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Reviewer: Voorts ( talk · contribs) 01:35, 7 February 2024 (UTC)
Review to come by 11 February 2024 at the latest.
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@ Generalissima: Excellent work. A few notes:
- I've made a couple of copy edits. Please let me know if you disagree with them.
- I've checked all of the sources cited in the article. All of them are reliable sources. Source-text integrity looks good, unless otherwise noted below.
- Can you please provide quotes from the Thrush and Williams books that substantiate the text in the article body?
- Had the wrong page number on Thrush. For Williams it's essentially the entire page. - G
- Ref 2 does not mention the "Puget Sound War".
- "Treaty War" is a name for the broader conflict including the Yakima War and Puget Sound War. Generalissima ( talk) 00:40, 10 February 2024 (UTC)
- For the first paragraph of the "Ordinance" section, is there a secondary source that you can cite to that supports your reading of the ordinance? In my view, summarizing a law based on one's own reading of it is
OR.
- Fair enough, cited it. The section with the town marshal is not mentioned in the sources, but falls under close paraphrasing and so I think avoids any OR problems. - G
- Regarding the O'Malley source, per
WP:DISSERTATION: "Some theses are later published in the form of scholarly monographs or peer reviewed articles, and, if available, these are usually preferable to the original thesis as sources." Was the thesis subsequently published or is there another source you can cite?
- I could find no evidence of a later published source by O'Malley on the Duwamish. - G
- In the legacy section, is there a secondary source you can cite regarding the resolution passed by the City Council?
- Done! - G
Best, voorts ( talk/ contributions) 23:05, 9 February 2024 (UTC)
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Voorts: responded, ty so much!
Generalissima (
talk) 00:40, 10 February 2024 (UTC)
- For Thrush, I see
page 54 supporting the point made in the article, not page 63. Also, although not required for GA, I'd recommend adding the series and editions for all of your book references.
voorts (
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Voorts: Yeah, I fixed the page number in my initial run-through. And that's a fair point, let me add that.
Generalissima (
talk) 02:23, 10 February 2024 (UTC)
- @ Generalissima: I'm not going to wait for you to add those to promote the article. Very nice work on this important piece of history. If you have time, I have a couple of GANs needing reviews on my user page. Cora Agnes Benneson might be of interest to you. Best, voorts ( talk/ contributions) 02:24, 10 February 2024 (UTC)
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Voorts: Yeah, I fixed the page number in my initial run-through. And that's a fair point, let me add that.
Generalissima (
talk) 02:23, 10 February 2024 (UTC)
- For Thrush, I see
page 54 supporting the point made in the article, not page 63. Also, although not required for GA, I'd recommend adding the series and editions for all of your book references.
voorts (
talk/
contributions) 00:55, 10 February 2024 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Reviewer: Voorts ( talk · contribs) 01:35, 7 February 2024 (UTC)
Review to come by 11 February 2024 at the latest.
voorts (
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@ Generalissima: Excellent work. A few notes:
- I've made a couple of copy edits. Please let me know if you disagree with them.
- I've checked all of the sources cited in the article. All of them are reliable sources. Source-text integrity looks good, unless otherwise noted below.
- Can you please provide quotes from the Thrush and Williams books that substantiate the text in the article body?
- Had the wrong page number on Thrush. For Williams it's essentially the entire page. - G
- Ref 2 does not mention the "Puget Sound War".
- "Treaty War" is a name for the broader conflict including the Yakima War and Puget Sound War. Generalissima ( talk) 00:40, 10 February 2024 (UTC)
- For the first paragraph of the "Ordinance" section, is there a secondary source that you can cite to that supports your reading of the ordinance? In my view, summarizing a law based on one's own reading of it is
OR.
- Fair enough, cited it. The section with the town marshal is not mentioned in the sources, but falls under close paraphrasing and so I think avoids any OR problems. - G
- Regarding the O'Malley source, per
WP:DISSERTATION: "Some theses are later published in the form of scholarly monographs or peer reviewed articles, and, if available, these are usually preferable to the original thesis as sources." Was the thesis subsequently published or is there another source you can cite?
- I could find no evidence of a later published source by O'Malley on the Duwamish. - G
- In the legacy section, is there a secondary source you can cite regarding the resolution passed by the City Council?
- Done! - G
Best, voorts ( talk/ contributions) 23:05, 9 February 2024 (UTC)
- @
Voorts: responded, ty so much!
Generalissima (
talk) 00:40, 10 February 2024 (UTC)
- For Thrush, I see
page 54 supporting the point made in the article, not page 63. Also, although not required for GA, I'd recommend adding the series and editions for all of your book references.
voorts (
talk/
contributions) 00:55, 10 February 2024 (UTC)
- @
Voorts: Yeah, I fixed the page number in my initial run-through. And that's a fair point, let me add that.
Generalissima (
talk) 02:23, 10 February 2024 (UTC)
- @ Generalissima: I'm not going to wait for you to add those to promote the article. Very nice work on this important piece of history. If you have time, I have a couple of GANs needing reviews on my user page. Cora Agnes Benneson might be of interest to you. Best, voorts ( talk/ contributions) 02:24, 10 February 2024 (UTC)
- @
Voorts: Yeah, I fixed the page number in my initial run-through. And that's a fair point, let me add that.
Generalissima (
talk) 02:23, 10 February 2024 (UTC)
- For Thrush, I see
page 54 supporting the point made in the article, not page 63. Also, although not required for GA, I'd recommend adding the series and editions for all of your book references.
voorts (
talk/
contributions) 00:55, 10 February 2024 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.