delivered to you, or unsubscribe from this notification by following the link. Happy editing! -- Nehrams2020 ( talk) 00:25, 2 March 2009 (UTC)
Thanks for the comments, could you take another look when you have time. Best wishes, Rambo's Revenge (talk) 23:28, 11 March 2009 (UTC)
I made a response here. If it is unsatisfactory, I can pull up many of the sources for you and send them to you privately (as they are copyrighted) so you can see the wording that they use, the sources that they rely on, and the rest. Hopefully, this section will be enough to verify that the sources (like Pearce's) are medical texts that also extrapolate on Johnson's condition so that the section is not Synthesis. Ottava Rima ( talk) 03:09, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
I noticed your plan to be more involved with the Featured Article process. Definitely should acquire some tacit knowledge in writing such articles! :) Does this mean you'll be putting your involvement with film-related articles and project pages on the backburner? — Erik ( talk • contrib) 01:36, 19 March 2009 (UTC)
As part of my practice for themes at Fight Club (film), I've been working on Apt Pupil (film)#Themes. Are you able to understand my summary of the first two subsections so far? If not, any specific points that you think I could improve on? — Erik ( talk • contrib) 23:22, 19 March 2009 (UTC)
How was A Game of Thrones? I've eyed the A Song of Ice and Fire series but my last bout with fantasy ( The Wheel of Time) was not that great. — Erik ( talk • contrib) 13:19, 23 March 2009 (UTC)
← Did you read about this? The Visitor was a fine film, so McCarthy seems like a wise choice. Looks like I have something to add to my reading list! — Erik ( talk • contrib) 15:02, 6 May 2009 (UTC)
Steve, again, and as always, thanks for all of your helpful input everywhere in the FAC process. That old offer still stands ! (I see a note above about Film elections ... is that something I should weigh in on?) SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 13:15, 25 March 2009 (UTC)
Hey Steve! I'm sorry but I missed your question in the shuffle. I also come from a technical writing background and I've had to adjust my style somewhat for Wikipedia. Changes my editor routinely requests, such as changing "in order to" to simply "to", don't always fly here. I also edit dissertations for PhD candidates. Your question is timely because I recently worked with someone whose committee chair requested the blanket removal of "that" from the dissertation draft. So, "The group commented that CT scans are almost always necessary" became "The group commented CT scans are almost necessary". In fact, I dislike these types of changes immensely. If clarity is lost, the "that" should never be removed as far as I'm concerned. If it's a neutral change, I would never request it but leave it to author style. I hope that makes sense! -- Laser brain (talk) 23:08, 27 March 2009 (UTC)
Thanks for the comments, that's what I needed. I actually wasn't away of the noun-ing rule. I'm sure I do it all the time. You mentioned your disdain for "various", and suggested "several", and as I'm going through the page (I'm work in WORD, while at work, so that it's clear that I am making corrections..I just cannot do a lot of Wiki stuff while at work.) I started thinking, "Isn't 'several' one of those weasel words?" I've kind of always been under the impression that vague numerical values are discouraged, because "several" could mean anything. That's why I often substitute those instances for words like "various" and "multiple". BIGNOLE (Contact me) 16:11, 31 March 2009 (UTC)
The March 2009 issue of the Films WikiProject newsletter has been published. You may read the newsletter, change the format in which future issues will be delivered to you, or unsubscribe from this notification by following the link. If you have an idea for improving the newsletter please leave a message on my talk page. Happy editing! -- Nehrams2020 ( talk) 00:22, 1 April 2009 (UTC)
Hello Steve. Another editor has closed this FAC off before we completed our discussion. Please let me know if you have any further concerns, as I'd to submit it again. Thank you. Socrates2008 ( Talk) 08:57, 1 April 2009 (UTC)
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The Working Wikipedian's Barnstar |
For the effort you put into reviewing and copyediting the 1968 Thule Air Base B-52 crash article Socrates2008 ( Talk) 10:15, 18 May 2009 (UTC) |
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The Reviewers Award | |
To Steve, for your numerous in-depth reviews at WP:FAC, always given with a good attitude and plenty of encouragement for the nominator. Thank you for your hard work! Karanacs ( talk) 16:16, 1 April 2009 (UTC) |
Hello, since you're mastering the learning curve for copy-editing, I was wondering if you were familiar with
split infinitives? Some of my writing was pointed out as erroneous, and I am trying to figure out how to best use them. For example, I understand that you would not insert an adverb in a "to <verb>" phrase; for example, "to roughly kick" should be "to kick roughly". What about other phrases, like "is <verb>"? See
example; I am trying to discern the difference partially because this concept was actually new to me (is "actually new" appropriate?) and I'm being anal-retentive about getting it right lately. Do you have any wisdom to impart on this matter? —
Erik (
talk •
contrib) 11:19, 2 April 2009 (UTC)
Hi User:Steve,
An admin has a few request before winning a GA award. Could you please look at the
discussion page.
