 | Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
ContentGuiding questions:
Tone and BalanceGuiding questions:
Sources and ReferencesGuiding questions:
OrganizationGuiding questions:
Images and MediaGuiding questions: If your peer added images or media
For New Articles OnlyIf the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.
Overall impressionsGuiding questions:
Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.
Additional Resources |
- Whose work are you reviewing?
Astebbins
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- Link to article HERE
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Link to article HERE
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)
First off, your contribution to the article is great! You begin your article by providing a clear outline of how the foster care system is run by NGOs rather than being run by the government - this is a helpful way to distinguish between governmental powers and NGO work. In the sentence directly after the LEAD, I would suggest writing a transitionary statement or a new subhead to explain that within the foster care system there are a lot of controversial ideas (of course maintaining a neutral stance) but I think pointing to that gives the reader a better sense of this work. An example of this:
Concerns within the foster care system:
(Begin paragraph)
Benefits of the foster care system:
(Begin paragraph)
I have seen other wikipedia pages do something like this and I feel like sometimes it is easier to understand the full scope of the topic if it is just organized differently. I liked that you provided in depth information about the overall concerns of the foster care system particularly in America.
I do think that because the initial section is under the "US" portion of the page, it could give a few sentences about how NGOS became the main organizers of this system in the first place - in other words, why is it not run by the government?
You make great use of your sources as well! The article contribution is really well done and super in depth, especially the last contribution about how the foster care system is linked to race.
The viewpoints are clear and concise with great use of sources!
I know that this is a very sensitive topic but maybe there could be room for some photos?
| Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
ContentGuiding questions:
Tone and BalanceGuiding questions:
Sources and ReferencesGuiding questions:
OrganizationGuiding questions:
Images and MediaGuiding questions: If your peer added images or media
For New Articles OnlyIf the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.
Overall impressionsGuiding questions:
Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.
Additional Resources |
- Whose work are you reviewing?
Astebbins
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- Link to article HERE
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Link to article HERE
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)
First off, your contribution to the article is great! You begin your article by providing a clear outline of how the foster care system is run by NGOs rather than being run by the government - this is a helpful way to distinguish between governmental powers and NGO work. In the sentence directly after the LEAD, I would suggest writing a transitionary statement or a new subhead to explain that within the foster care system there are a lot of controversial ideas (of course maintaining a neutral stance) but I think pointing to that gives the reader a better sense of this work. An example of this:
Concerns within the foster care system:
(Begin paragraph)
Benefits of the foster care system:
(Begin paragraph)
I have seen other wikipedia pages do something like this and I feel like sometimes it is easier to understand the full scope of the topic if it is just organized differently. I liked that you provided in depth information about the overall concerns of the foster care system particularly in America.
I do think that because the initial section is under the "US" portion of the page, it could give a few sentences about how NGOS became the main organizers of this system in the first place - in other words, why is it not run by the government?
You make great use of your sources as well! The article contribution is really well done and super in depth, especially the last contribution about how the foster care system is linked to race.
The viewpoints are clear and concise with great use of sources!
I know that this is a very sensitive topic but maybe there could be room for some photos?