There is a profound absence of appropriate, reliable references; all citations, except for The Lancet, are from unreliable, non-reputable and/or biased sources. The replacement of primary sources by newspaper articles has taken over the citation list. One link–WTOP–does not work, while another–Africa Science News Service–does not have a link and is currently unable to be located through independent searching. New citations from reputable sources–like peer-reviewed academic journals, textbooks, etc.–are needed to replace existing citations, excluding The Lancet, and for any additional content added in the future.

The organization of the article is nonexistent, it contains only one category–History–apart from References. It is unfeasible to attempt to categorize all relevant information under History; moreover, the existing information within the article is not relevant to its categorical placement in History. The current organizational structure is unable to effectively convey information about the Vienna Declaration. The structure should contain categories and subcategories that address: background, the Vienna Declaration itself, the stated negative consequences of prohibition drug policies in the declaration, the drug policy recommendations in the declaration, support of the declaration, and criticism of the declaration. The article would follow a clear, logical structure if the suggested categorical additions, in conjunction to History's categorical removal, were applied.

There is only one brief statement summarizing the Vienna Declaration's central purpose in the Wiki-page dedicated to it. The statement does not–but should−offer any acknowledgement or explanation of what the Vienna Declaration is, its two main parts, its relation to ideological drug-policy, the role of health and HIV in it, or the significance of human rights in it. The article should summarize and layout the declaration in a simple, easy to understand form, loosely based on encyclopedic methodology because Wikipedia is an informal, online encyclopedia.

• Structure change needed
  • current structure does not allow for explanation of declaration

1. Intro paragraph
2. Background
3. Vienna Declaration
   1. Harms of Traditional Drug Policies
      1. Financial
      2. Social and Human Rights
      3. Health and HIV
   2. Drug Policy Recommendations
4. Support
5. Criticism
6. References

• "The Vienna Declaration is a document calling for the United Nations to support drug policy reform, including drug decriminalization and a science-based approach to drug policy. ^[1]"
  • Only half of declaration.
  • Other half: desire for acknowledgment and addressing of the detrimental consequences the "war on drugs" has had on health and human rights. ^[2](^ improving community health and safety in Canada)
• "It was the official declaration of the XVIII International AIDS Conference(AIDS 2010) which was held in Vienna, Austria, from July 18 to 23, 2010." ^[2]
  • possible rephrase: It was the official statement of the XVIII International AIDS Conference, held in Vienna on July 18-23, 2010. ^[2]
  • Added citation

• change the title from History to Background
• "The declaration was drafted by a team of international experts and initiated by several of the world’s leading HIV and drug policy scientific bodies: the International AIDS Society, the International Centre for Science in Drug Policy (ICSDP), and the BC Centre for Excellence in HIV/AIDS."
  • directly copied from Vienna declaration website
  • looking for citation
  • statement rephrase to
    • The declaration was a communal effort by: the International AIDS Society, the International Centre for Science in Drug Policy (ICSDP), and the British Columbia Centre for Excellence in HIV/AIDS.
• The declaration was split into two main parts: the negative consequences of punitive drug policy and drug policy recommendations. ( https://www.thelancet.com/journals/lancet/article/PIIS0140-6736(10)60958-0/ fulltext)
  • (ask prof: if I copy directly what the declaration part titles are and use them in this sentence and as headers, is that copyright violation?)

• 1. Oleksyn, Veronika (June 28, 2010), Experts urge reform of global drug policy, WTOP
  • Invalid link, it brings you to the front page of Washington's Top News website.
  • Washington's Top News is biased.
• 2. Henry Neondo (28 June 2010), Scientists Call for Reform of International Drug Policy, Africa Science News Service
  • Africa Science News Service is not a reputable source.
• 4. Paperny, Anna Mehler (August 26, 2010). "Toronto formally endorses harm reduction on drug use". Globe and Mail. Retrieved August 28, 2010.
  • link no longer works
  • link that does work - https://www.theglobeandmail.com/news/toronto/toronto-formally-endorses-harm-reduction-on-drug-use/article1378918/
  • Globe and Mail is not a reputable source.
• 5. McKnight, Zoe (August 26, 2010). "Council votes to endorse decriminalization of drug use". National Post. Retrieved August 28, 2010.
  • National Post is not a neutral, reputable source.

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