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Reviewer: Colin M ( talk · contribs) 21:05, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
(Currently working on writing up feedback. Stay tuned.)
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Overall, I think the article is in an excellent state. I just have a few small suggestions/concerns, mostly about the prose:
He married Elizabeth and had the sons...Who is Elizabeth? Referring to someone by name like this creates the impression that this is someone the reader is already expected to be aware of.
Bensley, the printer of the Macklin’s Bible,First mention of Bensley. Can we get a full name? (I'm assuming this is a person. But perhaps it's a company? In which case that could be made clearer). Also I'm assuming the the should be deleted?
His sons also issued specimens soon after taking over management in 1838 and in 1845.This is a little confusing. They took over management in 1838 and in 1845? Or is it saying they issued specimens (soon after taking over management in 1838) and also issued specimens (in 1845)? Perhaps the wording could be clarified.
It still retains the original cast iron railings bearing a VJF monogram.I'm guessing VJF are Figgins' initials? But this isn't totally clear from context, since the article doesn't seem to ever mention a middle name/initial.
Mr. Hunt was infirm as in talent as in virtue"..."Mr. Hunt [said that] as toConfused by the quotation marks here, and the one at the very end of the blockquote. Is the quote mark before the ellipsis meant to be a closing quote? And if so where is the opening quote that matches with it?
The following are not really WP:GACR issues, just some extra suggestions/observations which you should feel free to take or leave:
After an apprenticeship with Joseph Jackson, he established his own type foundry in 1792.Maybe "an apprenticeship with typefounder Joseph Jackson"? The way it's written now almost suggests the reader is supposed to already know who Jackson is. Alternatively, could just defer mention of him until the body.
His company was extremely successful and,Did this company not have a name? I noticed the body also refers to it just as "Figgins' company".
Figgins introduced or popularised both slab-serif and sans-serif typefaces, now two of the main genres of typeface.Not clear whether this is saying he introduced/popularized the genres themselves or particular typefaces belonging to those genres. (Though the body does clarify this.)
The second part of Figgins' career coincided with the rise of the mass-market printed poster and an increasing need for dramatic display typefaces.Could be helpful to give some indication of approximately what date range we're talking about here. It's not immediately clear whether we're talking about a portion of the career described in the above section, or if the previous section was just describing the first part of his career, with this section talking about the second. (Though again, this ambiguity is resolved as the reader continues through the section.)
(One thing I still need to do is a few citation checks, though I don't expect this will result in any action items.) Colin M ( talk) 23:02, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
Thanks for the quick updates. Glad to hear the feedback was useful! I did a spot check of some citations and everything looks fine there. The only unresolved issue above that I think has a bearing on WP:GACR is the Cobbett quote - once we reach a resolution on that, I'll be happy to pass this. Colin M ( talk) 15:04, 15 July 2021 (UTC)
That's great, thanks! I'm a bit busy this weekend but hope to have some changes figured out in the next few days. Blythwood ( talk) 08:59, 17 July 2021 (UTC)
It's good! Thanks for your patience. I'm satisfied that this meets the GA criteria. Nice work! I did have a few further comments/suggestions that came to mind on my final read-through, but since they're not GA-specific, I'll just add them to the article talk page shortly. Colin M ( talk) 20:05, 27 July 2021 (UTC)
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Colin M (
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Overall, I think the article is in an excellent state. I just have a few small suggestions/concerns, mostly about the prose:
He married Elizabeth and had the sons...Who is Elizabeth? Referring to someone by name like this creates the impression that this is someone the reader is already expected to be aware of.
Bensley, the printer of the Macklin’s Bible,First mention of Bensley. Can we get a full name? (I'm assuming this is a person. But perhaps it's a company? In which case that could be made clearer). Also I'm assuming the the should be deleted?
His sons also issued specimens soon after taking over management in 1838 and in 1845.This is a little confusing. They took over management in 1838 and in 1845? Or is it saying they issued specimens (soon after taking over management in 1838) and also issued specimens (in 1845)? Perhaps the wording could be clarified.
It still retains the original cast iron railings bearing a VJF monogram.I'm guessing VJF are Figgins' initials? But this isn't totally clear from context, since the article doesn't seem to ever mention a middle name/initial.
Mr. Hunt was infirm as in talent as in virtue"..."Mr. Hunt [said that] as toConfused by the quotation marks here, and the one at the very end of the blockquote. Is the quote mark before the ellipsis meant to be a closing quote? And if so where is the opening quote that matches with it?
The following are not really WP:GACR issues, just some extra suggestions/observations which you should feel free to take or leave:
After an apprenticeship with Joseph Jackson, he established his own type foundry in 1792.Maybe "an apprenticeship with typefounder Joseph Jackson"? The way it's written now almost suggests the reader is supposed to already know who Jackson is. Alternatively, could just defer mention of him until the body.
His company was extremely successful and,Did this company not have a name? I noticed the body also refers to it just as "Figgins' company".
Figgins introduced or popularised both slab-serif and sans-serif typefaces, now two of the main genres of typeface.Not clear whether this is saying he introduced/popularized the genres themselves or particular typefaces belonging to those genres. (Though the body does clarify this.)
The second part of Figgins' career coincided with the rise of the mass-market printed poster and an increasing need for dramatic display typefaces.Could be helpful to give some indication of approximately what date range we're talking about here. It's not immediately clear whether we're talking about a portion of the career described in the above section, or if the previous section was just describing the first part of his career, with this section talking about the second. (Though again, this ambiguity is resolved as the reader continues through the section.)
(One thing I still need to do is a few citation checks, though I don't expect this will result in any action items.) Colin M ( talk) 23:02, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
Thanks for the quick updates. Glad to hear the feedback was useful! I did a spot check of some citations and everything looks fine there. The only unresolved issue above that I think has a bearing on WP:GACR is the Cobbett quote - once we reach a resolution on that, I'll be happy to pass this. Colin M ( talk) 15:04, 15 July 2021 (UTC)
That's great, thanks! I'm a bit busy this weekend but hope to have some changes figured out in the next few days. Blythwood ( talk) 08:59, 17 July 2021 (UTC)
It's good! Thanks for your patience. I'm satisfied that this meets the GA criteria. Nice work! I did have a few further comments/suggestions that came to mind on my final read-through, but since they're not GA-specific, I'll just add them to the article talk page shortly. Colin M ( talk) 20:05, 27 July 2021 (UTC)