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Reviewer: Caeciliusinhorto ( talk · contribs) 21:46, 10 January 2023 (UTC)
I will review this article. Initial comments soon.
Caeciliusinhorto (
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- Okay, this is a relatively short article which feels like there ought to be more to say about the subject given her recency, but having looked for sources I'm not seeing anything.
- The sources cited are adequately reliable, and the prose is fine. I don't see any obvious issues with neutrality and there's no problem with stability. However, I am seeing on the one hand some uncomfortably close paraphrasing, and on the other some claims which aren't quite supported by the sources.
- Close paraphrasing: see, for instance
Due to her mother keeping goats and other animals, Ward has enjoyed animals since she was a child
(source: "Nina Ward has loved animals from an early date, since her mother kept goats and a variety of other animals");After her parents were divorced when Ward was three years old, her mother brought Ward and her brother to Santa Barbara, California
(source: "When she was three, her parents divorced and her mother brought Nina and her brother to Santa Barbara") - Unverified claims:
Ward moved to Cedar Falls, Iowa, in 1975 to teach art at the University of Northern Iowa
: the source doesn't say that Ward moved to Cedar Falls to teach;a "fairly sandy raku clay recipe" that she made herself
: the source says that Ward mixes the clay herself, not that she developed the recipe herself.
- Close paraphrasing: see, for instance
- Other, more minor points:
- Consider wikilinking soft sculpture: I had not heard the term before, and I expect many readers will be unfamiliar with it
- Is her trusteeship of the Happy Valley Foundation really important to mention? Does any source other than the Happy Valley Foundation itself mention it?
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Caeciliusinhorto (
talk) 20:09, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
- Caeciliusinhorto I thought so too about the length of the article until I did many more searches. I will get to work on the article. SL93 ( talk) 20:14, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
- Caeciliusinhorto I think I took care of the issues. Thanks for taking the time to review and copy-edit the article. SL93 ( talk) 20:30, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
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Caeciliusinhorto Any other issues?
SL93 (
talk) 19:56, 15 January 2023 (UTC)
- Had another comb through the article, and it's all looking good now. The direct quotations are all properly attributed and verifiable, and all of the verification and close paraphrasing concerns I had have been fixed. Congratulations – I will pass this now Caeciliusinhorto ( talk) 20:24, 17 January 2023 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Caeciliusinhorto ( talk · contribs) 21:46, 10 January 2023 (UTC)
I will review this article. Initial comments soon.
Caeciliusinhorto (
talk) 21:46, 10 January 2023 (UTC)
- Okay, this is a relatively short article which feels like there ought to be more to say about the subject given her recency, but having looked for sources I'm not seeing anything.
- The sources cited are adequately reliable, and the prose is fine. I don't see any obvious issues with neutrality and there's no problem with stability. However, I am seeing on the one hand some uncomfortably close paraphrasing, and on the other some claims which aren't quite supported by the sources.
- Close paraphrasing: see, for instance
Due to her mother keeping goats and other animals, Ward has enjoyed animals since she was a child
(source: "Nina Ward has loved animals from an early date, since her mother kept goats and a variety of other animals");After her parents were divorced when Ward was three years old, her mother brought Ward and her brother to Santa Barbara, California
(source: "When she was three, her parents divorced and her mother brought Nina and her brother to Santa Barbara") - Unverified claims:
Ward moved to Cedar Falls, Iowa, in 1975 to teach art at the University of Northern Iowa
: the source doesn't say that Ward moved to Cedar Falls to teach;a "fairly sandy raku clay recipe" that she made herself
: the source says that Ward mixes the clay herself, not that she developed the recipe herself.
- Close paraphrasing: see, for instance
- Other, more minor points:
- Consider wikilinking soft sculpture: I had not heard the term before, and I expect many readers will be unfamiliar with it
- Is her trusteeship of the Happy Valley Foundation really important to mention? Does any source other than the Happy Valley Foundation itself mention it?
-
Caeciliusinhorto (
talk) 20:09, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
- Caeciliusinhorto I thought so too about the length of the article until I did many more searches. I will get to work on the article. SL93 ( talk) 20:14, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
- Caeciliusinhorto I think I took care of the issues. Thanks for taking the time to review and copy-edit the article. SL93 ( talk) 20:30, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
-
Caeciliusinhorto Any other issues?
SL93 (
talk) 19:56, 15 January 2023 (UTC)
- Had another comb through the article, and it's all looking good now. The direct quotations are all properly attributed and verifiable, and all of the verification and close paraphrasing concerns I had have been fixed. Congratulations – I will pass this now Caeciliusinhorto ( talk) 20:24, 17 January 2023 (UTC)