1. In the natural change section, you need to elaborate more on what is "leaf peeping" and why the foliage peak time is important to predict. It would then be more logical to write about the factors influencing the peak time.
2. Is there any other natural changes in addition to leaf color change?
3.Before starting on specific events, you might want to insert a short introduction saying there are various cultural events in many towns of New England in Autumn.
4. In the travel destinations section, it could be better to give readers a heads up about the following content, for example, "there are many famous travel destinations in New England, such as ..." Then maybe separate those destinations into individual paragraphs.
Yuehan wang ( talk) 04:23, 29 November 2017 (UTC)Yuehan
Well done!
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1. In the natural change section, you need to elaborate more on what is "leaf peeping" and why the foliage peak time is important to predict. It would then be more logical to write about the factors influencing the peak time.
2. Is there any other natural changes in addition to leaf color change?
3.Before starting on specific events, you might want to insert a short introduction saying there are various cultural events in many towns of New England in Autumn.
4. In the travel destinations section, it could be better to give readers a heads up about the following content, for example, "there are many famous travel destinations in New England, such as ..." Then maybe separate those destinations into individual paragraphs.
Yuehan wang ( talk) 04:23, 29 November 2017 (UTC)Yuehan
Well done!
What I really like about the edits:
What I suggest for further edits: