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Nominator: Amir Ghandi ( talk · contribs) 07:33, 7 December 2023 (UTC) reply

Reviewer: Aintabli ( talk · contribs) 01:21, 19 April 2024 (UTC) reply

This has been waiting for so long. I may be able to give my full attention to this review in mid-May. If that happens, sorry beforehand. Aintabli ( talk) 01:21, 19 April 2024 (UTC) reply

Thanks in advance for reviewing it, and don't worry about tarrying, the article can wait a little bit more. Amir Ghandi ( talk) 05:44, 19 April 2024 (UTC) reply

Lead

• I would remove "important" (located in the second sentence).

Done

• showed courage by subduing, subdued is enough for the lead in my opinion.

Done

• Reza Qoli kept the peace intact but in doing so he was cruel, demanding taxes and executing people for mere crimes. Suggest Reza Qoli ensured peace through harsh measures when collecting taxes and executing people for petty crimes.

Done

• Upon further look, executed feels much better. Aintabli ( talk) 20:31, 25 April 2024 (UTC) reply

• You may remove once full of love, slowly. Aintabli ( talk) 01:21, 19 April 2024 (UTC) reply

Done

• In 1742, Nader was assassinated but survived the attack. He suspected Reza Qoli to be behind the assassination and thus had him blinded, but once the deed was done, he regretted his action and sought his son's forgiveness. Pretty confusing. If Nader Shah was assassinated, how did he survive the attack? My guess is there was an assassination "attempt". Then, it can be made more concise: Although he later regretted it, Nader blinded Reza Qoli after suspecting him to be behind an assassination attempt. Aintabli ( talk) 20:31, 25 April 2024 (UTC) reply

Done

Childhood and adolescence

• his father was Nader Qoli Beg Afshar, the future Nader Shah This could be a separate sentence. And you may consider changing this to His father was [[Nader Shah|Nader Qoli Beg Afshar]], the future [[Shah]] of Iran. You could also link "Shah of Iran" to List of monarchs of Persia.

Done

• Please add regnal dates after mentioning rulers such as Nader Shah using {{reign}} ( Template:reign).
• Nader remarried by marrying her younger sister, Gowhar Shad, with whom he had two sons. Change remarried by marrying to married.

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• I believe the second paragraph goes into too much detail that doesn't really concern Reza Qoli. Could you make it more concise? The chronology is also quite confusing. If you feel like you have to, you should mention that Reza Qoli's father Nader Shah was stationed in Mazandaran before he came to Mashhad. But if Reza Qoli was not with Nader in Mazandaran, I believe it can be removed. Was Nader in Mashhad amidst the conflict with the Hotakis? This paragraph and the last sentence of the first paragraph needs serious restructuring for clarity.

Reworked it, any thoughts?

The article still does not follow a linear chronology. Before fast forwarding to 1726, when they moved to Mashhad, you can mention that Hotakis invaded parts of Iran as you have done, and then clarify that Nader Shah conquered Mashhad during those struggles and moved there with Reza Qoli along with the rest of his family.

I would also change (shorten) this portion: Tahmasp II, the Safavid pretender (r. 1729–1732), was impressed by Nader's victory at Mashhad and appointed him as his commander-in-chief. Nader became known as Tamasp Qoli (servant of Tahmasp) and led the Safavid armies through numerous victories, eventually defeating the Hotak army in Battle of Zarghan in 1730. To: Impressed by Nader's victory at Mashhad, Tahmasp II, the Safavid pretender (r. 1729–1732), appointed him as his commander-in-chief. Nader led the Safavid armies through numerous victories, eventually defeating the Hotak army in Battle of Zarghan in 1730. Nader's new name is not so relevant when it comes to his son's article in my opinion. Aintabli ( talk) 14:48, 25 April 2024 (UTC) reply

• Done. Amir Ghandi ( talk)

  Amir Ghandi ( talk) 13:33, 26 April 2024 (UTC) reply

• This sub-section could be renamed to "Early life" as that is what I have encountered most frequently in other articles. But let me know if you have a different opinion. Aintabli ( talk) 19:36, 22 April 2024 (UTC) reply

Done

• Mentioning where Abiward, Mashhad and various other cities are located might be useful for the readers. You could also create a custom location map if there are no other good maps to use. Similarly, you can briefly explain who Afshars were in the same sentence.
• After his uncle, Ebrahim Khan, failed to subdue the rebels, Reza Qoli sent a letter to Nader, telling him of the situation. Suggest Reza's uncle, Ebrahim Khan, failed to subdue the rebels. When Reza Qoli informed Nader of the situation through a letter, Nader requested Reza to hold on within the city as he was on his way to the east.
• Immediately, the Abdalis withdrew from Mashhad and went back to Herat. Thus, the city was saved. Immediately when? Is it the arrival of Nader? Aintabli ( talk) 21:47, 2 May 2024 (UTC) reply

Images

• I will definitely take a look at the other images, but this one caught my eye, and I wanted to leave a note in case I forget it. It reads as if the title of the miniature is Nadir Shah appoints his son Riza Quli Mirza as Prince Regent before leaving for India, but in reality, this is just the description. Therefore, there is no need to italicize it. Please remove the italics, rearrange the caption as you like, and adjust the spelling (Nadir→Nader, etc.) in accordance with the rest of the article. Aintabli ( talk) 19:42, 22 April 2024 (UTC) reply

Done