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From the first place I saw a citation, the article says: "A section of land managed by Environment Southland is in the middle of the reserve next to the railway line on south of Mary Street. Another piece forms a boundary to the reserve in the north west - next to the Mitre 10 Mega Store and Harvey Norman complex."<ref>Invercargill (N.Z.). City Council. Parks Administration, Turnbull Thomson Park: Management Plan : March 2008, Invercargill City Council, 2008.</ref>
Would you like to take a stab at rewording the sentences, after having decided how much information should be in the article - and whether you want to fold in any additional information? (By the way, this is something I struggle with every day - how not to have sentence sound like it's just a minor paraphrase of the content. When someone brought it to my attention in my early writing days here, I rewrote the WP:Close paraphrasing article last year to make the points clearer for myself and others)
One tool is to start with an outline of the key points:
Article: "Children's playground equipments are given a monthly maintenance check and every six month a safety check by the city council to meet the New Zealand Safety Standard for Playgrounds."<ref name=council/> Source: "All playgrounds and play equipment in the Invercargill District shall be given a monthly maintenance check and a six monthly safety check to ensure all pieces of equipment are maintained to a safe standard and meet the current New Zealand Safety Standard for Playgrounds."
Outline:
Comments:
Note: Worm may know this, I don't - it may be that NZ Municipal Park documents are not copyrighted - and you can use close paraphrase. I still invite you to try to reword to get just the information that is needed for the article - and as a good practice since most sources have copyright issues.-- CaroleHenson ( talk) 17:55, 19 September 2012 (UTC)
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This is work space to work on User:RexRowan/Turnbull Thomson Park
From the first place I saw a citation, the article says: "A section of land managed by Environment Southland is in the middle of the reserve next to the railway line on south of Mary Street. Another piece forms a boundary to the reserve in the north west - next to the Mitre 10 Mega Store and Harvey Norman complex."<ref>Invercargill (N.Z.). City Council. Parks Administration, Turnbull Thomson Park: Management Plan : March 2008, Invercargill City Council, 2008.</ref>
Would you like to take a stab at rewording the sentences, after having decided how much information should be in the article - and whether you want to fold in any additional information? (By the way, this is something I struggle with every day - how not to have sentence sound like it's just a minor paraphrase of the content. When someone brought it to my attention in my early writing days here, I rewrote the WP:Close paraphrasing article last year to make the points clearer for myself and others)
One tool is to start with an outline of the key points:
Article: "Children's playground equipments are given a monthly maintenance check and every six month a safety check by the city council to meet the New Zealand Safety Standard for Playgrounds."<ref name=council/> Source: "All playgrounds and play equipment in the Invercargill District shall be given a monthly maintenance check and a six monthly safety check to ensure all pieces of equipment are maintained to a safe standard and meet the current New Zealand Safety Standard for Playgrounds."
Outline:
Comments:
Note: Worm may know this, I don't - it may be that NZ Municipal Park documents are not copyrighted - and you can use close paraphrase. I still invite you to try to reword to get just the information that is needed for the article - and as a good practice since most sources have copyright issues.-- CaroleHenson ( talk) 17:55, 19 September 2012 (UTC)