Thanx!
ATC .
Talk 02:13, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
Many thanks for your comments, they certainly gave me plenty with which to fill my time on a very slow day at work :-) Anyways, I think I've now addressed all the points raised, hopefully to your satisfaction -- ChrisTheDude ( talk) 10:06, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
I've made some changes to the article, mainly concerning the technical matters, and left one comment containing a question, since I don't have access to the reference material used in that section. I hope you don't find any of this too intrusive; please feel free to let me know if you disagree with any of it. I'll try to get in a more thorough look-through for the FAC shortly. Excellent work, on the whole! I feel confident that any other concerns will also be minor. Girolamo Savonarola ( talk) 03:48, 14 April 2009 (UTC)
Could it be adequately paraphrased like this:Aerolight Hybrid balloons came in handy for scenes taking place in the City Council chambers, which was actually a large room on the third floor of the Park Plaza Hotel in Los Angeles. "In those conditions, it would have been very difficult to go strictly with HMIs or daylight ... The room had a lot of chandeliers and practicals, as well as natural daylight coming through the windows. The wood walls and tungsten practicals gave the room a warm feel. These hybrid balloons have two 1,200-watt HMI globes and two 1K tungsten fixtures, all dimmable. We could dial in the color we wanted. I think it worked well."
Please let me know if this is too much of a fudge of the technical details; any alternative wording suggestions would be much appreciated. Thanks, Steve T • C 07:38, 14 April 2009 (UTC)Stern lit scenes filmed at the Park Plaza Hotel using dimmable HMI and tungsten lights rigged within balloon lights, as the room's tungsten fixtures, wooden walls and natural daylight made it difficult to use either HMIs or daylight alone.
Fixed all that hopefully, thanks for picking it all up YellowMonkey ( cricket calendar poll!) 00:42, 15 April 2009 (UTC)
Thanks for the suggestion to cite the lede quotes. I don't normally put citations in the lede, so it's not something that occurred to me. JKBrooks85 ( talk) 10:20, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
Thanks so much for your work on the article in the past few days. You're really the king of detailed edit summaries. :) Noble Story ( talk • contributions) 01:26, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
Thanks for your advice, re the Bloody Sunday image in the James Nesbitt article. Once I've written a new fair use rationale (which will probably be for a completely new image), would you mind popping your head in to have a look at it? As for the Jekyll image, that's just about the most straightforward view of the prosthetics there is. Thanks again. Bradley0110 ( talk) 09:09, 19 April 2009 (UTC)
Oh, and congratulations on the hard work you've put into the Changeling article. I've had it watchlisted since last August/September and have watched it grow! Bradley0110 ( talk) 09:14, 19 April 2009 (UTC)
I just wanted to thank you for your edits to Federal Bridge Gross Weight Formula, which is currently a Featured Article Candidate. Many people come along and fix a typo here and change a word there, but you sir, have done an excellent and comprehensive job copyedting the article. I can only proofread it so many times before I get sick of looking at it, and I can only take it so far without a fresh perspective. Sometimes I have to beg and bribe people just to get them to look at it and tell me what they think of the prose. But now it has vastly improved, thanks to you. -- ErgoSum88 ( talk) 02:29, 23 April 2009 (UTC)
yeah, this is random and stalkerish, but trust me when I have a reason for asking. where do you live/edit? (City and country would be nice, but whatever you feel comfortable telling is fine.) You can just shoot me an email or reply here. It's for a project, I'll let you see it when I'm finished :) -- Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ( talk) 14:04, 27 April 2009 (UTC)
