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Whose work are you reviewing?

Sherifa Osman

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User:SherifaOsman/Ahmad Sah l Bahmani Mausoleum - Wikipedia
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Evaluate the drafted changes

Lead

The lead paragraph includes date of building and location, but it doesn’t include information about what is presented in the following sections. Also the lead doesn’t have an introductory sentence.

Content

The content is great and is very detailed. I like how well-explained the architecture section is, and that you mentioned every aspect related to the building. I haven’t seen the religious affiliations in any other article. Great job, Sherifa.

Tone and balance

The information is provided in a neutral tone. You avoided using any biased tone or personal/exterior opinions, which is great.

Sources and References

The article is missing sources and references

Organization

I suggest dividing the architecture section into sub-titles. For example, section for the plan, section for the exterior details, section for the interior details, etc.. to help the reader find the information he needs easily.

Images and media

The article lacks visuals. I know it is hard to get a permission to use someone’s work for a newly published article. I have the same issue with my article as well.

Overall impression

The article is great in every mean and covers many aspects about the building. Great job, Sherifa. Keep up the great work.

From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

General info

Whose work are you reviewing?

Sherifa Osman

Link to draft you're reviewing
User:SherifaOsman/Ahmad Sah l Bahmani Mausoleum - Wikipedia
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes

Lead

The lead paragraph includes date of building and location, but it doesn’t include information about what is presented in the following sections. Also the lead doesn’t have an introductory sentence.

Content

The content is great and is very detailed. I like how well-explained the architecture section is, and that you mentioned every aspect related to the building. I haven’t seen the religious affiliations in any other article. Great job, Sherifa.

Tone and balance

The information is provided in a neutral tone. You avoided using any biased tone or personal/exterior opinions, which is great.

Sources and References

The article is missing sources and references

Organization

I suggest dividing the architecture section into sub-titles. For example, section for the plan, section for the exterior details, section for the interior details, etc.. to help the reader find the information he needs easily.

Images and media

The article lacks visuals. I know it is hard to get a permission to use someone’s work for a newly published article. I have the same issue with my article as well.

Overall impression

The article is great in every mean and covers many aspects about the building. Great job, Sherifa. Keep up the great work.


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