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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien ( talk · contribs) 16:12, 20 January 2023 (UTC)
Around this time he also struck a friendship with fellow new wave band Squeeze– Is it correct to say he was friends with the band itself? Was it a working relationship, or did he form a friendship with one or more members?
"Watch Your Step" was rush-released as a single– Is "rush-released" a common term in music marketing?
labelling Bruce and Pete Thomas– I'm conflicted as to how this should be written. If there's no relation, then it might be better to label them as "Bruce Thomas and Pete Thomas", but that might still be considered redundant. I'll leave this one to you.
The cover artwork is a headshot of Costello that he described as an ironic nod to the title.– This might need a little more context with a mention that he was supposed to look untrustworthy in the artwork.
Their work ethics were different, which slowed progress.– It might be worth checking if there's more information on how their work ethics were different and how it affected progress.
After a short tour of Norway and Sweden, Costello and Béchirian produced Squeeze's East Side Story (1981) during the six weeks before Christmas 1980.– Is this relevant?
and praised Costello as one of the best musicians in modern music– I don't think this would be warranted unless it was the overwhelming opinion of virtually all critics, which is not the case. This paragraph in the lead should neutrally summarize the overall critical and popular reception.
his absence led to poor shows– We shouldn't describe the shows as poor in wikivoice. Who thought the shows were poor? The band? Critics?
The atmosphere at DJM was similarly dreadful– "dreadful" seems too emotive. I would probably use "troubled" or "strained", but anything less emotive would work.
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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien ( talk · contribs) 16:12, 20 January 2023 (UTC)
Around this time he also struck a friendship with fellow new wave band Squeeze– Is it correct to say he was friends with the band itself? Was it a working relationship, or did he form a friendship with one or more members?
"Watch Your Step" was rush-released as a single– Is "rush-released" a common term in music marketing?
labelling Bruce and Pete Thomas– I'm conflicted as to how this should be written. If there's no relation, then it might be better to label them as "Bruce Thomas and Pete Thomas", but that might still be considered redundant. I'll leave this one to you.
The cover artwork is a headshot of Costello that he described as an ironic nod to the title.– This might need a little more context with a mention that he was supposed to look untrustworthy in the artwork.
Their work ethics were different, which slowed progress.– It might be worth checking if there's more information on how their work ethics were different and how it affected progress.
After a short tour of Norway and Sweden, Costello and Béchirian produced Squeeze's East Side Story (1981) during the six weeks before Christmas 1980.– Is this relevant?
and praised Costello as one of the best musicians in modern music– I don't think this would be warranted unless it was the overwhelming opinion of virtually all critics, which is not the case. This paragraph in the lead should neutrally summarize the overall critical and popular reception.
his absence led to poor shows– We shouldn't describe the shows as poor in wikivoice. Who thought the shows were poor? The band? Critics?
The atmosphere at DJM was similarly dreadful– "dreadful" seems too emotive. I would probably use "troubled" or "strained", but anything less emotive would work.