Steve, it has been my pleasure to work with you on Changeling (film). You are an excellent writer and skilled editor. Thank you for the barn star and congratulations on the article becoming a featured article. -- Dan Dassow ( talk) 11:54, 29 April 2009 (UTC)
The April 2009 issue of the Films WikiProject newsletter has been published. You may read the newsletter, change the format in which future issues will be delivered to you, or unsubscribe from this notification by following the link. If you have an idea for improving the newsletter please leave a message on my talk page. --Happy editing! Nehrams2020 ( talk • contrib) 07:55, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
Hello, thanks for the review and copyedit of the Nancy Cartwright page, I really appreciate it. If you have any time, would you mind taking a look at another page for me? I'd like to have Ice hockey at the Olympic Games at FAC by the end of the month, but I think the writing is still a tad rough (short sentences, repetitiveness, possibly a tad rambling at times) and could use a good once-over. It is a long article, so I would completely understand if you don't have enough time. Thanks, Scorpion 0422 19:59, 5 May 2009 (UTC)
I'm sorry to see that you've been dragged into a dispute over your comments for the last FAC. However I think you handled this very well, and will keep an eye on this discussion in case it escalates any further. Also, as you've probably seen already, I've renominated the article for FAC. Thanks again Socrates2008 ( Talk) 23:04, 6 May 2009 (UTC)
James C. Oskins is a U.S. Air Force retiree and was a Nuclear Specialist, Nuclear Weapons Arming and Fuzing Technician, and Team Chief from May 1955 to June 1975. He had assignments with the 35th Munitions Maintenance Squadron (MMS), Biggs AFB, Texas, 702nd Strategic Missile Wing, Presque Isle AFB, Maine, 11th MMS, RAF Upper Heyford, United Kingdom, 28th MMS, Carswell AFB, Texas, 381st Strategic Missile Wing, McConnell AFB, Kansas, 320th MMS, RAF Upper Heyford, UK, 3096th Aviation Depot Squadron, Nellis AFB, Nevada. Jim worked on the Mk 6, Mk 15, Mk 15 mod 2, Mk 17, Mk 21, W39/SNARK, Mk 28, B53, W53/Mk6 RV (Titan II), B57, and B61. He spoke to international audiences on the Canadian Broadcasting Company Radio 1 "As It Happens" on the Tybee bomb (5 Feb 2008). He is the author of "Early Career Field Special Weapons History", "35th MMS Operations, Biggs AFB, TX, March 1956-June 1957", and "History of the Snark Missile" on the U.S. Air Force Nuclear Weapons Specialist Home Page.
Work has been done on your points, would it be possible for you to revisit the FAC and see what you think? Cheers SGGH ping! 09:43, 16 May 2009 (UTC)
I have nearly all the books from my resources page, and I just took notes (mostly quotes that I have no idea how I'll paraphrase) from one book. I'm going to try to weave them together based on common themes. After I get through the books I have, I'll probably put together a packet of these studies that I shared with you. In reviewing the article (and comparing them to other FACs as of late), I feel that it may take a couple of FAC processes to really make this one flow. — Erik ( talk • contrib) 18:53, 6 February 2009 (UTC)
I went from a movie's talk page to complete the survey and was logged out between tranferring from the movie's talk page to the survey. This makes absolutely no since. Jason3777 ( talk) 01:55, 15 February 2009 (UTC)
Hey Steve, would you like to copyedit Indiana Jones and the Last Crusade? Having taken my sweet time on it and not rushed like the other three Indy film articles, I reckon this deserves FAC soon. Alientraveller ( talk) 00:23, 16 February 2009 (UTC)
I'll be reborrowing Douglas Brode's book on Spielberg next week, so come back to Themes later when you've copyedited the rest of the article. It's mighty fine reading. Alientraveller ( talk) 21:17, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
Hey User:Steve,
Thank you for your help on the talk page for the
Son-Rise: A Miracle of Love.
I was wondering if you could help me expand on the article.
