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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien ( talk · contribs) 23:04, 22 August 2023 (UTC)
I'll have a review posted for this within the next couple days.
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Ergo Sum, the review is posted below. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 04:32, 23 August 2023 (UTC)
Really well written. I usually have more notes than this. I also made a few minor copy edits myself.
As there was insufficient time to formally select a new rector, a lengthy process, before the start of classes in autumn, Russo was appointed the vice-rector and seventh president, to temporarily administer the institution– The length and number of commas here affect readability. There are a few sentences like this where it could be rewritten to flow better, but this is the one that stands out.
He also lectured on Catholicism and published a book on the subject– Could we change this to "and his second book was published on the subject" or something similar? Since I hadn't seen the word "second", I was confused when he published his third book.
it was found he had pneumonia with complications– Is "pneumonia with complications" the best way to describe the diagnosis?
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compromising philosophy lectures he had delivered to students.
Covers his entire life. I'd be interested in seeing if there's any material on religious beliefs he held or any notable teachings, but that's beyond GA, if it even exists.
No ideas are given undue weight, and no ideas are portrayed in a positive or negative light. I had to consider With that, Russo gave up a successful career in academia and spent the rest of his life ministering to poor Italian immigrants in New York City
, but I don't think reads as too laudatory.
No recent disputes, and the information in the article is unlikely to significantly change.
Both images have acceptable licenses and captions. Note that there's a marginally higher quality version of the Little Italy image at File:NYC Mulberry Street 3g04637u.jpg.
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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien ( talk · contribs) 23:04, 22 August 2023 (UTC)
I'll have a review posted for this within the next couple days.
Thebiguglyalien (
talk) 23:04, 22 August 2023 (UTC)
Ergo Sum, the review is posted below. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 04:32, 23 August 2023 (UTC)
Really well written. I usually have more notes than this. I also made a few minor copy edits myself.
As there was insufficient time to formally select a new rector, a lengthy process, before the start of classes in autumn, Russo was appointed the vice-rector and seventh president, to temporarily administer the institution– The length and number of commas here affect readability. There are a few sentences like this where it could be rewritten to flow better, but this is the one that stands out.
He also lectured on Catholicism and published a book on the subject– Could we change this to "and his second book was published on the subject" or something similar? Since I hadn't seen the word "second", I was confused when he published his third book.
it was found he had pneumonia with complications– Is "pneumonia with complications" the best way to describe the diagnosis?
Spot checks:
compromising philosophy lectures he had delivered to students.
Covers his entire life. I'd be interested in seeing if there's any material on religious beliefs he held or any notable teachings, but that's beyond GA, if it even exists.
No ideas are given undue weight, and no ideas are portrayed in a positive or negative light. I had to consider With that, Russo gave up a successful career in academia and spent the rest of his life ministering to poor Italian immigrants in New York City
, but I don't think reads as too laudatory.
No recent disputes, and the information in the article is unlikely to significantly change.
Both images have acceptable licenses and captions. Note that there's a marginally higher quality version of the Little Italy image at File:NYC Mulberry Street 3g04637u.jpg.