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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien ( talk · contribs) 16:28, 27 August 2023 (UTC) reply

I'll have a review written for this article some time today. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 16:28, 27 August 2023 (UTC) reply

Cherrell410 & GustavoCza: I've reviewed the article, and significant issues turned up. First, it appears that the article was not copyedited or organized before it was nominated; there are grammatical and structural errors throughout, and some of the content should be reordered. Second, it seems that the article does not closely follow the sources: this is bad at the best of times, but it's particularly a problem for a BLP. These are things that should always be checked before nominating, and either one of these issues is enough to say that the article still needs significant work before it's ready for GA. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 00:16, 28 August 2023 (UTC) reply

Well-written

• is an English professional – Is "professional" the job title that he's described with by the sources?
• of handling alone an occupation – Needs rewording
• They have been friends since 13 years old and were on a band of soul and R&B covers – There are multiple grammatical errors in this sentence.
• He enrolled on a Classical Studies degree – How do you enroll "on" a degree?
• While in college, Harvey used to work at local nightclubs – This would mean that he had already stopped working for them by the time he had gotten to college.
• Info on his early life is disorganized. He's 13 and he's a sound engineer for "The Rockin' Honkies", and then suddenly he's enrolling and then dropping out of college to become Coldplay's manager. What year did he enroll in college? Did Coldplay already exist? Then in the next section we go back to him being in college, and then back to him being manager of Coldplay and dealing with "Camden promoters" with no indication of when these things happened or how they relate to each other.
• while the event is considered when Harvey began to manage the band – This does not make sense.
• eventually dropping out of university to dedicate himself to the role entirely – Didn't this already happen?
• They later wrote the song "Brothers & Sisters" – Who is "they"? Did Harvey write it with someone? Or was it written by the rest of the band without Harvey?
• Harvey carried out his role single-handedly until early 2001 – The article doesn't specify what he's actually doing for Coldplay at this point.
• He also affirmed the 21st Brit Awards was his lowest point – Is "affirmed" the right word here?
• he returned as the band's friend – This then lists a bunch of things that he did. Are these responsibilities different than what he did as manager?
• It's not clear what role he had for the albums in the discography section. Are these just albums released by Coldplay while he was the manager?
• It might be a good idea to move Wild & Croft (2018) out of further reading into its own sources section, even if it's the only thing there.

Verifiable with no original research

All sources appear generally reliable.

Spot checks:

• McCormick (2022) Y
• Roberts (2018): On the verge of starting a NHS training as a clinical psychologist is close paraphrasing of I was on the verge of starting my training with the NHS as a clinical psychologist
• McClain (2019): a Classical Studies degree at Trinity College, Oxford – Where does this source say he attended Trinity College as opposed to one of the other Oxford colleges?
• Owens (2016): The source says that Wilkinson stayed until 2006, and then Harvey came back. Also, where does it support and dedicate himself to personal endeavours?
• Hefferman (2008): His bandmates have described him as "the wise, handsome, frightening one who tells us what to do". – This is not the quote. An article cannot alter quotes and change who said them out of convenience.
• Twitter: The couple have three children – This confirms that Phil has three sons, but it's possible that he had at least one before meeting Yasmin, and it's possible that he has daughters that aren't mentioned.
• James (2009): named the organization's vice-president – Technically the source says "vice chair".

The spot checks turned up some issues. I suggest going through the article and making sure that the sources all confirm everything that they're supposed to confirm. A BLP especially should not have any discrepancies with the sources.

Broad in its coverage

The article does not give much attention to his actual role as manager or what he did for the band. Most of the article is about when he wasn't a manager, and a lot of the content about being manager is about how much he disliked it.

Neutral

No ideas are given undue weight. The article does not use subjective language.

Stable

No recent disputes.

Illustrated

The infobox image is Creative Commons. I'm not convinced as to whether the image from Christmas Lights is sufficiently essential that it justified non-free use.

is an English professional – fixed.

Roberts (2018): fixed.

McClain (2019): fixed.

Owens (2016): fixed. His personal endeavours were going college and volunteering at Upbeat.

Hefferman (2008): fixed.

Twitter: fan sources state his children were with Yasmin, but those can't be used as reference, so I put this tweet instead.

James (2009): fixed.

You have to guide me properly when it comes to rephrasing and grammar, English is not my first language. Also, here's the timeline of events since you seem confused:

• Harvey is a childhood friend of Chris, there's not much information on his early years.
• Coldplay was formed in 1997 at University College London, their first performances happened in January 1998.
• They were an unsigned band at that point, with no manager either, so they had to deal directly with Camden promoters.
• Harvey, who was studying at Trinity College at the time, suggested the Dingwalls gig, he says in the source it's when he began to manage Coldplay.
• He later dropped out his course at Trinity College to dedicate himself completely to management.
• After Coldplay finished recording A Rush of Blood to the Head (released in 2002), he left the band.
• During his time away he got a degree at University of Melbourne.
• He returned to the band in 2006 and is considered to help "fill the gaps", creative director is just a formalization.
• Creative director has been his sole official role from 2006 all the way to 2022, where he became manager again, so his role as manager is essentially five out of the last 25 years.

GustavoCza ( talk • contribs) 01:11, 28 August 2023 (UTC) reply

As for his roles on each album, I own all their CDs and just checked:

• Parachutes – manager.
• A Rush of Blood to the Head – the liner notes just have him under "Coldplay".
• X&Y – "Wise words by Phil Harvey".
• Viva la Vida, Mylo Xyloto, Ghost Stories and A Head Full of Dreams – the liner notes just have him under "Coldplay".
• Everyday Life – "Managed by Dave Holmes. Co-piloted by Mandi Frost and Phil Harvey", then he is listed under "Coldplay" too.
• Music of the Spheres – the liner notes just have him under "Coldplay".

His role doesn't really encompass formalities, the band once said he is the person inside the band who gets an outside perspective and that basically help them creatively. Considering the credits I guess X&Y could be removed, but his absence shaped the album creatively as much as his presence on other albums. GustavoCza ( talk • contribs) 01:36, 28 August 2023 (UTC) reply

Even if the examples that I listed are corrected, there's a broader issue in this article where it does not follow the sources. It's also important that an article be copy edited before it's submitted to GA. I'm going to close the review so these problems can be addressed. If help with copy editing is needed, the guild of copy editors has resources and editors that can help. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 16:55, 28 August 2023 (UTC) reply