Son-Rise, an
Early childhood intervention therapy was created by two parents in the '70s that got their son to completely recover from
Autism and the
Autsim spectrum.
Son-Rise: A Miracle of Love is a
docudrama about the recovery and was adapted by the book, Son-Rise (now known as Son-Rise: The Miracle Continues).
Their is not to many references supporting the movie, the most reliable references for the film is not informative enough or 100% accurate (e.g. New York Times Film Synopsis said that (from All Media Guide) Raun Kaufman was high-functioning (a lot of other sources about the movie says that to), but it is wrong, he was severe and
Mentally retarded, even in the movie.
Their is more info from the book, which adapted into the film.
Could I reference a lot from the book, and use it as a reliable source since it has the majority of the information from the movie and is more accurate.
Could you also help me with the book,
Son-Rise: The Miracle Continues that I haven't created yet.
Thanx!
ATC
Talk 21:26, 16 February 2009 (UTC)
The newly added comment "Article does not objectively examine Thomas' life" which recommends the Washington Post article, is a re-start of the familiar debates you have tried to squelch. Accordingly, you should remove it or archive it. Facts@mt.org ( talk) 10:45, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
The February 2009 issue of the Films WikiProject newsletter has been published. You may read the newsletter, change the format in which future issues will be delivered to you, or unsubscribe from this notification by following the link. Happy editing! -- Nehrams2020 ( talk) 00:25, 2 March 2009 (UTC)
Thanks for the comments, could you take another look when you have time. Best wishes, Rambo's Revenge (talk) 23:28, 11 March 2009 (UTC)
I made a response here. If it is unsatisfactory, I can pull up many of the sources for you and send them to you privately (as they are copyrighted) so you can see the wording that they use, the sources that they rely on, and the rest. Hopefully, this section will be enough to verify that the sources (like Pearce's) are medical texts that also extrapolate on Johnson's condition so that the section is not Synthesis. Ottava Rima ( talk) 03:09, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
I noticed your plan to be more involved with the Featured Article process. Definitely should acquire some tacit knowledge in writing such articles! :) Does this mean you'll be putting your involvement with film-related articles and project pages on the backburner? — Erik ( talk • contrib) 01:36, 19 March 2009 (UTC)
As part of my practice for themes at Fight Club (film), I've been working on Apt Pupil (film)#Themes. Are you able to understand my summary of the first two subsections so far? If not, any specific points that you think I could improve on? — Erik ( talk • contrib) 23:22, 19 March 2009 (UTC)
How was A Game of Thrones? I've eyed the A Song of Ice and Fire series but my last bout with fantasy ( The Wheel of Time) was not that great. — Erik ( talk • contrib) 13:19, 23 March 2009 (UTC)
← Did you read about this? The Visitor was a fine film, so McCarthy seems like a wise choice. Looks like I have something to add to my reading list! — Erik ( talk • contrib) 15:02, 6 May 2009 (UTC)
Steve, again, and as always, thanks for all of your helpful input everywhere in the FAC process. That old offer still stands ! (I see a note above about Film elections ... is that something I should weigh in on?) SandyGeorgia ( Talk) 13:15, 25 March 2009 (UTC)
Hey Steve! I'm sorry but I missed your question in the shuffle. I also come from a technical writing background and I've had to adjust my style somewhat for Wikipedia. Changes my editor routinely requests, such as changing "in order to" to simply "to", don't always fly here. I also edit dissertations for PhD candidates. Your question is timely because I recently worked with someone whose committee chair requested the blanket removal of "that" from the dissertation draft. So, "The group commented that CT scans are almost always necessary" became "The group commented CT scans are almost necessary". In fact, I dislike these types of changes immensely. If clarity is lost, the "that" should never be removed as far as I'm concerned. If it's a neutral change, I would never request it but leave it to author style. I hope that makes sense! -- Laser brain (talk) 23:08, 27 March 2009 (UTC)
