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Reviewer: Bneu2013 ( talk · contribs) 08:44, 20 December 2023 (UTC)
I will be reviewing this nomination and have comments very soon. I still need to read over the article thoroughly. I'd also appreciate it if someone would be willing to review some of my GA nominations.
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@ Pi.1415926535: - I've posted all of my comments. Once you address them, the article should be good to go. Bneu2013 ( talk) 06:32, 7 January 2024 (UTC)
was a railroad in Dutchess County and Columbia County, New York, United States.- suggest rewording to something like "was a railroad in Dutchess and Columbia Counties in the U.S. state of New York."
after several mergers, the H&CW, including the ex-R&C, became part of the Central New England Railway (CNE) in 1899.- alternatively, I don't know if "including the ex-R&C is even needed".
Freight service was operated beginning in 1873 even as construction continued eastward.- reword to something like "Freight service began operation in 1873 even as construction continued Eastward". Also, if a more precise date that freight service began is available, I suggest including this. Finally, was the route constructed in sequence from west to east, or were there sections in between that were eventually bridged?
Construction work reached Jackson Corners that October, Mount Ross in November, Gallatinville in May 1874, and Boston Corners in November 1874.- was this when construction began or when the line was completed in those areas?
The bridge was completed in December 1888belongs in the previous paragraph, and
The Poughkeepsie Bridge was built in the late 1880sis a duplicate. You could open the third paragraph with a sentence about when the bridge was finished and that it crossed the Hudson or something like that.
The P&C opened six days later.- should this say "The CNE&W opened six days later."
The CNE struggled along for five years until the New Haven obtained control in early 1904.- reword to something like "The railroad continued to struggle under the CNE until the New Haven obtained control in early 1904."
The New Haven terminated passenger service on the CNE system in Connecticut in late 1927available, considering the following sentence?
and the maximum altitude was 800 feet (240 m)- also suggest changing "altitude" to "elevation", since the former is more commonly used to refer to points above the surface of the earth. Also, I'm guessing 800 feet is the elevation above mean sea level, right?
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Reviewer: Bneu2013 ( talk · contribs) 08:44, 20 December 2023 (UTC)
I will be reviewing this nomination and have comments very soon. I still need to read over the article thoroughly. I'd also appreciate it if someone would be willing to review some of my GA nominations.
Bneu2013 (
talk) 08:44, 20 December 2023 (UTC)
@ Pi.1415926535: - I've posted all of my comments. Once you address them, the article should be good to go. Bneu2013 ( talk) 06:32, 7 January 2024 (UTC)
was a railroad in Dutchess County and Columbia County, New York, United States.- suggest rewording to something like "was a railroad in Dutchess and Columbia Counties in the U.S. state of New York."
after several mergers, the H&CW, including the ex-R&C, became part of the Central New England Railway (CNE) in 1899.- alternatively, I don't know if "including the ex-R&C is even needed".
Freight service was operated beginning in 1873 even as construction continued eastward.- reword to something like "Freight service began operation in 1873 even as construction continued Eastward". Also, if a more precise date that freight service began is available, I suggest including this. Finally, was the route constructed in sequence from west to east, or were there sections in between that were eventually bridged?
Construction work reached Jackson Corners that October, Mount Ross in November, Gallatinville in May 1874, and Boston Corners in November 1874.- was this when construction began or when the line was completed in those areas?
The bridge was completed in December 1888belongs in the previous paragraph, and
The Poughkeepsie Bridge was built in the late 1880sis a duplicate. You could open the third paragraph with a sentence about when the bridge was finished and that it crossed the Hudson or something like that.
The P&C opened six days later.- should this say "The CNE&W opened six days later."
The CNE struggled along for five years until the New Haven obtained control in early 1904.- reword to something like "The railroad continued to struggle under the CNE until the New Haven obtained control in early 1904."
The New Haven terminated passenger service on the CNE system in Connecticut in late 1927available, considering the following sentence?
and the maximum altitude was 800 feet (240 m)- also suggest changing "altitude" to "elevation", since the former is more commonly used to refer to points above the surface of the earth. Also, I'm guessing 800 feet is the elevation above mean sea level, right?
|via=Google Books
to citation 2, 22, 26, 32, 33, 34.|via=HathiTrust Digital Library
to citation 30.|via=David Rumsey Historical Map Collection