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In Signs and symptoms of HIV/AIDS article i added something that i thought it would important to know. Is really important to know that in some HIV test the virus it my not show up. I also included the citation from where i got the information.
Article Evaluation
I evaluated the article Treatment of cancer. Some of the information is relevant to the topic, but i found interesting that some they expressing their opinion. In some parts of article i though they were being bias by saying that this treatment is better than the other one. Another important think that they didn't have the side effects of the treatments. The points of views were represented. I checked the citation the links were working. The sources are recents. I found really interesting that this article had subtitles and the subtitle have subtitle with the article they used. the citation was different. From my point view the reference are reliable. When i checked the talk page some of the wikipedia editor were discussing the they were not able to edit some part of the article. They were discussing that they needed add other treatments. This article is rated B-class on projects quality scale and have been rated mid- importance on the project importance of scale. I though this article was going to relate to our discussion in class about symptom but the symptom were not include in this article.
Article from HIV/AIDS List Assignment due 10/20/2017
In the article Diamanda Galás I read the article and from my point of view, I think that the article needs more information. I plan to add information on her activism in AIDS. Also I plan to add more information about her art. When she started defending people with HIV in 80's our society did not accept people with AIDS, how that affected her career. Additionally, I found it really interesting that her art is so deep and dark. Lreyes391 ( talk) 20:05, 19 October 2017 (UTC)
This are two sources that I'm planning to use
http://diamandagalas.com/shop/art-by-diamanda/page/2/
Alexandro's peer review
Adding information about Diamanda Galás art is an excellent plan and I suggest that you include what her intentions were with her art because the article did not describe what message she was trying to get across with her art. Being that you’re considering adding about the stigma placed upon the infected community, it may be worthwhile adding in the obstacles that she overcome in her journey because this was under represented. Additionally, her article does not mention particular characteristics of her art, so it is very important that you noticed that her work is very dark. I also made several grammar corrections, and fixed some citations, but I did not change the content of your writing. The source that you plan to use is reliable, but please make sure that the links work, because it seems like your second link does not work.
In regards to your actual additions:It seems like your additions were deleted by a bot so I was not able to view all of you additions clearly. The additions that I was able to access seemed relevant to the topic.I would like to let you know that your addition of the tattoo is great because it demonstrates her resilience in fighting for rights. On the other hand, your comment about her brother passing away is slightly irrelevant and distracting, but if you believe that this particular addition is important then please explain. Aleman1993 ( talk) 07:14, 5 November 2017 (UTC)
I was not able to clearly access your additions, so in terms of the whole article please consider:
The article seems to be neutral and everything is relevant to the author, but it is rather important to review the citations because several sentences in the article are missing citations. However, in general the links of the sources work fine and are reliable because several of them are from reputable news sources like the New York Times or San Diego Union Tribune. Also, it appears as though there is a huge devotion to the musical performances that Galas participated in, but it was rather distracting to notice that her awards are underrepresented because only 1 of her awards is noted. Therefore it may be worth adding additional awards that she may have received. It is organized nicely because everything is placed in chronological order. Aleman1993 ( talk) 07:00, 5 November 2017 (UTC)
Choose your topic / Find your sources 11/10/2017 - Plague
I would like to add more information to the San Francisco plague of 1900–1904. Some of the information in the article needs citation. I would like to add more information from reliable source. Also I would like to add more information of what happened during 1904. I think is important to add how the eartquake the Chinese community.
Sources I'm planning to use for improvements
https://www.jstor.org/stable/pdf/40168068.pdf
http://www.sfgate.com/bayarea/article/S-F-leaders-denied-concealed-major-plague-5768180.php
https://www.niaid.nih.gov/about/joseph-kinyoun-indispensable-man-plague-san-francisco
Draft your article - Plague 11/10/2017
Article-Plague Assignment Due 11/10/2017
Improving San Francisco plague of 1900–1904 Article
- Background of the plague
- Second plague that strike San Francisco
- Also i would like to add more about the reaction of the health department to the plague.
- Briefly add more information about the medical solution they used to stopped the plague in 1904.
- fix citations that are not working
Adding to the arcticle:
Discrimination against Chinese Americans culminated in two acts, the quarantine of San Francisco's Chinatown, and the permanent extension of the Chinese Exclusion Act of 1882. [1]
The extented quarantine of Chinatown was motivated more by racist images of Chinese as carriers of disease than by actual evidence of the presence of bubonic plague.
