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Thanks for copy editing When Jews Were Funny as part of the May GOCE copyediting drive. Here are some notes; please receive these constructively:
It features two dozen interviews with a wide variety of North American Jewish comedy professionals→
The film features 24 interviews from a variety of Jewish comedians in North America. I think I like the film, but there are some other problems:
The film seeks to discoverI'm not sure that we should give a motive to the film, in Wikipedia's voice without a source. Sometimes it's safer to merely state what can be plainly observed, "The filmmaker asks..."
Lead calls it "North American humor" but it's here as "American humor": which is it, and can it be made consistent across all mentionsAt least three of the interviewees are Canadian. However, American media don't often make the distinction (they are themselves summarizing it for a primarily American audience). I follow what the sources say, so in the body sometimes it's 'North American' and sometimes 'American' while the lead summarizes the body and uses 'North American'. I don't see a particular problem with that. Do you feel it's confusing?
his last ever filmed interview. Don't need "ever".
who is unenthusiastic as he is told→
who appears unenthusiastic due to being toldThe word as is ambiguous, it can mean "because" or "while". As a copyeditor, you generally should change it to something less ambiguous but make sure you have the meaning right. Here, I think "while" is better so that we aren't doing any mind-reading.
Breslin compares comedy to "Jewish jazz" and states the rhythm of Yiddish has a comedic timing.
When Jews Were Funny was produced simultaneously with Zweig's 2013 documentary, 15 Reasons to Live. He shot When Jews Were Funny while on breaks between 15 Reasons to Live and edited it after the editing for 15 Reasons to Live was complete.I feel that it's okay to abbreviate the titles in the second sentence; the reader should understand what is meant. Also, between needs two thing to establish a range, "in the middle of" might work, but I changed it back to the original "from".
Again, thanks for the copy edit, you smoothed out a lot of parts and called attention to things I'd missed. I'm not sure if I've satisfied you with respect to the [clarify] tags, let me know if you feel they need more work with the phrasing. (It's DYK review stalled, and I don't want those little tags to hold it up.) – Reidgreg ( talk) 15:20, 14 May 2022 (UTC)
The film features two dozen interviews with a variety of Jewish comedy professionals in North America, and explores the role of Jewish humour in the context of North American comedy.but the actual passage in the premise section to state,
When Jews Were Funny is an exploration of Jewish-American comedy and its influence on modern American humour.Also, the article body does not mention "North American comedy" unless I'm missing it like you stated it does above.
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Thanks for copy editing When Jews Were Funny as part of the May GOCE copyediting drive. Here are some notes; please receive these constructively:
It features two dozen interviews with a wide variety of North American Jewish comedy professionals→
The film features 24 interviews from a variety of Jewish comedians in North America. I think I like the film, but there are some other problems:
The film seeks to discoverI'm not sure that we should give a motive to the film, in Wikipedia's voice without a source. Sometimes it's safer to merely state what can be plainly observed, "The filmmaker asks..."
Lead calls it "North American humor" but it's here as "American humor": which is it, and can it be made consistent across all mentionsAt least three of the interviewees are Canadian. However, American media don't often make the distinction (they are themselves summarizing it for a primarily American audience). I follow what the sources say, so in the body sometimes it's 'North American' and sometimes 'American' while the lead summarizes the body and uses 'North American'. I don't see a particular problem with that. Do you feel it's confusing?
his last ever filmed interview. Don't need "ever".
who is unenthusiastic as he is told→
who appears unenthusiastic due to being toldThe word as is ambiguous, it can mean "because" or "while". As a copyeditor, you generally should change it to something less ambiguous but make sure you have the meaning right. Here, I think "while" is better so that we aren't doing any mind-reading.
Breslin compares comedy to "Jewish jazz" and states the rhythm of Yiddish has a comedic timing.
When Jews Were Funny was produced simultaneously with Zweig's 2013 documentary, 15 Reasons to Live. He shot When Jews Were Funny while on breaks between 15 Reasons to Live and edited it after the editing for 15 Reasons to Live was complete.I feel that it's okay to abbreviate the titles in the second sentence; the reader should understand what is meant. Also, between needs two thing to establish a range, "in the middle of" might work, but I changed it back to the original "from".
Again, thanks for the copy edit, you smoothed out a lot of parts and called attention to things I'd missed. I'm not sure if I've satisfied you with respect to the [clarify] tags, let me know if you feel they need more work with the phrasing. (It's DYK review stalled, and I don't want those little tags to hold it up.) – Reidgreg ( talk) 15:20, 14 May 2022 (UTC)
The film features two dozen interviews with a variety of Jewish comedy professionals in North America, and explores the role of Jewish humour in the context of North American comedy.but the actual passage in the premise section to state,
When Jews Were Funny is an exploration of Jewish-American comedy and its influence on modern American humour.Also, the article body does not mention "North American comedy" unless I'm missing it like you stated it does above.
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Greetings @ PerfectSoundWhatever,
IDK if you are okay to take c/e requests in draft namespace. Being not a native English speaker, my content expansions are usually dependent on c/e support.
The draft I am looking for c/e support is Draft:Ex-Muslim activism in Kerala
Pl do support in c/e as per your spare time and interest. I'll not mind if you happen to be busy either.
Thanks and warm regards
Bookku, 'Encyclopedias = expanding information & knowledge' ( talk) 13:16, 19 May 2022 (UTC)