The remains of the Stoa of the Athenians was discovered by Bernard Haussoullier in 1880. The stoa was constructed in Delphi after the naval victory over the Persians at Hellespont in 478 BC. [1] It was dedicated to Apollo, and the Athenians that perished in the Greco-Persian Wars. [2] The location of the Stoa was just to the southeast of Apollo's Temple. Towards the end of the Greco-Persian Wars, Xerxes ordered the construction of two pontoon bridges across the Hellespont. [3] The Athenians and islanders dismantled the bridges connecting Mycale to Hellespont, and returned home bringing the cables from the bridges. [4] These cables were to be dedicated in their temples. The Stoa was initially built to exhibit the spoils of war when the Athenians defeated the Persians. However, in the following years, more exhibits were but displayed on the Stoa as the Athenians gained more naval victories. The war memorials on display were dedicated to the Greek gods, but the memorials also served as monuments of Athens victory. Of the entire Stoa, only the rear polygonal wall, stylobate, and northeast foundations, with a few columns remain today. [5] [6]
A typical Stoa is a Greek portico composed of a back wall and a colonnaded wall up front. The Stoa of the Athenians used a pre-existing wall as its back wall. The pre-existing wall served as a foundation of the terrace supporting the Temple of Apollo. The Stoa of the Athenians was built with a wooden, shedded roof with hipped ends, a wooden entablature, a 3.58-meter intercolumniation, a .39-meter lower column diameter. Unlike most stoas, the Stoa of the Athenians was constructed from marble in the Ionic order. It was built with a total of Seven fluted marble columns. Although the rafters were never recovered, evidence suggests that they spanned across the roof at 3.5-meter intervals. [7]
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help page).The remains of the Stoa of the Athenians were discovered by Bernard Haussoullier in 1880. The stoa was constructed in Delphi after the naval victory over the Persians at Hellespont in 478 BC. [1] It was dedicated to Apollo, and the Athenians that perished in the Greco-Persian Wars. [2] The location of the Stoa was just to the southeast of Apollo's Temple. Towards the end of the Greco-Persian Wars, Xerxes ordered the construction of two pontoon bridges across the Hellespont. [3] The Athenians and islanders dismantled the bridges connecting Mycale to Hellespont, and returned home bringing the cables from the bridges. [4] These cables were to be dedicated in their temples. The Stoa was initially built to exhibit the spoils of war when the Athenians defeated the Persians. However, in the following years, more exhibits were but displayed on the Stoa as the Athenians gained more naval victories. The war memorials on display were dedicated to the Greek gods, but the memorials also served as monuments of Athens victory. Of the entire Stoa, only the rear polygonal wall, stylobate, and northeast foundations, with a few columns remain today. [5] [6]
A typical Stoa is a Greek portico composed of a back wall and a colonnaded wall up front. The Stoa of the Athenians used a pre-existing wall as its back wall. The pre-existing wall served as a foundation of the terrace supporting the Temple of Apollo. The Stoa of the Athenians was built with a wooden, shedded roof with hipped ends, a wooden entablature, a 3.58-meter intercolumniation, a .39-meter lower column diameter. Unlike most stoas, the Stoa of the Athenians was constructed from marble in the Ionic order. It was built with a total of Seven fluted marble columns. Although the rafters were never recovered, evidence suggests that they spanned across the roof at 3.5-meter intervals. [7]
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~~~~ You might consider adding an introductory sentence explaining what the Stoa was rather than jumping straight into the background. The reader doesn't really know what to expect if they don't already know what the Stoa is/was.
Also, I think you need to add an apostrophe after "monuments of Athens victory". It should be "monuments of Athens' victory", or just reword to make it less awkward.
One last question, how are the cables across the Hellespont connected to the Stoa? Were the cables used in the construction of the Stoa? Were they memorialized in the same temple? I was a bit confused there. Overall, good work.
AbigailJohnson58 ( talk) 22:29, 22 November 2017 ( Semjee ( talk) 18:23, 9 December 2017 (UTC)check your capitalization on certain words, especially Stoa. You have some capitalized and some not. Also the last sentence of the first section, maybe delete one of the “memorials” it seems kind of repetitive. MarissaAlderson ( talk) 18:30, 20 November 2017 (UTC) MarissaAlderson ( talk) 18:32, 20 November 2017 (UTC)</nowiki>
Semjee ( talk) 18:22, 9 December 2017 (UTC) I think you need to add links for words/articles that can be found from the Wikipedia articles. For example; you can link Persians at Hellespont with Dardanelles, and it will give you more background information and additional information for your article. Also, you need one more citation on the sentence presenting the dimensions of the the Stoa. Lastly, I think you did a good job!
Dyuke review:
1. You could give more backgrounf information on the historical events that initiated the Stoa, like when and why Athenians fought with Persians.
