Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week.
Some Dude From North Carolina (
talk) 23:14, 6 July 2021 (UTC)reply
Add wikilinks for writers, directors, and producers since this is their first mention apart from the lead.
#Development says Paul Briggs was a co-director but the lead says otherwise. Clarify.
"the film is untitled at the time" → "the film was untitled at the time"
Done
This source doesn't mention "August 24, 2019" or the "D23 Expo Walt Disney Animation Studios' presentation panel".
"Variety reported" - this is a lie. Their own source even says: "Entertainment Weekly first reported the news".
"Don Hall (director of Winnie the Pooh and Big Hero 6) and" → "
Don Hall, director of Winnie the Pooh (2011) and Big Hero 6 (2014), and"
Done
Put Blindspotting in italics and add "(2018)" in front of it.
Done
"based off" - should this be written as "based on"?
Done
"quippiness" - not a word.
Actually, #Production doesn't feel right.
Is there a reason #Development and #Casting can't be merged?
Done
We go from "August 24, 2019" to "August 2, 2019" to "August 27, 2020" as a result of the current ordering.
This source is about Cassie Steele being recast but it's first used in #Development to mention the directors as if that was the main topic being "reported". There is also a tendency to specify dates when "In [Month] [Year]" is already enough, and also publishers ("Deadline Hollywood said this, The Hollywood Reporter said that" becomes repetitive). This entire section should be rewritten for clarity.
The critical response section only includes 4 individual reviews in its second paragraph. Per
WP:RECEPTION, try adding more reviews while also lowering the use of "A said B".
@
Wingwatchers: could you put {{done}} or such under the things you've done to make it more easy to navigate? Thanks.
Pamzeis (
talk) 01:53, 8 July 2021 (UTC)reply
Some references still need to be adjusted for
WP:QWQ. Additionally, the production section is also still out of place, using specific dates that are later out of order and become confusing for readers.
Some Dude From North Carolina (
talk) 00:52, 9 July 2021 (UTC)reply
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week.
Some Dude From North Carolina (
talk) 23:14, 6 July 2021 (UTC)reply
Add wikilinks for writers, directors, and producers since this is their first mention apart from the lead.
#Development says Paul Briggs was a co-director but the lead says otherwise. Clarify.
"the film is untitled at the time" → "the film was untitled at the time"
Done
This source doesn't mention "August 24, 2019" or the "D23 Expo Walt Disney Animation Studios' presentation panel".
"Variety reported" - this is a lie. Their own source even says: "Entertainment Weekly first reported the news".
"Don Hall (director of Winnie the Pooh and Big Hero 6) and" → "
Don Hall, director of Winnie the Pooh (2011) and Big Hero 6 (2014), and"
Done
Put Blindspotting in italics and add "(2018)" in front of it.
Done
"based off" - should this be written as "based on"?
Done
"quippiness" - not a word.
Actually, #Production doesn't feel right.
Is there a reason #Development and #Casting can't be merged?
Done
We go from "August 24, 2019" to "August 2, 2019" to "August 27, 2020" as a result of the current ordering.
This source is about Cassie Steele being recast but it's first used in #Development to mention the directors as if that was the main topic being "reported". There is also a tendency to specify dates when "In [Month] [Year]" is already enough, and also publishers ("Deadline Hollywood said this, The Hollywood Reporter said that" becomes repetitive). This entire section should be rewritten for clarity.
The critical response section only includes 4 individual reviews in its second paragraph. Per
WP:RECEPTION, try adding more reviews while also lowering the use of "A said B".
@
Wingwatchers: could you put {{done}} or such under the things you've done to make it more easy to navigate? Thanks.
Pamzeis (
talk) 01:53, 8 July 2021 (UTC)reply
Some references still need to be adjusted for
WP:QWQ. Additionally, the production section is also still out of place, using specific dates that are later out of order and become confusing for readers.
Some Dude From North Carolina (
talk) 00:52, 9 July 2021 (UTC)reply