Thanks for the comments, that's what I needed. I actually wasn't away of the noun-ing rule. I'm sure I do it all the time. You mentioned your disdain for "various", and suggested "several", and as I'm going through the page (I'm work in WORD, while at work, so that it's clear that I am making corrections..I just cannot do a lot of Wiki stuff while at work.) I started thinking, "Isn't 'several' one of those weasel words?" I've kind of always been under the impression that vague numerical values are discouraged, because "several" could mean anything. That's why I often substitute those instances for words like "various" and "multiple". BIGNOLE (Contact me) 16:11, 31 March 2009 (UTC)
The March 2009 issue of the Films WikiProject newsletter has been published. You may read the newsletter, change the format in which future issues will be delivered to you, or unsubscribe from this notification by following the link. If you have an idea for improving the newsletter please leave a message on my talk page. Happy editing! -- Nehrams2020 ( talk) 00:22, 1 April 2009 (UTC)
Hello Steve. Another editor has closed this FAC off before we completed our discussion. Please let me know if you have any further concerns, as I'd to submit it again. Thank you. Socrates2008 ( Talk) 08:57, 1 April 2009 (UTC)
![]() |
The Working Wikipedian's Barnstar |
For the effort you put into reviewing and copyediting the 1968 Thule Air Base B-52 crash article Socrates2008 ( Talk) 10:15, 18 May 2009 (UTC) |
![]() |
The Reviewers Award | |
To Steve, for your numerous in-depth reviews at WP:FAC, always given with a good attitude and plenty of encouragement for the nominator. Thank you for your hard work! Karanacs ( talk) 16:16, 1 April 2009 (UTC) |
Hello, since you're mastering the learning curve for copy-editing, I was wondering if you were familiar with
split infinitives? Some of my writing was pointed out as erroneous, and I am trying to figure out how to best use them. For example, I understand that you would not insert an adverb in a "to <verb>" phrase; for example, "to roughly kick" should be "to kick roughly". What about other phrases, like "is <verb>"? See
example; I am trying to discern the difference partially because this concept was actually new to me (is "actually new" appropriate?) and I'm being anal-retentive about getting it right lately. Do you have any wisdom to impart on this matter? —
Erik (
talk •
contrib) 11:19, 2 April 2009 (UTC)
Hi User:Steve,
An admin has a few request before winning a GA award. Could you please look at the
discussion page.
Thanx!
ATC .
Talk 02:13, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
Many thanks for your comments, they certainly gave me plenty with which to fill my time on a very slow day at work :-) Anyways, I think I've now addressed all the points raised, hopefully to your satisfaction -- ChrisTheDude ( talk) 10:06, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
I've made some changes to the article, mainly concerning the technical matters, and left one comment containing a question, since I don't have access to the reference material used in that section. I hope you don't find any of this too intrusive; please feel free to let me know if you disagree with any of it. I'll try to get in a more thorough look-through for the FAC shortly. Excellent work, on the whole! I feel confident that any other concerns will also be minor. Girolamo Savonarola ( talk) 03:48, 14 April 2009 (UTC)
Could it be adequately paraphrased like this:Aerolight Hybrid balloons came in handy for scenes taking place in the City Council chambers, which was actually a large room on the third floor of the Park Plaza Hotel in Los Angeles. "In those conditions, it would have been very difficult to go strictly with HMIs or daylight ... The room had a lot of chandeliers and practicals, as well as natural daylight coming through the windows. The wood walls and tungsten practicals gave the room a warm feel. These hybrid balloons have two 1,200-watt HMI globes and two 1K tungsten fixtures, all dimmable. We could dial in the color we wanted. I think it worked well."
Please let me know if this is too much of a fudge of the technical details; any alternative wording suggestions would be much appreciated. Thanks, Steve T • C 07:38, 14 April 2009 (UTC)Stern lit scenes filmed at the Park Plaza Hotel using dimmable HMI and tungsten lights rigged within balloon lights, as the room's tungsten fixtures, wooden walls and natural daylight made it difficult to use either HMIs or daylight alone.
