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I don't want to be rude, but this seems to read more like a memorial than an encyclopedic article. I don't think this case has the prominence in history that, for example, the Yvonne Fletcher shooting has, so I am questioning the value of its inclusion. I'm not saying that this article should necessarily be deleted, but in its current form it comprises of mainly unremarkable information. I also have a major problem with this line:
"The aim of the trust is to erect memorials to police officers killed in the line of duty, on the spot where they met their death, thereby acting as a permanent reminder – to the public they serve – of their sacrifice"
This language is too emotive - specifically the last bit. It is inappropriate in the context of a wikipedia article. Will be editing this. 194.202.43.43 16:07, 10 March 2006 (UTC)
This article is about Brian Bishop. The following sentence:
'The trust's objective is to erect memorials to British police officers killed in the line of duty, on the spot where they met their death, thereby acting as a permanent reminder – to the public they served – of the sacrifice they made.'
is about the Police Memorial Trust. It is also, more or less, copied straight from the PMT's page. In the interests clarity and quality, and also to save wikipedia's server space, articles should not lose focus of their subjects, and should not repeat information from other pages. The use of an internal link should suffice in this case.
Further to this, I still believe the language is not well chosen. Words like 'sacrifice' and references to 'serving the public', are emotive and POV.
And finally, it is not a very well constructed sentence. It is clunky, and flows badly. Beerathon 12:42, 6 April 2006 (UTC)
I concur with the opinion - with all due respect to a man serving the community, the only noteworthy part left is PMT monument. The rest applies to all people bearing the burden of being a police officer. As the PMT article is a small one to I propose this one to be merged in it. -- Goldie (tell me) 14:01, 11 April 2006 (UTC)
No consensus, therefore template removed. Phase4 20:37, 29 June 2006 (UTC)
Was his murderer caught? Clarityfiend 20:04, 21 February 2007 (UTC)
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I don't want to be rude, but this seems to read more like a memorial than an encyclopedic article. I don't think this case has the prominence in history that, for example, the Yvonne Fletcher shooting has, so I am questioning the value of its inclusion. I'm not saying that this article should necessarily be deleted, but in its current form it comprises of mainly unremarkable information. I also have a major problem with this line:
"The aim of the trust is to erect memorials to police officers killed in the line of duty, on the spot where they met their death, thereby acting as a permanent reminder – to the public they serve – of their sacrifice"
This language is too emotive - specifically the last bit. It is inappropriate in the context of a wikipedia article. Will be editing this. 194.202.43.43 16:07, 10 March 2006 (UTC)
This article is about Brian Bishop. The following sentence:
'The trust's objective is to erect memorials to British police officers killed in the line of duty, on the spot where they met their death, thereby acting as a permanent reminder – to the public they served – of the sacrifice they made.'
is about the Police Memorial Trust. It is also, more or less, copied straight from the PMT's page. In the interests clarity and quality, and also to save wikipedia's server space, articles should not lose focus of their subjects, and should not repeat information from other pages. The use of an internal link should suffice in this case.
Further to this, I still believe the language is not well chosen. Words like 'sacrifice' and references to 'serving the public', are emotive and POV.
And finally, it is not a very well constructed sentence. It is clunky, and flows badly. Beerathon 12:42, 6 April 2006 (UTC)
I concur with the opinion - with all due respect to a man serving the community, the only noteworthy part left is PMT monument. The rest applies to all people bearing the burden of being a police officer. As the PMT article is a small one to I propose this one to be merged in it. -- Goldie (tell me) 14:01, 11 April 2006 (UTC)
No consensus, therefore template removed. Phase4 20:37, 29 June 2006 (UTC)
Was his murderer caught? Clarityfiend 20:04, 21 February 2007 (UTC)
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