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Lreyes391. You can use it for testing or practicing edits. This is not the sandbox where you should draft your assigned article for a dashboard.wikiedu.org course. To find the right sandbox for your assignment, visit your Dashboard course page and follow the Sandbox Draft link for your assigned article in the My Articles section. |
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Add Article Assignment
In Signs and symptoms of HIV/AIDS article i added something that i thought it would important to know. Is really important to know that in some HIV test the virus it my not show up. I also included the citation from where i got the information.
Article Evaluation
I evaluated the article Treatment of cancer. Some of the information is relevant to the topic, but i found interesting that some they expressing their opinion. In some parts of article i though they were being bias by saying that this treatment is better than the other one. Another important think that they didn't have the side effects of the treatments. The points of views were represented. I checked the citation the links were working. The sources are recents. I found really interesting that this article had subtitles and the subtitle have subtitle with the article they used. the citation was different. From my point view the reference are reliable. When i checked the talk page some of the wikipedia editor were discussing the they were not able to edit some part of the article. They were discussing that they needed add other treatments. This article is rated B-class on projects quality scale and have been rated mid- importance on the project importance of scale. I though this article was going to relate to our discussion in class about symptom but the symptom were not include in this article.
Article from HIV/AIDS List Assignment due 10/20/2017
In the article Diamanda Galás I read the article and from my point of view, I think that the article needs more information. I plan to add information on her activism in AIDS. Also I plan to add more information about her art. When she started defending people with HIV in 80's our society did not accept people with AIDS, how that affected her career. Additionally, I found it really interesting that her art is so deep and dark. Lreyes391 ( talk) 20:05, 19 October 2017 (UTC)
This are two sources that I'm planning to use
http://diamandagalas.com/shop/art-by-diamanda/page/2/
Alexandro's peer review
Adding information about Diamanda Galás art is an excellent plan and I suggest that you include what her intentions were with her art because the article did not describe what message she was trying to get across with her art. Being that you’re considering adding about the stigma placed upon the infected community, it may be worthwhile adding in the obstacles that she overcome in her journey because this was under represented. Additionally, her article does not mention particular characteristics of her art, so it is very important that you noticed that her work is very dark. I also made several grammar corrections, and fixed some citations, but I did not change the content of your writing. The source that you plan to use is reliable, but please make sure that the links work, because it seems like your second link does not work.
In regards to your actual additions:It seems like your additions were deleted by a bot so I was not able to view all of you additions clearly. The additions that I was able to access seemed relevant to the topic.I would like to let you know that your addition of the tattoo is great because it demonstrates her resilience in fighting for rights. On the other hand, your comment about her brother passing away is slightly irrelevant and distracting, but if you believe that this particular addition is important then please explain. Aleman1993 ( talk) 07:14, 5 November 2017 (UTC)
I was not able to clearly access your additions, so in terms of the whole article please consider:
The article seems to be neutral and everything is relevant to the author, but it is rather important to review the citations because several sentences in the article are missing citations. However, in general the links of the sources work fine and are reliable because several of them are from reputable news sources like the New York Times or San Diego Union Tribune. Also, it appears as though there is a huge devotion to the musical performances that Galas participated in, but it was rather distracting to notice that her awards are underrepresented because only 1 of her awards is noted. Therefore it may be worth adding additional awards that she may have received. It is organized nicely because everything is placed in chronological order. Aleman1993 ( talk) 07:00, 5 November 2017 (UTC)
Choose your topic / Find your sources 11/10/2017 - Plague
I would like to add more information to the San Francisco plague of 1900–1904. Some of the information in the article needs citation. I would like to add more information from reliable source. Also I would like to add more information of what happened during 1904. I think is important to add how the eartquake the Chinese community.
Sources I'm planning to use for improvements
https://www.jstor.org/stable/pdf/40168068.pdf
http://www.sfgate.com/bayarea/article/S-F-leaders-denied-concealed-major-plague-5768180.php
https://www.niaid.nih.gov/about/joseph-kinyoun-indispensable-man-plague-san-francisco
Draft your article - Plague 11/10/2017
Article-Plague Assignment Due 11/10/2017
Improving San Francisco plague of 1900–1904 Article
- Background of the plague
- Second plague that strike San Francisco
- Also i would like to add more about the reaction of the health department to the plague.
- Briefly add more information about the medical solution they used to stopped the plague in 1904.
- fix citations that are not working
Adding to the arcticle:
Discrimination against Chinese Americans culminated in two acts, the quarantine of San Francisco's Chinatown, and the permanent extension of the Chinese Exclusion Act of 1882. [1]
The extented quarantine of Chinatown was motivated more by racist images of Chinese as carriers of disease than by actual evidence of the presence of bubonic plague.