9/25/18- You're on the right track, Brandi! Check out your classmate's sandbox here for an example of a well-organized, complete sandbox. You do need a log of your work with dates. There's a catch-up week coming up, so it would be good to work on that then. :)
10/4/18- Brandi- can you please provide MLA citation for the references below and not just the link? What questions are emerging for you? I also suggest copying the part of your article you're editing into this space.
10/16- Good! Please check out this page: Canadianism and see how they did their introduction. You could find a few more, perhaps, like Japanese or Mexican Patriotism. Also, look at the images they use. If the article is referring to a particular thing that you think readers might not have a "picture" of in their mind, those are the images to try and find. Make sense? Please post what more you have done by 10/21 for credit.
Brandi, 10/30/18- Thank you for all your feedback. It has really helped me :)
9/21/18- I plan to provide a more detailed description of American Patriotism. I see that some citations need more verification, and one that doesn't lead anywhere. I plan to add more than just links to other Wiki articles and more on the history of how American Patriotism was founded. I also want to find articles about personal beliefs on American Patriotism to add. (.5 hour)
9/26/18- Looked in Butte College Virtual Library for references. searched "american patriotism," "american revolution" read some interesting articles. Focusing on ebooks so readers can find sources easily. (1 hour)
9/29/18- Looked in Butte College Virtual Library for references. searched "star spangled banner," "boston tea party," Found sources I wanted to use. (2 hours)
10/3/18- read more about my references and remembered to add them to sandbox. (1 hour)
10/04/18- I copied and pasted introduction paragraph into sandbox for editing. Focusing on citations and rewrite of explanations. (1 hour)
10/12/18- I am using the creative commons database to search for safe pictures to use for the article. typed "american patriotism," haven't found anything yet; mostly american flags. I'm going to try another search with "American Revolution" and "Frances Scott Key" and "Uncle Sam" (.5 hour)
10/13/18- Implementing ideas for editing introduction paragraph. Deleted "to Americans" and "as their homeland." because "United States of America" link gives a good explanation. Removed Maurizio Viroli reference because you have to buy the book in order to view it; makes it hard for readers to know if its credible or use it for themselves. Added new references to beginning of the American Revolution. Rewrote some sentences to further explain original ideas. Added Ralph Waldo Emerson ference to bottom to use later; still credible source. (2 hours)
10/17/18- Copied most of what I wrote for introduction into another heading category (History); it made more sense to separate that from other sections related to American Patriotism. Added a couple other sections I have thoughts on for the topic.
10/30/18- added wikilinks in sandbox and moved some things around. started moving sandbox work to article. only added the introduction and first paragraph of history section to give it some time to let other see it. (1 hour)
10/31/18- reading my references, searching for good information to cite in the article. added more information to Boston Tea Party section in 'History'. (1 hour)
11/4/18- added more to sandbox, moved work to main space for review from other editors. (2 hours)
10/04/18- American patriotism is patriotism involving cultural attachment of Americans to the United States of America as their homeland. not in citation given Maurizio Viroli distinguishes patriotism (emphasizing ideas and values) and nationalism (commitment to nation). Ralph Waldo Emerson described the United States as an "asylum of all nations". Official citation needed American values were laid out in the Declaration of Independence that emphasized human rights, such as declaring that "all men are created equal", that people have "inalienable rights", and that people have the right to "life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness". American patriotism has also focused on the principles and values of the Constitution of the United States. -copied from article for editing
I noticed that this needs many proper citations and a rewrite of the sentences for better explanation. There are misleading and/or broken citations that lead to the same article. Some citations lead to unfinished Wiki articles as well.
I want to create different sections explaining how American Patriotism grew throughout history.
10/13/18- EDIT: American Patriotism is patriotism involving cultural attachment to the United States of America. Identified as related to American Nationalism, but many diverse ethnic backgrounds share the culture. Today, America is considered one of the most culturally diverse countries internationally.
10/17/18-
The French and Indian War ended in 1765 and the British Colonials needed more money to pay for the British troops still remaining in the Colonies, so they passed the Stamp Act of 1765. After successfully getting the Stamp Act repealed, some Americans started to get suspicious of the British government. These radicals, led by Samuel Adams, "created Committees of Correspondence in the various Colonies to begin the long, slow work toward gaining independence from England." [1]
Soon, however, the British passed the Tea Tax in 1773, which aggravated the majority of the Colonists. Samuel Adams took this chance to rally the Boston Tea Party; "The taxes of Americans were being increased without any comment or input from the Colonies. Cries of 'Taxation without representation!' rang loud and clear from Savannah to Maine" [1] The wiser of the radicals wanted nothing more than to dump the tea into the harbor, to avoid bloodshed, which they did successfully. However, some younger radicals, such as Thomas Moore, sought a more violent reaction. The aftermath included many American ports rejecting incoming tea; though some shipments were offloaded, no one wanted to claim the tea. Resulting rotten tea after 3 years of sitting on the shore, the tea was dumped into the harbor. Ports in Philadelphia and New York refused to unload the shipments, causing the ships to turn back to England. [1]
On July 4th in 1776, the Declaration of Independence was ratified, declaring the first 13 North American colonies free from Britain's rule. It emphasizes basic human rights, such as that "all men are created equal," that people have "inalienable rights," and that people have the right to "life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness." On June 21 in 1788, the principles and values of the Constitution of the United States were ratified and the first legislature was established on March 4, 1789.
