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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien ( talk · contribs) 00:34, 29 August 2023 (UTC)
I'll have a review written for this within the next few days.
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Indy beetle, very close to GA already, just a few things to look at and a few suggestions for more info to include. And I'll be honest: I've worked on several difficult reviews in the last few days, so I specifically sought out one with your name on it because I wanted to review an article that wouldn't need significant fixing. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 19:59, 29 August 2023 (UTC)
Indy beetle Looking through, the review seems just about finished. The only significant thing to look at now is to see if more detail can be found about the weather/climate. The religion info looks good, it wouldn't hurt to include some basic statistics if you want to. I don't love the North Carolina History Project source, but it's not being used for any contentious claims, so I won't demand that it's replaced. Other than that, the only other note I see is that you could optionally add the info from Marks (2021) about the largest cotton oil mill if you haven't already. But again, the weather/climate is the only thing I'm waiting on before passing the review. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 20:25, 3 September 2023 (UTC)
By the late 1800s– I suggest late 19th century to avoid confusion with 1800s (decade).
Democrats regained a majority in the General Assembly.– This doesn't have any transitions or context, which would help readability.
began operating as an effective unit of government– I'm sure this is technically correct, but there's probably a simpler way to say this
No black people were allowed to register– "black people" feels informal. Would "black citizens" work?
many tenant farmers and sharecroppers were put out of work and migrated north in search of employment– migrated from the Deep South to North Carolina, or migrated from North Carolina to the Northern U.S.?
As of the 2020 United States census, there were 34,174 people,– In the whole world?!
Spot checks:
Scotland's black population increased in the 1910s and early 1920s as tenant cotton farmers moved north from the Deep South to escape areas infested by the boll weevil?
With something as general as a county, there are a lot of things that could be mentioned, but these are the ones that stood out to me:
I found a few links which may be useful. 1 2 3 4 - Disco
No ideas are given undue weight.
No recent disputes. Information in this article is unlikely to significantly change.
The flag, seal, and logo are all non-free use, but this appears to be common practice for county articles. All other images are licensed or public domain.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien ( talk · contribs) 00:34, 29 August 2023 (UTC)
I'll have a review written for this within the next few days.
Thebiguglyalien (
talk) 00:34, 29 August 2023 (UTC)
Indy beetle, very close to GA already, just a few things to look at and a few suggestions for more info to include. And I'll be honest: I've worked on several difficult reviews in the last few days, so I specifically sought out one with your name on it because I wanted to review an article that wouldn't need significant fixing. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 19:59, 29 August 2023 (UTC)
Indy beetle Looking through, the review seems just about finished. The only significant thing to look at now is to see if more detail can be found about the weather/climate. The religion info looks good, it wouldn't hurt to include some basic statistics if you want to. I don't love the North Carolina History Project source, but it's not being used for any contentious claims, so I won't demand that it's replaced. Other than that, the only other note I see is that you could optionally add the info from Marks (2021) about the largest cotton oil mill if you haven't already. But again, the weather/climate is the only thing I'm waiting on before passing the review. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 20:25, 3 September 2023 (UTC)
By the late 1800s– I suggest late 19th century to avoid confusion with 1800s (decade).
Democrats regained a majority in the General Assembly.– This doesn't have any transitions or context, which would help readability.
began operating as an effective unit of government– I'm sure this is technically correct, but there's probably a simpler way to say this
No black people were allowed to register– "black people" feels informal. Would "black citizens" work?
many tenant farmers and sharecroppers were put out of work and migrated north in search of employment– migrated from the Deep South to North Carolina, or migrated from North Carolina to the Northern U.S.?
As of the 2020 United States census, there were 34,174 people,– In the whole world?!
Spot checks:
Scotland's black population increased in the 1910s and early 1920s as tenant cotton farmers moved north from the Deep South to escape areas infested by the boll weevil?
With something as general as a county, there are a lot of things that could be mentioned, but these are the ones that stood out to me:
I found a few links which may be useful. 1 2 3 4 - Disco
No ideas are given undue weight.
No recent disputes. Information in this article is unlikely to significantly change.
The flag, seal, and logo are all non-free use, but this appears to be common practice for county articles. All other images are licensed or public domain.