Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.
General info
- Whose work are you reviewing: jameswang323
- Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Jameswang323/sandbox#First Draft of Article Contribution:
Lead
Lead evaluation
You will have to add information about your topic in the lead section of the article. Aside from that the introduction to your topic is well developed and easy to understand. Your introduction clearly states what your intentions are in the paragraph. It is concise and doesn't have too much information presented at one time which is good.
Content
Content evaluation
The content is quite up to date. The majority of the information comes from recent events and the sources also mainly come from 2019. All content is relevant and the new section clearly relates to the topic as a whole.
Tone and Balance
Tone and balance evaluation
For the most part the content remained neutral. There were a few instances where it seemed that you were leading the reader to a conclusion so try to eliminate that. I did not see any biases in your additions which is good. Aside from the concluding parts of your paragraphs, I thought the piece was neutral.
Sources and References
Sources and references evaluation
The sources were definitely reliable as it is a bunch of scholarly articles and books. The sources definitely provide valid information that enhances the piece as a whole. Most of the sources come from 2019 so they are definitely current. All the links that I clicked on seemed to work well.
Organization
Organization evaluation
The paragraphs flowed in a coherent and easy to read manner. I definitely could see this sliding directly into the article as it is well written. I could not find spelling or grammatical errors and thought the piece is well organized.
Images and Media
Images and media evaluation
No images used.
Overall impressions
Overall evaluation
Overall I think you have a really good start. The paragraphs are full of information that corresponds to the article as a whole. Enhancing vocabulary at times can definitely add to the piece. Look into fixing the conclusion sentences of your paragraphs because it seems to me that you take a stance in them.
-Bradley Russo
Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.
General info
- Whose work are you reviewing: jameswang323
- Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Jameswang323/sandbox#First Draft of Article Contribution:
Lead
Lead evaluation
You will have to add information about your topic in the lead section of the article. Aside from that the introduction to your topic is well developed and easy to understand. Your introduction clearly states what your intentions are in the paragraph. It is concise and doesn't have too much information presented at one time which is good.
Content
Content evaluation
The content is quite up to date. The majority of the information comes from recent events and the sources also mainly come from 2019. All content is relevant and the new section clearly relates to the topic as a whole.
Tone and Balance
Tone and balance evaluation
For the most part the content remained neutral. There were a few instances where it seemed that you were leading the reader to a conclusion so try to eliminate that. I did not see any biases in your additions which is good. Aside from the concluding parts of your paragraphs, I thought the piece was neutral.
Sources and References
Sources and references evaluation
The sources were definitely reliable as it is a bunch of scholarly articles and books. The sources definitely provide valid information that enhances the piece as a whole. Most of the sources come from 2019 so they are definitely current. All the links that I clicked on seemed to work well.
Organization
Organization evaluation
The paragraphs flowed in a coherent and easy to read manner. I definitely could see this sliding directly into the article as it is well written. I could not find spelling or grammatical errors and thought the piece is well organized.
Images and Media
Images and media evaluation
No images used.
Overall impressions
Overall evaluation
Overall I think you have a really good start. The paragraphs are full of information that corresponds to the article as a whole. Enhancing vocabulary at times can definitely add to the piece. Look into fixing the conclusion sentences of your paragraphs because it seems to me that you take a stance in them.
-Bradley Russo