Ralph Waldo Emerson described the United States as an "asylum of all nations". -copied from article for editing
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a
b
c Haven, Kendell F. (2000). Voices of the American Revolution: Stories of Men, Women, and Children Who Forged Our Nation : Stories of Men, Women, and Children Who Forged Our Nation.
http://eds.a.ebscohost.com.butte.idm.oclc.org/ehost/detail?sid=af846816-2b1f-402c-8bd7-5ad490cff589@sdc-v-sessmgr04&vid=0&format=EB&lpid=lp_1&rid=0#AN=80802&db=nlebk: Englewood, Colo : Libraries Unlimited. p. 1.
ISBN
9781563088568.
{{ cite book}}: External link in|location=
- Haven, Kendall F. Voices of the American Revolution: Stories of Men, Women, and Children Who Forged Our Nation : Stories of Men, Women, and Children Who Forged Our Nation. Libraries Unlimited, 2000. EBSCOhost, butte.idm.oclc.org/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=nlebk&AN=80802&site=ehost-live&scope=site.
Star Spangled Banner: Rauch, Steven J. "Star-Spangled Banner." Encyclopedia of the New American Nation, edited by Paul Finkelman, vol. 3, Charles Scribner's Sons, 2006, pp. 234-235. Gale Virtual Reference Library, http://link.galegroup.com.butte.idm.oclc.org/apps/doc/CX3446700615/GVRL?u=orov49112&sid=GVRL&xid=f99c82e3. Accessed 5 Oct. 2018.
WW1: Capozzola, Christopher Joseph Nicodemus. Uncle Sam Wants You : World War I and the Making of the Modern American Citizen. Oxford University Press, 2008. EBSCOhost, butte.idm.oclc.org/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=nlebk&AN=230963&site=ehost-live&scope=site.
WW2:
Civil Rights Movement:
9/11:
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9/25/18- You're on the right track, Brandi! Check out your classmate's sandbox here for an example of a well-organized, complete sandbox. You do need a log of your work with dates. There's a catch-up week coming up, so it would be good to work on that then. :)
10/4/18- Brandi- can you please provide MLA citation for the references below and not just the link? What questions are emerging for you? I also suggest copying the part of your article you're editing into this space.
10/16- Good! Please check out this page: Canadianism and see how they did their introduction. You could find a few more, perhaps, like Japanese or Mexican Patriotism. Also, look at the images they use. If the article is referring to a particular thing that you think readers might not have a "picture" of in their mind, those are the images to try and find. Make sense? Please post what more you have done by 10/21 for credit.
Brandi, 10/30/18- Thank you for all your feedback. It has really helped me :)
9/21/18- I plan to provide a more detailed description of American Patriotism. I see that some citations need more verification, and one that doesn't lead anywhere. I plan to add more than just links to other Wiki articles and more on the history of how American Patriotism was founded. I also want to find articles about personal beliefs on American Patriotism to add. (.5 hour)
9/26/18- Looked in Butte College Virtual Library for references. searched "american patriotism," "american revolution" read some interesting articles. Focusing on ebooks so readers can find sources easily. (1 hour)
9/29/18- Looked in Butte College Virtual Library for references. searched "star spangled banner," "boston tea party," Found sources I wanted to use. (2 hours)
10/3/18- read more about my references and remembered to add them to sandbox. (1 hour)
10/04/18- I copied and pasted introduction paragraph into sandbox for editing. Focusing on citations and rewrite of explanations. (1 hour)
10/12/18- I am using the creative commons database to search for safe pictures to use for the article. typed "american patriotism," haven't found anything yet; mostly american flags. I'm going to try another search with "American Revolution" and "Frances Scott Key" and "Uncle Sam" (.5 hour)
10/13/18- Implementing ideas for editing introduction paragraph. Deleted "to Americans" and "as their homeland." because "United States of America" link gives a good explanation. Removed Maurizio Viroli reference because you have to buy the book in order to view it; makes it hard for readers to know if its credible or use it for themselves. Added new references to beginning of the American Revolution. Rewrote some sentences to further explain original ideas. Added Ralph Waldo Emerson ference to bottom to use later; still credible source. (2 hours)
10/17/18- Copied most of what I wrote for introduction into another heading category (History); it made more sense to separate that from other sections related to American Patriotism. Added a couple other sections I have thoughts on for the topic.
