 | Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
ContentGuiding questions:
Tone and BalanceGuiding questions:
Sources and ReferencesGuiding questions:
OrganizationGuiding questions:
Images and MediaGuiding questions: If your peer added images or media
For New Articles OnlyIf the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.
Overall impressionsGuiding questions:
Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.
Additional Resources |
- Whose work are you reviewing?
(Cameron Kletke)
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- /info/en/?search=User:Cameron%20Kletke/Esfir_Shub?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Esfir Shub
Lead
- Concise and straightforward
- Reference to one of the films in the Documentaries section of Career
- Maybe could include a mention about Shub's style of filming
Content
- There's a lot of information that makes the article look word heavy but it may be because of explaining the quotations
- Nice job on finding and questioning the credibility of some information and fixing it
Tone and Balance
- A majority of the article seems to be neutral; however, some quotations sort of give off an opinion, such as “'nothing like Shub’s films had existed before them, and her work remains among the finest examples of the compilation technique.'"
Sources and References
- It looks like you used sources that are recent (2021)
- Although I think the source for Gadassik is listed three times in the References? You're able to re-use sources by clicking the Cite option at the top then clicking on the Re-use tab (look for the source you want to Re-use).
Organization
- The information is concise but it comes down to the way it is structured. It reminds me of an essay (in terms of providing a quotation and explaining it).
- Would paraphrasing these quotations help with the fixing the text heavy sections?
- Are these quotations beneficial or can they be omitted?
- Can some sentences or bits of info be omitted if they don't seem to add anything except for more words? Or can they be reworded?
- Maybe certain events can be grouped together under a year that had experienced some activity (e.g. 1927)
- It's nice to note the grammatical/punctuation errors you spotted and consider fixing in a future edit.
Images and Media
- Providing a visual such as a cover for one the films discussed or maybe a still from one of the films could add interest for the reader and make the article look lively
| Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
ContentGuiding questions:
Tone and BalanceGuiding questions:
Sources and ReferencesGuiding questions:
OrganizationGuiding questions:
Images and MediaGuiding questions: If your peer added images or media
For New Articles OnlyIf the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.
Overall impressionsGuiding questions:
Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.
Additional Resources |
- Whose work are you reviewing?
(Cameron Kletke)
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- /info/en/?search=User:Cameron%20Kletke/Esfir_Shub?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Esfir Shub
Lead
- Concise and straightforward
- Reference to one of the films in the Documentaries section of Career
- Maybe could include a mention about Shub's style of filming
Content
- There's a lot of information that makes the article look word heavy but it may be because of explaining the quotations
- Nice job on finding and questioning the credibility of some information and fixing it
Tone and Balance
- A majority of the article seems to be neutral; however, some quotations sort of give off an opinion, such as “'nothing like Shub’s films had existed before them, and her work remains among the finest examples of the compilation technique.'"
Sources and References
- It looks like you used sources that are recent (2021)
- Although I think the source for Gadassik is listed three times in the References? You're able to re-use sources by clicking the Cite option at the top then clicking on the Re-use tab (look for the source you want to Re-use).
Organization
- The information is concise but it comes down to the way it is structured. It reminds me of an essay (in terms of providing a quotation and explaining it).
- Would paraphrasing these quotations help with the fixing the text heavy sections?
- Are these quotations beneficial or can they be omitted?
- Can some sentences or bits of info be omitted if they don't seem to add anything except for more words? Or can they be reworded?
- Maybe certain events can be grouped together under a year that had experienced some activity (e.g. 1927)
- It's nice to note the grammatical/punctuation errors you spotted and consider fixing in a future edit.
Images and Media
- Providing a visual such as a cover for one the films discussed or maybe a still from one of the films could add interest for the reader and make the article look lively