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Reviewer: Sammi Brie ( talk · contribs) 03:51, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
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@ Vacant0: Passing as the changes have been made. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 22:40, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
Its development began after the Microsoft co-founder and spearhead of Windows 1.0, Bill Gates, saw a demonstration of a similar software suite, Visi On at COMDEX in 1982.There should be a comma after Visi On
3.5 inch: add hyphen for adjective
Comparing to MS-DOS: use "compared"
Initially, Puzzle and Chess were supposed to appear as playable video games, although Microsoft scrapped the idea and instead,— replace the and with a semicolon. That is a point where the sentence has a natural split between two independent sentences.
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The version 1.02 introduced drivers for European keyboards, screen and print drivers.This sentence confuses me. It shouldn't start with "the". Were the drivers it introduced for printers and screens or just European printers? Potential ways to format this depending on the meaning:
Version 1.02 introduced drivers for European keyboards, as well as screen and print drivers.
Version 1.02 introduced drivers for European keyboards, as well as for screens and printers.
Version 1.02 introduced drivers for European hardware, including keyboards, screens, and printers.
Critics considered the platform to have future potential, but that Windows 1.0 had not fulfilled expectations, and that it could not compete with Apple's GUI operating system.I'd also add a "felt" before "that Windows 1.0".
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Vacant0: 7-day hold to make the following:
@ Vacant0: Passing as the changes have been made. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 22:40, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
Its development began after the Microsoft co-founder and spearhead of Windows 1.0, Bill Gates, saw a demonstration of a similar software suite, Visi On at COMDEX in 1982.There should be a comma after Visi On
3.5 inch: add hyphen for adjective
Comparing to MS-DOS: use "compared"
Initially, Puzzle and Chess were supposed to appear as playable video games, although Microsoft scrapped the idea and instead,— replace the and with a semicolon. That is a point where the sentence has a natural split between two independent sentences.
built-in application
The version 1.02 introduced drivers for European keyboards, screen and print drivers.This sentence confuses me. It shouldn't start with "the". Were the drivers it introduced for printers and screens or just European printers? Potential ways to format this depending on the meaning:
Version 1.02 introduced drivers for European keyboards, as well as screen and print drivers.
Version 1.02 introduced drivers for European keyboards, as well as for screens and printers.
Version 1.02 introduced drivers for European hardware, including keyboards, screens, and printers.
Critics considered the platform to have future potential, but that Windows 1.0 had not fulfilled expectations, and that it could not compete with Apple's GUI operating system.I'd also add a "felt" before "that Windows 1.0".