10/30/18- added wikilinks in sandbox and moved some things around. started moving sandbox work to article. only added the introduction and first paragraph of history section to give it some time to let other see it. (1 hour)
10/31/18- reading my references, searching for good information to cite in the article. added more information to Boston Tea Party section in 'History'. (1 hour)
11/4/18- added more to sandbox, moved work to main space for review from other editors. (2 hours)
10/04/18- American patriotism is patriotism involving cultural attachment of Americans to the United States of America as their homeland. not in citation given Maurizio Viroli distinguishes patriotism (emphasizing ideas and values) and nationalism (commitment to nation). Ralph Waldo Emerson described the United States as an "asylum of all nations". Official citation needed American values were laid out in the Declaration of Independence that emphasized human rights, such as declaring that "all men are created equal", that people have "inalienable rights", and that people have the right to "life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness". American patriotism has also focused on the principles and values of the Constitution of the United States. -copied from article for editing
I noticed that this needs many proper citations and a rewrite of the sentences for better explanation. There are misleading and/or broken citations that lead to the same article. Some citations lead to unfinished Wiki articles as well.
I want to create different sections explaining how American Patriotism grew throughout history.
10/13/18- EDIT: American Patriotism is patriotism involving cultural attachment to the United States of America. Identified as related to American Nationalism, but many diverse ethnic backgrounds share the culture. Today, America is considered one of the most culturally diverse countries internationally.
10/17/18-
The French and Indian War ended in 1765 and the British Colonials needed more money to pay for the British troops still remaining in the Colonies, so they passed the Stamp Act of 1765. After successfully getting the Stamp Act repealed, some Americans started to get suspicious of the British government. These radicals, led by Samuel Adams, "created Committees of Correspondence in the various Colonies to begin the long, slow work toward gaining independence from England." [1]
Soon, however, the British passed the Tea Tax in 1773, which aggravated the majority of the Colonists. Samuel Adams took this chance to rally the Boston Tea Party; "The taxes of Americans were being increased without any comment or input from the Colonies. Cries of 'Taxation without representation!' rang loud and clear from Savannah to Maine" [1] The wiser of the radicals wanted nothing more than to dump the tea into the harbor, to avoid bloodshed, which they did successfully. However, some younger radicals, such as Thomas Moore, sought a more violent reaction. The aftermath included many American ports rejecting incoming tea; though some shipments were offloaded, no one wanted to claim the tea. Resulting rotten tea after 3 years of sitting on the shore, the tea was dumped into the harbor. Ports in Philadelphia and New York refused to unload the shipments, causing the ships to turn back to England. [1]
On July 4th in 1776, the Declaration of Independence was ratified, declaring the first 13 North American colonies free from Britain's rule. It emphasizes basic human rights, such as that "all men are created equal," that people have "inalienable rights," and that people have the right to "life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness." On June 21 in 1788, the principles and values of the Constitution of the United States were ratified and the first legislature was established on March 4, 1789.
Ralph Waldo Emerson described the United States as an "asylum of all nations". -copied from article for editing
- ^
a
b
c Haven, Kendell F. (2000). Voices of the American Revolution: Stories of Men, Women, and Children Who Forged Our Nation : Stories of Men, Women, and Children Who Forged Our Nation.
http://eds.a.ebscohost.com.butte.idm.oclc.org/ehost/detail?sid=af846816-2b1f-402c-8bd7-5ad490cff589@sdc-v-sessmgr04&vid=0&format=EB&lpid=lp_1&rid=0#AN=80802&db=nlebk: Englewood, Colo : Libraries Unlimited. p. 1.
ISBN
9781563088568.
{{ cite book}}: External link in|location=
- Haven, Kendall F. Voices of the American Revolution: Stories of Men, Women, and Children Who Forged Our Nation : Stories of Men, Women, and Children Who Forged Our Nation. Libraries Unlimited, 2000. EBSCOhost, butte.idm.oclc.org/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=nlebk&AN=80802&site=ehost-live&scope=site.
Star Spangled Banner: Rauch, Steven J. "Star-Spangled Banner." Encyclopedia of the New American Nation, edited by Paul Finkelman, vol. 3, Charles Scribner's Sons, 2006, pp. 234-235. Gale Virtual Reference Library, http://link.galegroup.com.butte.idm.oclc.org/apps/doc/CX3446700615/GVRL?u=orov49112&sid=GVRL&xid=f99c82e3. Accessed 5 Oct. 2018.
WW1: Capozzola, Christopher Joseph Nicodemus. Uncle Sam Wants You : World War I and the Making of the Modern American Citizen. Oxford University Press, 2008. EBSCOhost, butte.idm.oclc.org/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=nlebk&AN=230963&site=ehost-live&scope=site.
WW2:
Civil Rights Movement:
9/11:
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