2. In Design section, you can use more complex sentences instaed of small and short sentences.
3. Linking some names and places with wikipedia articles will help you to broaden your information for readers.
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The remains of the Stoa of the Athenians was discovered by Bernard Haussoullier in 1880. The stoa was constructed in Delphi after the naval victory over the Persians at Hellespont in 478 BC. [1] It was dedicated to Apollo, and the Athenians that perished in the Greco-Persian Wars. [2] The location of the Stoa was just to the southeast of Apollo's Temple. Towards the end of the Greco-Persian Wars, Xerxes ordered the construction of two pontoon bridges across the Hellespont. [3] The Athenians and islanders dismantled the bridges connecting Mycale to Hellespont, and returned home bringing the cables from the bridges. [4] These cables were to be dedicated in their temples. The Stoa was initially built to exhibit the spoils of war when the Athenians defeated the Persians. However, in the following years, more exhibits were but displayed on the Stoa as the Athenians gained more naval victories. The war memorials on display were dedicated to the Greek gods, but the memorials also served as monuments of Athens victory. Of the entire Stoa, only the rear polygonal wall, stylobate, and northeast foundations, with a few columns remain today. [5] [6]
A typical Stoa is a Greek portico composed of a back wall and a colonnaded wall up front. The Stoa of the Athenians used a pre-existing wall as its back wall. The pre-existing wall served as a foundation of the terrace supporting the Temple of Apollo. The Stoa of the Athenians was built with a wooden, shedded roof with hipped ends, a wooden entablature, a 3.58-meter intercolumniation, a .39-meter lower column diameter. Unlike most stoas, the Stoa of the Athenians was constructed from marble in the Ionic order. It was built with a total of Seven fluted marble columns. Although the rafters were never recovered, evidence suggests that they spanned across the roof at 3.5-meter intervals. [7]
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help page).The remains of the Stoa of the Athenians were discovered by Bernard Haussoullier in 1880. The stoa was constructed in Delphi after the naval victory over the Persians at Hellespont in 478 BC. [1] It was dedicated to Apollo, and the Athenians that perished in the Greco-Persian Wars. [2] The location of the Stoa was just to the southeast of Apollo's Temple. Towards the end of the Greco-Persian Wars, Xerxes ordered the construction of two pontoon bridges across the Hellespont. [3] The Athenians and islanders dismantled the bridges connecting Mycale to Hellespont, and returned home bringing the cables from the bridges. [4] These cables were to be dedicated in their temples. The Stoa was initially built to exhibit the spoils of war when the Athenians defeated the Persians. However, in the following years, more exhibits were but displayed on the Stoa as the Athenians gained more naval victories. The war memorials on display were dedicated to the Greek gods, but the memorials also served as monuments of Athens victory. Of the entire Stoa, only the rear polygonal wall, stylobate, and northeast foundations, with a few columns remain today. [5] [6]
A typical Stoa is a Greek portico composed of a back wall and a colonnaded wall up front. The Stoa of the Athenians used a pre-existing wall as its back wall. The pre-existing wall served as a foundation of the terrace supporting the Temple of Apollo. The Stoa of the Athenians was built with a wooden, shedded roof with hipped ends, a wooden entablature, a 3.58-meter intercolumniation, a .39-meter lower column diameter. Unlike most stoas, the Stoa of the Athenians was constructed from marble in the Ionic order. It was built with a total of Seven fluted marble columns. Although the rafters were never recovered, evidence suggests that they spanned across the roof at 3.5-meter intervals. [7]
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~~~~ You might consider adding an introductory sentence explaining what the Stoa was rather than jumping straight into the background. The reader doesn't really know what to expect if they don't already know what the Stoa is/was.
Also, I think you need to add an apostrophe after "monuments of Athens victory". It should be "monuments of Athens' victory", or just reword to make it less awkward.
One last question, how are the cables across the Hellespont connected to the Stoa? Were the cables used in the construction of the Stoa? Were they memorialized in the same temple? I was a bit confused there. Overall, good work.
AbigailJohnson58 ( talk) 22:29, 22 November 2017 ( Semjee ( talk) 18:23, 9 December 2017 (UTC)check your capitalization on certain words, especially Stoa. You have some capitalized and some not. Also the last sentence of the first section, maybe delete one of the “memorials” it seems kind of repetitive. MarissaAlderson ( talk) 18:30, 20 November 2017 (UTC) MarissaAlderson ( talk) 18:32, 20 November 2017 (UTC)</nowiki>
Semjee ( talk) 18:22, 9 December 2017 (UTC) I think you need to add links for words/articles that can be found from the Wikipedia articles. For example; you can link Persians at Hellespont with Dardanelles, and it will give you more background information and additional information for your article. Also, you need one more citation on the sentence presenting the dimensions of the the Stoa. Lastly, I think you did a good job!
Dyuke review:
1. You could give more backgrounf information on the historical events that initiated the Stoa, like when and why Athenians fought with Persians.
2. In Design section, you can use more complex sentences instaed of small and short sentences.
3. Linking some names and places with wikipedia articles will help you to broaden your information for readers.
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