Good job Andres-- RJBazell ( talk) 18:35, 23 October 2018 (UTC) Keep it up -- RJBazell ( talk) 16:42, 25 October 2018 (UTC)
Hi Andres! You have done an excellent job editing your article, especially in regards to being thorough and citing your sources. The article is very organized and elaborate, focusing on expressing the important events and moments in Harrington's life. Overall, great work! Here are my comments:
- In your lead, the birthday is missing for Harrington. If it is only meant to be the way it is, add "In" after born and "California" after San Francisco.
- When you first mention ACT UP, state what the acronym stands for. If there is an existing article about it on Wikipedia, you can also hyperlink it.
- In the "Founding TAG" section, it may be interesting to elaborate why Harrington felt ACT UP was never meant to last. Obviously, if that information is unavailable, don't worry about it.
- Did Harrington win any other awards?
- In the "Works" section, 1996 should be in parentheses for Work #5.
- In the "Works" section, the last two works are formatted differently than the rest. Is this intentional?
- A "References" section should be added for your sources.
- Throughout the article, I would look out for grammatical errors in regards to lack of commas.
You are doing a great job so keep it up!
Rd1305 ( talk) 00:52, 30 October 2018 (UTC)
Good job Andres! Your article looks basically finished in terms of content, especially considering the original article was basically empty. The biggest comment I have is in terms of the tone of the article. I think it could be useful to read through articles on similar topics and try to emulate their tone because in a few places your tone seems more literary than informative, but that's really just a stylistic note. Hivseminar ( talk) 02:18, 30 October 2018 (UTC)
Good job Andres-- RJBazell ( talk) 18:35, 23 October 2018 (UTC) Keep it up -- RJBazell ( talk) 16:42, 25 October 2018 (UTC)
Hi Andres! You have done an excellent job editing your article, especially in regards to being thorough and citing your sources. The article is very organized and elaborate, focusing on expressing the important events and moments in Harrington's life. Overall, great work! Here are my comments:
- In your lead, the birthday is missing for Harrington. If it is only meant to be the way it is, add "In" after born and "California" after San Francisco.
- When you first mention ACT UP, state what the acronym stands for. If there is an existing article about it on Wikipedia, you can also hyperlink it.
- In the "Founding TAG" section, it may be interesting to elaborate why Harrington felt ACT UP was never meant to last. Obviously, if that information is unavailable, don't worry about it.
- Did Harrington win any other awards?
- In the "Works" section, 1996 should be in parentheses for Work #5.
- In the "Works" section, the last two works are formatted differently than the rest. Is this intentional?
- A "References" section should be added for your sources.
- Throughout the article, I would look out for grammatical errors in regards to lack of commas.
You are doing a great job so keep it up!
Rd1305 ( talk) 00:52, 30 October 2018 (UTC)
Good job Andres! Your article looks basically finished in terms of content, especially considering the original article was basically empty. The biggest comment I have is in terms of the tone of the article. I think it could be useful to read through articles on similar topics and try to emulate their tone because in a few places your tone seems more literary than informative, but that's really just a stylistic note. Hivseminar ( talk) 02:18, 30 October 2018 (UTC)