Fixed all that hopefully, thanks for picking it all up YellowMonkey ( cricket calendar poll!) 00:42, 15 April 2009 (UTC)
Thanks for the suggestion to cite the lede quotes. I don't normally put citations in the lede, so it's not something that occurred to me. JKBrooks85 ( talk) 10:20, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
Thanks so much for your work on the article in the past few days. You're really the king of detailed edit summaries. :) Noble Story ( talk • contributions) 01:26, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
Thanks for your advice, re the Bloody Sunday image in the James Nesbitt article. Once I've written a new fair use rationale (which will probably be for a completely new image), would you mind popping your head in to have a look at it? As for the Jekyll image, that's just about the most straightforward view of the prosthetics there is. Thanks again. Bradley0110 ( talk) 09:09, 19 April 2009 (UTC)
Oh, and congratulations on the hard work you've put into the Changeling article. I've had it watchlisted since last August/September and have watched it grow! Bradley0110 ( talk) 09:14, 19 April 2009 (UTC)
I just wanted to thank you for your edits to Federal Bridge Gross Weight Formula, which is currently a Featured Article Candidate. Many people come along and fix a typo here and change a word there, but you sir, have done an excellent and comprehensive job copyedting the article. I can only proofread it so many times before I get sick of looking at it, and I can only take it so far without a fresh perspective. Sometimes I have to beg and bribe people just to get them to look at it and tell me what they think of the prose. But now it has vastly improved, thanks to you. -- ErgoSum88 ( talk) 02:29, 23 April 2009 (UTC)
yeah, this is random and stalkerish, but trust me when I have a reason for asking. where do you live/edit? (City and country would be nice, but whatever you feel comfortable telling is fine.) You can just shoot me an email or reply here. It's for a project, I'll let you see it when I'm finished :) -- Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ( talk) 14:04, 27 April 2009 (UTC)
Steve, it has been my pleasure to work with you on Changeling (film). You are an excellent writer and skilled editor. Thank you for the barn star and congratulations on the article becoming a featured article. -- Dan Dassow ( talk) 11:54, 29 April 2009 (UTC)
The April 2009 issue of the Films WikiProject newsletter has been published. You may read the newsletter, change the format in which future issues will be delivered to you, or unsubscribe from this notification by following the link. If you have an idea for improving the newsletter please leave a message on my talk page. --Happy editing! Nehrams2020 ( talk • contrib) 07:55, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
Hello, thanks for the review and copyedit of the Nancy Cartwright page, I really appreciate it. If you have any time, would you mind taking a look at another page for me? I'd like to have Ice hockey at the Olympic Games at FAC by the end of the month, but I think the writing is still a tad rough (short sentences, repetitiveness, possibly a tad rambling at times) and could use a good once-over. It is a long article, so I would completely understand if you don't have enough time. Thanks, Scorpion 0422 19:59, 5 May 2009 (UTC)
I'm sorry to see that you've been dragged into a dispute over your comments for the last FAC. However I think you handled this very well, and will keep an eye on this discussion in case it escalates any further. Also, as you've probably seen already, I've renominated the article for FAC. Thanks again Socrates2008 ( Talk) 23:04, 6 May 2009 (UTC)
James C. Oskins is a U.S. Air Force retiree and was a Nuclear Specialist, Nuclear Weapons Arming and Fuzing Technician, and Team Chief from May 1955 to June 1975. He had assignments with the 35th Munitions Maintenance Squadron (MMS), Biggs AFB, Texas, 702nd Strategic Missile Wing, Presque Isle AFB, Maine, 11th MMS, RAF Upper Heyford, United Kingdom, 28th MMS, Carswell AFB, Texas, 381st Strategic Missile Wing, McConnell AFB, Kansas, 320th MMS, RAF Upper Heyford, UK, 3096th Aviation Depot Squadron, Nellis AFB, Nevada. Jim worked on the Mk 6, Mk 15, Mk 15 mod 2, Mk 17, Mk 21, W39/SNARK, Mk 28, B53, W53/Mk6 RV (Titan II), B57, and B61. He spoke to international audiences on the Canadian Broadcasting Company Radio 1 "As It Happens" on the Tybee bomb (5 Feb 2008). He is the author of "Early Career Field Special Weapons History", "35th MMS Operations, Biggs AFB, TX, March 1956-June 1957", and "History of the Snark Missile" on the U.S. Air Force Nuclear Weapons Specialist Home Page.
Work has been done on your points, would it be possible for you to revisit the FAC and see what you think? Cheers SGGH ping! 09:43, 16 May 2009 (UTC)