Comments (by A. Faucci): Nice work! You have a lot of great info there!
Things to work on:
- Include one more reference as you need to add 5 in addition to what is already there (Rudman's seaslug forum is already a Reference in the original article). Hoover will work. We have it in class.
- Make sure you combine all your info with what is already in the current article so it becomes one homogeneous article that looks like it is written by 1 person. You can make changes to what is there if it makes sense. Just try to avoid repetition (for example, in the lead it already said that the species belongs to the family of Aplysiidae, so you don't need to say it again. (btw Aplysia is the genus, Aplysiidae is the family).
- Divide all the information into specific sections: Description (or Description & Biology), Distribution (which is its geographic distribution), Habitat (where they can be found in their geographic distribution), Human use (if have any info, otherwise leave it out)
- Make sure you ONLY include information for your species. When you discuss the ink, which is super interesting, make sure it is clear why you include that info in this article on this specific species. Right now it is unclear if this species does or does not ink.
- Once you have everything reorganized so that the information is logical, check the logic of the information and the flow in each section. Then check your English and make sure it is grammatically correct. it helps if you read everything out loud to catch inconsistencies.
Dolabrifera dolabrifera, otherwise known as a Warty Seacat. [1] The animal goes by many names, including the common sea hare. [2] The Hawaiian name for Dolabrifera dolabrifera, is Kualakai. [2]
The Seacat is a flat sea hare that grows to about 10cm long. [3] The maximum recorded length is 108 mm. [4] It is commonly spotty green or brown, but it can also be reddish. [3] The animal's back half is typically wider and rounded, it narrows towards the head. [3] Warty Seacats are soft-bodied gastropods, who have lost a protective shell over time. [1] All species of sea hares have ink glands for chemical defense, though Dolabrifera dolabrifera does not release ink. [5]
-> Comment by Anuschka: Great description. i would delete the sentences I crossed out and would move the last 2 sentences up before you talk about them loosing a shell.
The species is found in warm tropical and subtropical waters. [3]
-> Comment by Anuschka: this last sentence should go to Habitat
These animals are majorly preyed on in their habitat. [1] The Seacats live in shallow-flat pools that contain large boulders, near-shore. [1] Collections of the hares gather underneath rocks in the intertidal zone. [6] At night the warty Seacats hide themselves in between cracks found in the boulders. [1] During the day, when the tide rises, the Seacats emerge. [1] Due to the varying in color and pattern, it is hard to distinguish them from other species in the habitat. [7] The minimum recorded depth for this species is 0 m; the maximum recorded depth is 3 m. [4]
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Comments (by A. Faucci): Nice work! You have a lot of great info there!
Things to work on:
- Include one more reference as you need to add 5 in addition to what is already there (Rudman's seaslug forum is already a Reference in the original article). Hoover will work. We have it in class.
- Make sure you combine all your info with what is already in the current article so it becomes one homogeneous article that looks like it is written by 1 person. You can make changes to what is there if it makes sense. Just try to avoid repetition (for example, in the lead it already said that the species belongs to the family of Aplysiidae, so you don't need to say it again. (btw Aplysia is the genus, Aplysiidae is the family).
- Divide all the information into specific sections: Description (or Description & Biology), Distribution (which is its geographic distribution), Habitat (where they can be found in their geographic distribution), Human use (if have any info, otherwise leave it out)
- Make sure you ONLY include information for your species. When you discuss the ink, which is super interesting, make sure it is clear why you include that info in this article on this specific species. Right now it is unclear if this species does or does not ink.
- Once you have everything reorganized so that the information is logical, check the logic of the information and the flow in each section. Then check your English and make sure it is grammatically correct. it helps if you read everything out loud to catch inconsistencies.
Dolabrifera dolabrifera, otherwise known as a Warty Seacat. [1] The animal goes by many names, including the common sea hare. [2] The Hawaiian name for Dolabrifera dolabrifera, is Kualakai. [2]
The Seacat is a flat sea hare that grows to about 10cm long. [3] The maximum recorded length is 108 mm. [4] It is commonly spotty green or brown, but it can also be reddish. [3] The animal's back half is typically wider and rounded, it narrows towards the head. [3] Warty Seacats are soft-bodied gastropods, who have lost a protective shell over time. [1] All species of sea hares have ink glands for chemical defense, though Dolabrifera dolabrifera does not release ink. [5]
-> Comment by Anuschka: Great description. i would delete the sentences I crossed out and would move the last 2 sentences up before you talk about them loosing a shell.
The species is found in warm tropical and subtropical waters. [3]
-> Comment by Anuschka: this last sentence should go to Habitat
These animals are majorly preyed on in their habitat. [1] The Seacats live in shallow-flat pools that contain large boulders, near-shore. [1] Collections of the hares gather underneath rocks in the intertidal zone. [6] At night the warty Seacats hide themselves in between cracks found in the boulders. [1] During the day, when the tide rises, the Seacats emerge. [1] Due to the varying in color and pattern, it is hard to distinguish them from other species in the habitat. [7] The minimum recorded depth for this species is 0 m; the maximum recorded depth is 3 m. [4]
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